[Report This]Date: November 16 2015 6:29 PM Title: Alpha
Hey, first of all, glad you are back. I got worried for some time. Nonetheless, you are back.
First of all, I'm not quite sure if that's a showdown. I mean, sure it was two people having a verbal showdown, but I kinda expected it to be bigger. Then again, it would be probably more difficult to have a multi person showdown with multiple women.
Janine said a lot of cruel stuff. Always one step ahead she is. Of her mother, of Tess, and now Miss Addison.
I have no idea about half the things that Janine said, but it sounded scary, the way it sounded official.
So Tom is back with Janine. Miss Addison's adventure with Tom was short timed just like Tess and Sam.
Perhaps this is a good time to catch up on the Lindholm residence. Is the father still there? How long will he be there? Has Lina figured it out? What did Janine say that made Francis arrive? So many questions about that phone call earlier that I want to know!
Then we have Tess. She thinks it's Miss Addison too. Is this going to be a cat and mouse game? Will Tess ask Miss Addison about Tom too. Lol. Miss Addison will be freaked about how many girls know she had Tom.
Last of all, Miss Addison. What will she do? Will she kidnap another boy from school? (Ok, that won't happen, but I had to suggest it.) Will she report Janine of kidnapping? Or even better, will she call Lina? Now that could be interesting.
Next chapter could be anything and I am ready for it. I can't wait!
Author's Response:
Hey Tom, life sometimes gets in the way of writing and that causes some delay in providing updates. Janine is like Ilsa, She-Wolf of the SS and there was no way Miss Addison was prepared for her. I have moved Tom around a lot and fairly quickly to try and keep it interesting, but he may be in some trouble now she has her talons on him again, we'll see...
[Report This]Date: November 16 2015 5:59 PM Title: Alpha
Miss Addison has met her match...and that match will now give Tom an unbearably hot time in the old town, tonight.
[Report This]Date: November 10 2015 10:53 AM Title: All Day Detention
@ Tom Speedy:
And I predict that the showdown will involve Our Little Hero falling off his "perch" during some bathroom break. Only to be found by Tatiana and/or Astrid!
[Report This]Date: November 09 2015 9:16 PM Title: All Day Detention
So Mrs Adison huh, did not see that coming. I mean I knew Janine didnt swallow him but dang it, now you got me wanting her to have a snack.
I like how Adison is putting Tom in his place and how you added some descriptions of Toms discomfort. I noted that in the beginning of this story on how its more realistic to show Tom being a little worse for wear after what would be some uncomfortable situations. Good job!
Date: November 09 2015 8:29 PM Title: All Day Detention
Tom or Michael should be tapped to the toilet seat or toilet bowl (just above the water) of the girl's/women's washroom. At school or at home. Best author I've ever read!
Author's Response:
Thaks for the review, we'll see which direction this story takes. As for Michael, he too is in over his head and who knows whether or not he's going to spend some time in the bowl. Thanks for the praise considering there are some wickedly talented authors sharing their tales on the site. Hope you continue to enjoy!
[Report This]Date: November 09 2015 1:36 PM Title: All Day Detention
This chapter seems like a setup for the next one.
Obviously, you mentioned "Next chapter-Showdown!" So I'm hyped about it.
My prediction: Jane, Tess, Sam, (Lina shows up, or even Miss Harwood shows up) all confront Miss Addison. Janine will feel her up becuase she is that desperate. Miss Addison mentions suspension but Janine brings up some blackmail. Tess is going "wtf no, he's mine". Janine fires back that Tom is her present and then all of a sudden the principal walks in. She orders them all to her office and after a bunch of the principal keeps Tom. Every woman disagrees, but the principal demands that everyone leaves. The principal looks at Tom and talks about how if she was younger, she would love to go out with him. Miss Harwood shows up with some good news for the principal and the principal decides to go out and celebrate tonight. She thanks Miss Harwood and decides to reward her with Tom. Miss Harwood gladly accepts and mixed emotions go through him. (Fear, arousal). Miss Harwood then seduces Tom and gets him to cum. Miss Harwood then asks for him to make her cum and puts him in her panties. Tom reluctantly accepts but claims that it is better than Miss Addison.
That is my version of the showdown.
Hope it happens! I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: November 09 2015 1:01 PM Title: All Day Detention
Even more ironic than Tom's unintended pun? "Pandora" translates as "all-gift." So, it could be said that he's trapped in a gift box!*
*Similar to how Janine deliberately misinterpreted his presence, at her birthday party, as wanting to be one of her presents! ;-D
[Report This]Date: November 05 2015 9:36 PM Title: Tom - Thursday
"Days and weeks to come?" Uh-oh! That's definitely not good! It means she does NOT intend to return him, to Tess, anytime soon.
Or, at least, not until he's been brainwashed worse than the Manchurian Candidate.
Author's Response:
I was thinking maybe a little Clockwork Orange :0
[Report This]Date: November 05 2015 9:27 PM Title: Tess & Sam
LOL! Charlie's Angels meet Sherlock Holmes, these three. A great chapter, full of very plausible character development!
Author's Response:
Thank you. Like Nancy Drew except gigantic and in a couple of cases, with ulterior motives
[Report This]Date: November 05 2015 8:00 PM Title: Tom - Thursday
These are my first impressions of the last 2 chapters. I will have a more detailed review later.
No way that Tess and Sam could've figure out that the music got some ones attention and also guessed Miss Addison just like that. Seems very unlikely.
Jane figured it out with Tatiana's help. Now she knows. Is she going to blackmail Miss Addison? Seems like it.
Miss Addison is beyond creepy now. She took him home, and looks like she is about to conduct experiments or some shit. Might even be a dominatrix. She is crazy now.
Miss Harwood seems like a future giantess in this story. Perhaps Tom can get a visit from her? I want them to meet. Miss Addison doesn't seem as sexy as I would've hoped for.
That's all I got for now. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Miss Harwood is exactly what you want her to be achingly hot still young and full of so much knowledge she could share. Whether or not she gets a Crack at Tom remains to be seen. Undecided at this time.
Date: November 05 2015 7:35 PM Title: Unexpected Company
Did you just add 2 chapters at once? I'm impressed amongst everything else you managed.
Author's Response:
Yes 2 chapters to try and get to the showdown sooner before I lose reader interest
[Report This]Date: November 02 2015 9:23 PM Title: Unexpected Company
@ Tom Speedy: I think Ms. Addison is going to prove the hottest disciplinarian since Tiny Dan's Zavia Tavar Lahrenger.
;-)
[Report This]Date: November 02 2015 7:06 PM Title: Unexpected Company
First of all, what just happened?
That was my reaction when Miss Addison decided to show up. I mean, of all people, her? Yes, I have always wanted a teacher to find him, but wow, this is defiantly a surprise.
You said "dragging him down to the office and exposing the situation to the headmistress" twice near the middle of the chapter.
Addison is a great name. Glad you chose it.
I just want everyone to know that Miss Addison is the teacher that scolded Tess and Janine earlier in the story. She is not a random teacher.
I think it's funny how Miss Addison was able to connect the dots and figure out that Tom is a naughty boy.
The vocabulary is strong in Miss Addison. Gives off a nice "well educated" background about her.
Wow, so she just put him in there and trapped him? Im already liking her. I doubt she would pass Lina's sexual demeanor, but let's hope she is in the same league as Ms. Mackenzie!
Oh boy, I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: November 02 2015 5:58 PM Title: Unexpected Company
OK! Congratulations; you fooled me. No way I could've anticipated one of his teachers. Let alone, a disciplinarian for whom Tom's imminent lessons in "order" will be as much forbidden pleasure as empowering punishment.
[Report This]Date: October 29 2015 8:27 PM Title: Confrontation
Then, it's got to be Astrid.
[Report This]Date: October 29 2015 6:37 PM Title: Confrontation
Hmmm, not Tanitia you say. Maybe Tomspeedy guessed it, hes up Janines bum, heehee.
It was somedody who scared him, obvious choice is Janine but I think you are going to make us wait a little longer for Janine. Tell you this, if its not Janine, I think Tom is in even more danger than if it was.
Author's Response:
Another possibility no one has really thrown out there is maybe Janine swallowed him... :O
[Report This]Date: October 29 2015 2:08 PM Title: Confrontation
Haha, Tess checked Janine pretty good, but not good enough. If we know Janine, he is probably in the back of her underwear, inside her vagina, or even inside her asshole.
I still think it is Janine. She is just straight up lying so the accusations don't go to her. Also, it makes Tess less likely to suspect Janine of taking him.
What ever happened to Tom, we at least know Janine is responsible whether she took him or not. (I'm pretty sure she did.)
This Tatiana thing is just a hoax for us to believe that there are more possibilities. Janine's plan is too clever. She went in, got Tom, got Titiana to get her access, and now Tom is hidden.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Muwahaha I know you cant wait, next chapter will answer what happened to Tom,
[Report This]Date: October 28 2015 7:56 PM Title: Confrontation
Supposition #1: Tatiana, being the daughter of a Russian Mob boss, would probably have access to all sorts of ex-KGB surveillance experts. And, if she was secretly obsessed with him even before he shrank, she might've had those same experts bug his family's home! Hence, she wouldn't have had to accidentally find him on the bathroom floor (or overhear him and Sam through an overly convenient air duct) to know of his new existence.
Supposition #2: Lina has sent Marta to bring him back to her. But, the latter will wind up double-crossing the former.
Sorry for the relapse into Tomspeedyitis.
Author's Response:
Attempting to extrapoloate potential avenues of the story are good, it helps me understand how well I'm leading the people reading or in some cases it allows me to see alternative possibilities I had not previously considered. However, nope to both, :P
Date: October 28 2015 7:15 PM Title: Confrontation
Plot twists be like...
Author's Response:
Keep you guessing.
[Report This]Date: October 28 2015 6:57 PM Title: Confrontation
Still going strong with this story mate! Very good, and an ominous mysterious twist which will probably get resolved in the following chapter writen in Tom's pov. Unless his abductor's wearing a mask or acts 'off screen' with him for a bit before the identity is revealed : d
Quite a mystery as to who could've found Tom and abudcted him like that. Were there any hints in earlier chapters to who this character might be and if they know about Tom?
^_^;
Author's Response:
Hmm, no overt clues per se. Here's my guess, - Colonel Mustard, in the library, with the candlesitck, joking! Next chapter will be the reveal, I promise