Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: July 17 2015 9:13 PM Title: Home for the Holidays

Wow, that's a lot of background info.

Let's see if I understand this:

Main guy is Tom. Not much mentioned about his father, but his mother is beautiful.

So Tom has one other sibling, his sister, Teresa(Tess), and she is slightly older than him. Also, she looks like their mother.

They are both in high school along with this other girl named Janine whom Tom is in love it.

Janine has this party coming up, girls only, and Tom really wants to go. (Going to your crush's house is definatley an achievement in his book.)

Tess knows that Tom likes Janine and comes up with crazy ideas to show up there. Tess even teases Tom with her body.

The next scene at the grandfathers house explains how Tom got shrunk. It was a spooky lab that reminded me of a spooky house. (Double dare you story).

Tom shrinks and decides that Tess is the best option to save him.

I like this background. Good characters, main character is already shrunk so fun begins more quickly.

Quick notes: I did not expect Tess to be very involved in the story. I can see how she plays an important role, becuase I think that she will carry Tom to Janine's house and drop him there.

Also, I did not expect Tom's family to be mentioned, becuase I was thinking that if Janine keeps Tom, then the family gets worried and all this complicated stuff happens. I was more expecting that Tom's family be forgotten, but I guess Janine can convince Tom's family that Tom "wants" to live with her, and Tom's family will accept that.

Hmmm. Now that Tess and the rest of Tom's family is involved, it opens other possibilities. Tess can say that a shrunken Tom is easier to smuggle into Janine's party and I think Tom will agree. (He should if he wants Janine).

I want to say a lot more, but I will wait until chapter 3 to see where this is going. I assume that the party is coming up soon, even though it was mentioned at least a week in the first chapter.

The fun will begin at the party. I can't wait for it as well as the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Hey Tom, i wanted to make sure there was a story here to build into your request. The reason for Tess is exactly as you imagine, she can clear the school and parents from wondering where Tom is while acting as a vehicle to get him to the house. hope this is meeting your expectations, after all it was tailored to your request. Cheers.