Date: September 02 2015 2:57 PM Title: Pyrrhic or Otherwise
How does Vera excrete in that cube? Are there any toilet facilites? I know it sounds strange to suddenly bring it up, but it's relevant considering she was just ill. Anyhow, thanks for updating your story.
Author's Response:
I have taken it into consideration actually. There is a drain in the center of the room, almost like a shower. The gate can be lifted and the pipe that drains out carries any and all waste.
Date: September 02 2015 2:07 PM Title: Pyrrhic or Otherwise
Pretty good chapter. I don't have much to say about this one but it kind of felt surreal for some reason. Also, what did Vera mean by "I should have killed you earlier?" Oh man, I hope we at least get the answer to that one.
[Report This]Date: August 31 2015 4:53 PM Title: Falling Through Again
Hah I guess all it took was some liquor for Vera to sing like a canary. Can't wait to see where this goes.
aaron
Date: August 28 2015 6:31 PM Title: Falling Through Again
Write YOUR story as you see it. Disregard the rest of us no joke. You already are changing it, I just hope you are doing so within your limits. And stop making us wait Jeeeezzzzz. NEXT CHAPTER!!!......NOW!!!!! lol
[Report This]Date: August 27 2015 12:54 PM Title: Falling Through Again
Woah, maybe Vera being gassed with this stuff wasn't such a bad idea after all, it does make her easy to manipulate! Although I rather doubt she's gonna be happy about this if she remembers all this when he sobers up! Anyway, another great chapter from you, and this one also was a bit fanservicy too, something I've come to just accept not to get from this story...I'm pleasantly surprised.
Author's Response:
I think shying away from sexual content or at least implied sexual content was something I was really concerned about when I first wrote this. But, knowing that this is a website designed for such content I relented a bit in this chapter. Besides I think it would be natural given the situation. My main reason from keeping away from it at first was because all to often it feels unrealistic. The more I thought about it though the more I came to accept that if you have a young man spending a lot of time with an attractive young woman there will be sexual tension...even if its not explicity stated. So I'm glad you liked it, I was afraid some readers might be so surprised that it would have a negative effect on the writing as a whole. Huzzah!
Date: August 27 2015 9:50 AM Title: Falling Through Again
All that drugged out fun ended with Vera's horrific confession. God, how many did she drown?
Date: August 22 2015 2:02 AM Title: Staying For Now
I just wanted to quietly reiterate my tacit approval of your story. Thank you for writing. Not much else I can or want to say. You're a good writer. Some day soon, I'll begin to contribute a science fiction story of my own; I've had the idea for years but your story is inspiring and it spurs me to continue writing it.
Author's Response:
Thanks again! Im glad you enjoy it so far!
Date: August 21 2015 11:22 PM Title: Staying For Now
You going to delete my review again?
Author's Response:
I didn't delete any comment! If I did I assure you it was an accident. The only explanation I can think of is that I may have accidently hit "report" instead of respond. If that is the case please accept my apology, I am always open to critique both good and bad. Please feel free to post whatever thoughts you may have, and again I'm sorry for the misunderstanding.
Date: August 21 2015 7:13 PM Title: Staying For Now
Whoa. So dark and deep at the end. I almost missed this-almost- and I'm glad I didn't. I loved this chapter!
[Report This]Date: August 21 2015 5:29 PM Title: Staying For Now
Good chapter! Vera, so far hasnt shown any characteristics that seem "otherworldly" or something, I dont think any of these giants have. They wanna screw around and do as they please with creatures smaller than them, and they care about their own lives. The only characteristic they have that humans dont is that they dont care about others, but even this is kinda iffy as to whether they do or not. I dont know, maybe im jumping ths gun here but they arent THAT different from human sociopaths.
Author's Response:
You are correct! I meant for the ending not so much to suggest that they might not be humans but rather that Ellis has no berings to understand them.
Date: August 15 2015 12:52 PM Title: The Sanguine Return
Yuuus! We're back with Vera. The reunion was about as rough as I expected but it was strangely kinda cute too. Vera is such a tsundere! Anyway i look forward to the next chapter, its gonna be interesting how Vera responds now that Ellis has outside info on her and she's under the threat that Ellis may leave again.
Date: August 15 2015 9:10 AM Title: The Sanguine Return
Its all coming down on our heroes but I am guessing Vera and Amora got into something really bad if she assumed Amora was dead. Psyn Corp will probably get them all killed or something to that effect.
Date: August 11 2015 9:55 AM Title: And There it Was...
So it will be back to Vera for the next chapter since Amora won't talk more about the incident with Gurn. Were Vera and her some sort of jealous lovers, fighting over the same guy?
Author's Response:
Their conflict is actually a lot deeper than that. I'm honestly struggling to figure out how I want it to be written. It makes a lot of sense in my head but is not easily explained.
Date: August 10 2015 11:04 PM Title: Nothing Ventured, Mostly Gained
Interesting chapter. For the most part, I can say that Vera is definitely better than most of these giants. She liked animals, scared people but didn't kill them...However, I wonder what this river incident was? Could it have been Vera killing or eating a human? She did mention that she'd tried eating human before, maybe that's when it happened? Also we got some tidbits about the giants here, so this whole thing is just a test to see who becomes God of the giants then? Is that why they have come to Earth and wreak havoc? The questions are killing me man, I can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response:
You're kind of getting close. Its important to remember that most of the giant's really want nothing to do with one another. Its more about feeling like a god than actually becoming one.
[Report This]Date: August 05 2015 11:04 AM Title: Keeping With the Times
YEAH! AN UPDATE!
[Report This]Date: August 03 2015 1:03 PM Title: A New Place, A New Face
You're killin me smalls.......(exaggerated arnold voice) VE NEED MOOR!! DO IT!!! DO IT NOOOOW!!!! :)
[Report This]Date: August 02 2015 11:26 PM Title: A New Place, A New Face
I can safely say after going back and re-reading the first meeting between Ellis and Vera and comparing it to this one that this woman is alot worse. So far, I think Vera is a saint compared to Amora, but this is just my first impression, maybe she's just a bundle of unicorns and rainbows once you really get to know her XD!
Date: July 28 2015 11:22 PM Title: And There it Was...
So Vera reacted like a baby losing its pacifier. I get why, she thinks now that Ellis is gone she will not live for much longer. Very dramatic and I look forward to seeing what will happen, who Bet ( or is it Betty) is and what she will add to the story.
Author's Response:
I guess I should go ahead and clarify that everything procedural in this world is named using different alphabets. All of the "subjects" are named after letters in the Hebrew alphabet as a reference to the nephilim.
Date: July 28 2015 6:35 PM Title: Coming This Way
This story has so many unanswered questions. I in no way want to offer you any criticism you might take as offensive or obtruse to deter your motives for writing more to this.That being said, one of the most difficult aspects of telling any story is the ability to draw the reader in while maintaing an interest. It is truely an art to balance the two based on the timilieness of questions you provide and then the resolution you provide the reader. I am in fact entitled to nothing from you except your own enjoyment in writing this and I do not want to take that away by being impatient. I know you had said you had a 20 chapter map but, I just don't see that (not that I'm complaining). As a reader I would like to see some sort of resolutions made. When I began this chapter I got really excited that some answers were coming. As I read farther along I REALLY hoped Vera was going to offer at least a single crumb to Ellis to sway his interest. ANY answer to keep him hooked. I hope you continue to retain your passion and care in creating this great story for us but with so many unanswered questions what is the story really about? As a reader I'm confused. Maybe the new character, "bet" will be the one who killed his family? My advice would simply be for every three questions you ask at least answer one. But I'm a shitty writer :)
Author's Response:
I appreciate the feedback! Now I will say this much, the vast majority of your questions will be answered and "Bet" will be key to some of them. However, that being said, I do want to warn you that not quite everything will be answered as it may not have relevance to the story at large (or at least as I would see it). Now, that's not to say the major plot points will not be thoroughly discussed. The giant's origins, motivations, and so on will all be revealed however certain bits such as the death of Ellis' parents, the rest of his family, and so on may not be discussed much more. A lot of what I have done in this partiular arc, especially with Ellis, is provided brief views into his life. Much of his personal accounts are there only to make him seem more empathetic. Like I said though, all of the prominent stuff will be covered. Thanks again for following along and do not worry I will take your concerns into serious consideration!
Date: July 24 2015 5:52 PM Title: And They Were Darker Still
Please don't back burner this just as we get some crumbs. And how are we going to know the next one? Vera clone? The Gulliver thing....meh, up to you. You have more than enough talent to tie it in I just hope you do it well.