[Report This]Date: July 10 2015 1:09 PM Title: Domination
Very good so far! Really hoping to see Brianna some more. She seems interesting in my opinion.
[Report This]Date: July 02 2015 9:07 PM Title: Gaby's Chapter
This story was really hot!! Not only was there one beautiful giantess involved ,but there was a second named Gaby.. the well described Giantess is beautifully expressing just how much her size difference is dangerous yet at the same time very attractive.. I seriously recommend reading the first story for a better understanding :) by far my favorite story :)
Author's Response:
Thank you, Slade! :) I really appreciate your loyalty to my story. There will be many other giantesses involved, see you on Thursday!
[Report This]Date: July 02 2015 7:45 PM Title: Gaby's Chapter
These first two chapters were quite enjoyable to read. I especially enjoyed your prose. Your straight to the point when you need to be, diverse in terms of wording, and also flexible enough as an author to make good use of metaphors. tl;dr: You write good.
With all that said and done, I think the characters were the best part. In particular, Mike's interactions with Brianna in the first character struck a cord with me. Jealousy and need for dominance can be attractive features if done correctly. Also, that bit where she lied to him was cute.
Overall, good first story, hope I provided the type of feedback you needed.
Author's Response:
Your review is flattering :) I appreciate hearing what parts you enjoyed and the hearty explanation thereof... I hope you'll be back for the following chapters!
[Report This]Date: June 27 2015 11:17 AM Title: Intentions
The story is amazing:) it provided perfect details about the situation, unlike most stories, this one isnt filled with too much cliche and it makes the reader want to read more.. i certainly cant wait for more :D
Date: June 25 2015 7:30 PM Title: Intentions
Definitely a solid start. I like the way you allow the rules of the magic to blend into the background of the story naturally rather than trying to force in explanations where they don't make sense. The premise leaves plenty of room for fun while still showing that Brianna doesn't intend to inflict permanent harm on Mike; it's a good way to give the characters some realistic texture, rather than everyone just trying to overpower their peers all the time without consequence. If I could make a critique, I'd say right now the narration is playing up the "domination" and "obedience" things harder than it needs to. Show us those things rather than stating it explicitly, so that it comes off more as a trait of the characters rather than something we're told is there. Anyway, you're on a decent roll here, good luck in continuing!
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you for reading and reviewing! I appreciate the compliments and the constructive criticism, I will definitely use it to help me for the rest of the story. I hope you'll be here for Chapter 2. :)