Date: May 18 2015 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 4
Your fourth paragraph is missing its beginning. Could you please correct the missing words?
Date: May 17 2015 5:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
Actually, abc, there IS a leather-making industry in Corinth, Greece. But, you're half-right to the extent that it's no softer than leather made in any other country.
Author's Response:
Thanks Carycomic for some clarification. abc is right though in the context I used it, it was a chrysler marketing ploy. I have amended the story. Cheers
Date: May 16 2015 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
In Chapter 11....
Tbere's no such thing as Corinthian leather. That was a bullshit marketing phrase to sell Chrysler Cordobas in the 1970s.
Also, with all of the similar sounding names, it gets confusing.
Other than light, good so far!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback, I have amended the description. I'm am pleased there are elements to this tale you enjoy!
Date: May 13 2015 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 17
Good story, all around. I really like the ending. Who would want to get their freedom and screw nine literal goddesses on a regular basis?
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback. Yeah, that would be a tough gig!
[Report This]Date: May 13 2015 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 17
Yes! Jack is alive and free!
I would love to see Clarissa have some fun with Jack. Maybe Selene too.
The dreams started to be totally random, but I think now I'm starting to understand it.
This story just keeps getting deeper. Now there's this mind connection with Jack, Garth, and Clarrisa.
I can't believe Abagail just ate her father like that. Sure he didn't love her, but didn't she love him? I didn't see that vore coming.
Now Jack is fullsized, which must mean that they trust him. So if he is free and full-sized, could he just leave? Well, he said he owes Hilde and Selene some time, but other than that it sounds like he is free to go.
Either way, it sounds interesting and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback Tom Speedy. There are several avenues available for me to continue this thread, but for the moment I will more than likely address a couple of other stories I am developing (they will tie back to this story in some way. I hope to have something within the next week or so) Cheers
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 17
WOW!!!!!
If this was your debut story, Duggernaut, it was an epic one. And you are going to find it frigging difficult to equal it. Let alone, top it!
But, don't be scared of trying to do so, anyway. :-)
Author's Response:
Appreciate the props Carycomic. I appreciate that you think I've set the bar high, but it gives me something to strive for. i hope to have something new in the next week or two. Cheers
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 1:25 PM Title: Chapter 16
So, basically, this Garth has commuted Jack's sentence from death-by-digestion to eternal life-without-parole as a sex toy?
Talk about a mixed blessing!
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 14
Abbie? As in, Abigail Halston?! Was she even a member of her misguided father's cult?
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 1:05 PM Title: Chapter 13
I'm betting it's Jack and Halston de Turd who will be the last two shrunken men standing.
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 12:17 PM Title: Chapter 10
Re: chapter end notes.
Lucky for me!
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 8
Whew! These first eight chapters were so intense, I kept right on reading! Which is a rarity for me, as I normally prefer chapter-by-chapter reviews.
You definitely got me for the rest of this story! :-)
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 9:40 AM Title: Chapter 1
But if you could also add some feet and ass to this story then it would be completely perfect!!! :)
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 9:38 AM Title: Chapter 1
This whole story is so damn beautiful!! I'm going to want a sequel after this is over!!
[Report This]Date: May 11 2015 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 14
Please tell me that there is some magic stuff inside Jack that makes him survive.
I want this story to keep going!
It feels like the end, but I can tell it is not.
I still wonder if Jack will meet Clarrisa, after all, it was her house that he robbed.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: May 11 2015 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 12
Wow, so most of these girls devour men as if they are nothing.
I thought this hunt would mean that every girl gets to keep a few tinies. Instead, they get eaten in seconds.
That scene with Selene was incredible. Seducing him before she eats him. That kid probably enjoyed it. Did he even scream?
Jack definitely got a show. I really hope someone gentle finds him.
I wonder how do the girls know when the hunt is over. Is there like a list and each girl tells everyone who they ate or found?
I like how all the tines woke up in a realistic environment. It makes the hunt more realistic and more fun.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you for sharing your enthusiasm for the story. some of your thoughts will be answered in upcoming installments.
[Report This]Date: May 11 2015 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 12
More MORE!! This story is a damn masterpiece!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the props, glad you enjoy!
[Report This]Date: May 10 2015 10:36 PM Title: Chapter 10
So fucking beautiful KEEP GOING!! I'm in love with this story!!
[Report This]Date: May 10 2015 9:59 PM Title: Chapter 10
Loving this one. I'd love to see Clarice swallow him to end it. Something like that's named his punishment anyways, and he asks for it to be her instead of one of the others
Author's Response:
I had originally thought to end the story with Clarice swallowing him but there were still some loose ends that I wanted to use Jack to thread the story through.
[Report This]Date: May 10 2015 9:44 PM Title: Chapter 10
Yes, please more.
This is one of those stories that I wish that keeps going and going.
I love these characters and I wonder if Clarissa gets a chance with Jack.
I can't wait for the next chapter!