Date: September 21 2015 7:19 AM Title: Chapter 12
When do you think to continue this story? It is a fascinating concept, and I would hate to think that there won't be any more... I'm really looking forward to seeing where this is going.
Date: June 21 2015 2:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
I am really glad that there are still stories like this one out there that also actually try to tell a story, have a sense of worldbuilding and are not just blindly catering to the fetish.
Overall the whole concept is rather fascinating, though some elements like the trait transfer thing feel a bit clunky.
It would be interesting to explore how their culture would be influenced if they made contact to a world with humans. Would childrens with wingless men result in more wingless male children? Would they have a higher birthrate then winged males?
You could spin this very far, cultural splits for the giantess and a few generations down the line racism between those descended from wingless and winged males, with some groups probably going so far as wanting to cut contact with any 'tiny' world.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I tend to like a good bit of story and relationship building before moving onto any actual sex. To have it go this far just after three days is a bit fast for me. That and finding ways to strengthen the lady is a big part of the story for me. Even if she's seemingly invulnerable i still want to find ways to increase her power for some reason.
For the trait copying was important for the story as it serves as a reason for why the women don't just rape the men and allows for the women to be strengthened beyond what they already are. It also leaves the question of what things were like when they were smaller and what they may be growing towards.
Now the odds of them going to another world are rather slim. As the story showed they're a lot of issues with that including ethical and practical ones. As for the type of children that these women would have with wingless men if the story is ever continued we should get an idea of that when Ariel has a child with Vincent.
I don't really see that happening. I believe the story at least hinted at that this world, or at least this city, is very dedicated to the idea of advancement. The only way interaction with another world would be seen as a bad thing is if somehow it left the women weaker. If it speeds up their development then it's a good thing.
Date: June 15 2015 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
I mentioned that the height was a personal thought, but it doen't take away from the story. I fully accept your reasoning for the figures you have chosen.
On a different note, I've noticed that you use the word 'set' (and its derivatives) in place of sit, and sat, both of which are active verbs. You might want to study the meaning of each of the three. (I sit now; I sat there yesterday; I set the table with places for four.)
Once again, I enjoy your story, despite the English grammar errors. Keep up the good work!
Date: June 15 2015 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
You have a great story here, but being a technical writer, certain things about your writing tend to be jarring to me. If you don't mind, perhaps a few helpful criticisms could relieve that problem. First: If you would replace the expression 'was made to' with a simple past tense of the associated verb (i.e. -ed, in most cases); next: you frequently use the word 'whenever' in place of the correct word, 'when'. Whenever should only be used when(ever) the event described is repetitive in nature.
Next, on a personal opinion, considering that 627 meters is equivalent to nearly 2,060 feet, a height that would make it virtually impossible that Ariel would have noticed Vincent (at 0.19" tall) lying on the ground where they found him. Moving the decimal one place to the left would have made the size difference so much more realistic, I feel. She is still over 200 feet tall (62.7 meters), which would make Vincent equivalent to almost 2" tall in proportion, and still very difficult for three young women to see on the ground as they passed by, but still very much more likely.
Author's Response:
Thanks but there is no way Ariel is going to be shrinking in size if anything she's meant to grow. She was meant to be large enough that Vincent could comfortably sleep in her belly button. Besides you're assuming that these women are simply large humans. Their senses, fine control and strength to size ratio are well beyond what a human has. If they weren't their bodies would collapse under their own weight. Even for a giantess that stood 80 meters tall she would require a super human nervous system otherwise messages would never get from the limbs to the brain amongst many other things simply to survive. If you want to play the realism card please keep things down to five meters and even at that size there would be issues. Such a person likely wouldn't even feel it if their foot was injured.
Date: June 14 2015 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 11
I'd choose breasts if I were him. This was so much fun to read, seeing Vincent play games while in Ariel's cleavage whilst her fluids fought to be touched by him. The women here really want to be pleasured by their men to the point even their fluids echo it!
The twist that Ariel was actually teaching Vincent is rather surprising, it seems she really wants him as her husband and good thing he doesn't mind having such a giant hottie with him.
I suggest making her fantasy come true, sucking on her nipple to wake her up.
Date: June 07 2015 6:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
Ariel is one awesome chick,I really can't stress that enough.
[Report This]Date: June 06 2015 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 10
This is such a amazing story. I love the direction this is story is taking. I a really want to go read your other stories now that I caught up.
[Report This]Date: June 05 2015 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 10
Another excellent chapter, thanks for keeping up with this! I'm eager to see if the council meeting to decide Vincent's fate will shake things up a bit. Right now it seems as though I could say how things will go with Ariel as the Alpha and her friends as the lessers, but who knows? Either way, you've written a superb story.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comments. I doubt that the committee meeting would change anything or that they'll even be one. Though Vincent would likely be asked to allow himself to be courted for a while to smooth things over politically. For now I doubt that the story is going to reach that point. This is a side story after all and I need to be getting back to Living Metal and Fragile Bindings. Just as importantly though I'm suffering a bit of a burn out. Neither giantesses or super fems truly capture my interest such that I need to switch between the two types of stories to maintain my interest.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 7:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
Absolutely fantastic! Your world building skills are incredible. As I read I was completely sucked into this reality you've crafted. Characters are great so far and there's tons of promise for more. Love, love, love this story.
Date: May 27 2015 8:20 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very sexy stuff from Ariel but also some very good storytelling when she tells Vincent she doesn't get his Earth culture and feels a little hurt when he refuses to snuggle in her cleavage. She understands though and she probably scored some points with him when she gave him the time of his life with her lips.
Author's Response:
Well these women have been adapting for a very long time and rather rapidly to not only be more powerful but more desirable to. I figured it'd be fitting if they could do things a woman that'd simply grown wouldn't be able to.
[Report This]Date: May 24 2015 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wonderful as always, keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I'm not quite sure how long this story is going to continue before I have to put it to the side but for now I'm glad people are enjoying it.
Date: May 23 2015 8:55 AM Title: Chapter 1
He does have a good thing with mountainous women caring for him and fawning over him. Men have it pretty good in this world where they're reverred and treated like kings despite the difference in size.
However, he is right to want to return to his own world, he isn't a good fit for it. Maybe Ariel will make him fall for her and change but I don't know if he could fall for a woman that large.
Date: May 22 2015 9:33 AM Title: Chapter 8
So Vincent isn't unique and for all we know, they failed to return home because of women who tried to access Earth to choose a husband in a world where men hold up half the sky.
Not the thing he wanted to hear but okay, means it'll be a challenge.
Author's Response:
At this point I'm pretty sure Vincent is laying his hopes or at the very least his plans to return home to rest. He's been given plenty of cause to think making such an attempt is a bad idea not just for him but his world. It also seems he has a very good thing going for him in this world. He's only been there for three days now but does he really want to risk losing that?
Date: May 17 2015 7:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
Just can't get over the image of their walks causing sonic booms if they actually move too fast, that is real power right there!
On sexual harrassment in this world, the women seem to be a little concerned but then they brush it off as a minor annoyance. Its as if they know the men would not be strong enough to cause real harm if they chose to fly up their bottoms for a quick grope.
Author's Response:
They need to move that fast or their speed wouldn't match their size. Walking below the speed of sound would be very slow for these women.
Well the aggressive male getting hurt is a bigger concern for them then him hurting them. It'd be offensive enough that actual sex would be out of the question and would leave them feeling he deserves a slight punishment in most cases. Not being permitted to fly for a week, sort of like their house arrest, would likely be seen as punishment enough. After all these men more live on or inside their women then in their actual homes.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2015 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is wonderful to read as always! I'm hoping to read a lot more of this as it progresses. The only thing that I want to clear up is the Alpha/lesser wife trait thing. When an Alpha gets a trait is it equal, less than, or greater than the original trait from the lesser wife? Would Briget have bigger breasts than Melody or vise versa Melody becomes stronger than Brigit. I get that they can get traits but the question is how much.
Author's Response:
It's not a linear relationship whenever it comes to such things as muscle strength. For example let's say that Ariel obtained Brigit's skeletal muscles. Brigit's physiological information would be used to optimize Ariel's muscles. So she would have the best of her muscles and Brigit's. This goes down to the cellular level letting it be passed onto her child to some extent. So for example. the ratio of type 1 muscles and type 2 may change as well based on what she's trying to achieve. The thing is Ariel is taller that Brigit which would bring on an even greater strength increase. In terms of her skelental muscles.
Where this can be dangerous is things like the heart don't get this boost. Can Ariel's heart supply these new enhanced muscles with the needed blood? Can her skeleton which wasn't strengthened endure the force? In Ariel's case probably. Now in the event the lesser wife is just plain superior to the alpha wife in that area the alpha wife's trait would be completely replaced.
Date: May 06 2015 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
I can't wait to see more of this story. You've brought out so much life in your characters, and the world building has been superb. I love ariels current behavior and attitude, along with their interaction. Please write more of this story!
Date: April 29 2015 9:31 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow I actually got into this story. I think what makes it so good for me is the amazing World Build you did here.
I truly hope to see this story moving on
Author's Response:
There will likely be more to the story in the future. I really want to at least get to the point where Ariel begins gaining her new traits.
Date: April 27 2015 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 1
At their size, you only need one woman to create a disaster on Earth, they close to 2000 feet tall so a single one could destroy cities if they wished to.
Date: April 27 2015 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
You're doing just great! I wish I could put my ideas into text as well as you do... But because, as I say I'm a technical writer, I'm far too critical of my own writing to actually succeed at writing.
Date: April 27 2015 6:22 AM Title: Chapter 1
You're really good with the maternal giantess thing here. Vincent is in safe hands for now, Ariel will make sure of it . She's adorable at times but not too sure if they'll ever let him leave, since men are a precious commodity.
It looks like women are in charge but the way they explained their society suggests a more equal society than I thought.
I can't wait to see the end of this story but I am concerned if the women got to Earth, would they kidnap men?
Author's Response:
Thanks. The women do try to show consideration for the men. After all the men need a certain connection to their wives to duplicate traits for them and such improvements is one major goal of their culture. That and they want to avoid men being injured or killed during an escape attempt. You can imagine a suicide would be a huge problem as well.
As for what the women would do if they got to earth. Not all of them would some of them would be quite friendly and attempt to persuade men to come willingly. The majority of them are benevolent after all. Yet if they were all benevolent there would be no need for guards and people can justify many things to themselves. How many ill behaved or malevolent women would it take to cause a disaster?