Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: October 13 2015 3:53 PM Title: The First Night

What I take away from this chapter is a boy loves the feet of a certain girl so much that he is willing to invade her privacy to be in her footwear. Your writing ability is decent but I'm not sure about the premise. Being inside shoes with a foot in will kill you eventually. And then there's the fact that he would spy on here. Don't you think that's creepy? Would you like it if you found someone in your shoe?

 

I'm sorry for the mixed review. But there are some details that really concerned me. I hope you don't mind my commentary. The last thing I want to do is scare an authoraway. I would really like it if you put consideration into the plot, as you've probably guessed.