[Report This]Date: June 30 2015 7:44 PM Title: Not all bad
Excellent chapter!
I love Valery's control over Jay, as well as Jay's mixed reactions to it.
Finally we see the drug in effect. I'm assuming that the smaller he gets, the greater the effect.
For the volleyball match, I'm gonna predict that a girl will land on him, and about every other girl will find that attractive and possibly bump into Jay on purpose.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: June 29 2015 10:59 PM Title: Not all bad
Volleyball with 11 girls, doesn't seem that bad. Anyways nice chapter.
[Report This]Date: June 07 2015 1:57 AM Title: Still Shrinking
Just found this story. I can't wait to see what happens next because I'm enjoying the story a great deal.
aaron
Author's Response:
thanks, glad you enjoy
[Report This]Date: June 06 2015 3:37 PM Title: Still Shrinking
Valery should keep her awareness as a secret. She should act like she doesnt recognize Jay, and play with him as if he was a little toy.
Might be even better if Valery takes Jay up to a room, ties him up, and pin him down. She can sit on him and brag about it.
I really like this turn of events.
I cant wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: May 24 2015 2:51 PM Title: Prescription Filled
did she just do what i think she did?
[Report This]Date: May 19 2015 8:12 PM Title: Prescription Filled
I thought his sister would've fallen to Jay's looks because of that attraction.
I guess Darcy knows her way around it.
Interesting change of events.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: May 19 2015 7:42 PM Title: An Introduction
And we have crossed the point of no return, where Darcy sees her brother as less of a human and more of her personal toy or slave.
[Report This]Date: May 08 2015 2:46 PM Title: An Introduction
Really excited for where this is going. A hot younger sister who is going to be attracted to him because of pheromones? Damn.
[Report This]Date: May 07 2015 11:38 PM Title: Pinned
Girls more attracted to him? Isn't this was what Jay was looking for? Attention from his last girlfriend? He might get her attention at this size, and maybe Jay decides he wants to stay small.
Or Jay grows big and now, none of the girls like him, so he wants to be small again. Hmm. I think that a twist is coming.
Date: May 07 2015 2:03 PM Title: Pinned
Oh, girls will be attracted to him eh? This will be fun.
Date: May 04 2015 8:24 AM Title: An Introduction
Humiliation can be intentional or unintentional , Darcy could unwittingly humiliate him by making him feel weak through helping him reach for stuff or maybe her friends and her get overly affectionate and their huge bodies make him feel small.
Oh, a little tip if you want to switch perspectives aroud, add something like this:
******
It helps.
For examples:
Mike slammed on the breaks, his beat up van screeching to a halt just before it knocked into his ex-girlfriend Kate's big toe, the toe itself just slightly larger than the van.
Far above , her thunderous laughter filled the air she had him where she wanted him.
" Come on out Mikey, face you 'little' girlfriend," She sneered, Mike praying to whichever deity would listen to his prayer for help.
He stepped out, Kate wiggling her toes without a second thought ,cracking the ashphalt.
He then turned his gaze upwards, far beyonf her toes and up into his ex's icy blue eyes.
*******
Kate couldn't believe it, she was so massive that her bosom blocked her view of Mike! This was too much, the mere thought of having so much power over not just her scumbag ex-boyfriend but the shithole of a town she lived in moistened her panties.
"Oh Mikey, this is just the beginning of the end for you and your pathetic town," She threw her head back and laughed heartily.
It'll help us tell when the perspective has shifted.
Author's Response:
Thanks, that looks like an idea I should definitely try. That or might just keep it in Jay's perspective and just allow actions/other developments to keep the plot going. The next chapter will probably be out by the end of the week.
[Report This]Date: May 04 2015 7:15 AM Title: An Introduction
Actually, the tone of the story kind of suggests that his sister is going to at least have fun at his expense later, after he's tiny. And that also seems to be the author's preference. I am tired of some reviewers asking that characters don't act in accordance with how the author has set them up. The tags "Humiliation" and "Incest" should be a clue as to how the author envisioned this story, and I for one like it a lot and home the brother is demolished emotionally at some point. :)
Date: May 04 2015 6:46 AM Title: Can only hide so long
Either she did it to scare him or she really loves him and wants to comfort him. So far Darcy seems like a nice sister, don't have her turn into one of those sadistic giant bitches who pick on their brothers because they got smaller.
[Report This]Date: May 04 2015 12:47 AM Title: Can only hide so long
This is fantastic!
Slow shrinking so each new height is emphasized.
Also, I like the mean sister, responsible mother relationship. Darcy hugged Jay, but was that just so she knows how small he was or we she reall compassionate?
This also seems like a long story with Mom's trip and then the Smiths visiting from time to time.
Hot nurse/receptionist. Plus in my book.
I can't wait till his mom finds out. Now that will be interesting.
I also can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: May 01 2015 10:59 AM Title: 2- The First Morning
interesting start
[Report This]Date: April 29 2015 9:13 AM Title: 2- The First Morning
I love this story and hope to see more. Thank you for uploading.
[Report This]Date: April 28 2015 5:50 PM Title: An Introduction
I like this story and hope you are able to keep updating it. I also hope Jay eventually learns a very smelly and humiliating lesson at the feet and other body parts of his Mom and sister.