[Report This]Date: April 11 2015 7:19 AM Title: July
The only way I can see May as caring is if she's just totally oblivious to how awful she treats June. Does she not realize how bad it must be in her shoe? Obviously bad enough that her tiny sister gets stuck to her foot and ends up reeking before long.
April, on the other hand, doesn't seem malicious. The "torments" on her sister in the first chapter seemed mostly unintended. The twisting of the cage between her fingers was more of an "idle hands" kind of thing, and I doubt she realized how jarring it was for June. The saliva from her fingers seemed to be just the April didn't realize how much was left after turning the page. The pudding event was intentional, but was her being playful instead of malicious.
Author's Response:
May knows it's bad in her shoe, but as long as June doesn't have any broken bones, she thinks it's fine. She just doesn't understand the full toll it takes on Juniper. I think Juniper's right in saying that May sometimes has moments when she remembers that she is her sister after all. She isn't 100% nurturing, but she isn't all evil either like Juniper pegs her to be. The bad almost always outweighs the good May does.
As for April, you're on to something there. April doesn't really know her full power and how it affects Juniper. She isn't malicious, but she's also not above exploiting her sister's defenseless state for fun, especially on a slow day. After what May does to her on a daily basis, I think June has every right to be distrustful of April if she's nearly doing the same, intentional or not.
Both April and May are just ignorant on the realities of June's situation, both physically and emotionally, but how can they really identify with their sister's pain without spending a day in each other's shoes. (I couldn't resist...I'm sorry, I'm a dork.)
Date: April 11 2015 6:45 AM Title: July
Whew. I'm usually terrible at leaving more than one review on stories, so consider this my emphatic vote that you keep up the good work. The gentle stuff here was nice to make the dynamic of the characters more complicated, and advanced May and April past being purely malicious into something more interesting and lifelike.
Author's Response:
Well, I'm super flattered to know that you're keeping up with the story. The sisters definitely have a complicated relationship, and a lot has happened in Juniper's first two years tiny. Their reason's aren't 100% justifiable, but they do have reasons as petty and overblown they might be.
[Report This]Date: April 11 2015 4:34 AM Title: July
I'm really digging this story, the jeckyl and hyde demeanor of the bigger two adds to the enjoyment.
Author's Response:
It definitely makes April and May a little more interesting. All it really takes is Juniper saying the wrong thing at the wrong time to be back into the shoe or maybe even just a whim to do it. She's dancing a very fine line.
Date: April 09 2015 3:55 PM Title: Focus
Very good stuff! Especially the 2nd chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.
Date: April 09 2015 11:35 AM Title: Inured
I like more gentle stories so I will keep my fingerd crossed that Juniper somehow gets a better life in the end. Or her sister realise how terrible they've been and try to make it up to her.
Author's Response:
You and me both. She definitely deserves something like that.
Date: April 09 2015 5:25 AM Title: Focus
Yeesh, where's this been all my life? Far and away my favorite story you've posted. You write the personalities well, and that moment of acknowledement with the other tiny is great. I hope you'll keep on going strong with this one.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'd like to think other tiny definitely has his own thing going on, and there's something unsettling about only getting a brief glimpse of the boy's personal hell with very little context.
Date: April 09 2015 2:58 AM Title: Focus
Ugh, it was painful to watch. This torture and abusing of tinys is worse than I thought, seems everyone is doing it. I just hope you'll introduce someone who is nicer to their tiny person. Like a girl who treats her brother with respect or maybe a wife who is kind to her shrunken husband, they can't all be this bad.
Author's Response:
Yeah I know how you feel. It hurts me to hurt Juniper. All I can really say is that Juniper has a very skewed look on the role of tiny people in the world, and I'd take her word about it with a grain of salt. You're also right, they're not all like that. I'd say the ratio of good to bad is about 95-5% It just happens that seeing another person in her predicament is both the most comforting and disheartening thing that could happen.The other story I mentioned in the first chapter is clear proof of that they're not all evil. Thanks for reviewing, and I hope it doesn't get too painful to read.
[Report This]Date: April 09 2015 1:37 AM Title: Focus
Great stuff
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing. It definitely helps keep me motivated.
Date: April 07 2015 11:56 AM Title: Inured
Wondeful story. You paint a familiar scenario with new details that make everything seem fresh and exciting.
I absolutely love the idea of the little cage necklace wresting at her sister's chest.
Author's Response:
The birdcage is a fun idea. I think it easily demonstrates Juniper's position in life. Thanks for reviewing.
Date: April 07 2015 9:38 AM Title: Inured
By all means, do review one of my stories, I love to hear what people think about it. Plus reviews tell the author people care about their story.
Author's Response:
I'd definitely like to get more into reviewing. It's been somethingI've been slacking on just cause I get super nervous whenever I get a response or even a review.
Date: April 07 2015 5:37 AM Title: Inured
Well, I'm glad I was able to indirectly lead to the posting of this, cuz it's real good. Like you said in your review of mine, the familiar premise works great if handled right. This world allows you to dig into the story first and trust that we get the gist of behind-the-scenes stuff. The character personalities are also very well-defined here and made me immediately intrigued to see more. And that pudding scene... geez. Steamy.
Author's Response:
I like to think of the premise as a zombie or found footage movie. Once you think it gets old, someone does something interesting with it. Moving away from gentle is definitely something I find refreshing, so I'm surprised I didn't post it when I first had the chance. It's super cool that you're liking it, and I definitely appreciate the review.
[Report This]Date: April 07 2015 12:20 AM Title: Inured
Great stuff, can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
I've got some pretty neat stuff mapped out so far, so look out for that. Thanks for the review.
Date: April 06 2015 11:37 PM Title: Inured
I don't think I ever reviewed your work before but this is a good start!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! Guess I should return the favor then. I've been meaning to read your stories when I had the time.
[Report This]Date: April 06 2015 11:30 PM Title: Inured
To not finish this is the greatest sin....
Love this
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'll definitely post the next chapter as soon as I finish editing it.