[Report This]Date: April 11 2015 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 2 Run
I don't even look at first chapters of a lot of stories, because the genre subclassifications are those that gross me out. But this was a a truly great narration of the surprises and experiences Lucas would have encountered out in the woods. I like the detail that goes into the chase, and the references to being swallowed alive. There isn't anything in this story to spoil it. No crudity. No hardvore horror. Just a terrific fantasy brought to life. Well written indeed.
Author's Response:
Hey man, thanks for taking the time to read my stories. I plan on becoming more active in this community. Anyway thanks for the review.
[Report This]Date: April 11 2015 2:57 AM Title: Chapter 1 Moonlight
The camp setting is a great original way to tell this fantastic giantess vore story. I'm hanging to see what happens in chapter 2.
Date: April 09 2015 6:24 AM Title: Chapter 2 Run
Hmm...short but I would have preferred more development. The concept isn't a bad one, I think the story of a giantess who lures her victims to the woods beofre killing and eating them.
You used more dialogue here than in the last chapter, good move there. Try to work on your writing, you've got potential to be a great writer if you work at it.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much, I will keep this advice in mind the next time when I write my next story. I wanted to do a warm up story involving this as you can see. Anyway I will keep this in mind.
Date: April 09 2015 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 1 Moonlight
I suggest breaking down the text more and to use more dialogue. Dialogue helps us to get to know the characters in addition to the descriptions you provide outside of it.