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Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 01 2015 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 1

No reviews? Well that just won't do.

Where to start... first off, I love the opening paragraphs. The writing felt very casual and comfortable, like you were speaking from experience; it really helped draw me in initially.

Your descriptions were also spot on, so bravo for that.

I do have a few minor issues. The dialogue could have used a bit of tweaking, and it could have been longer, but other than that, I really enjoyed this.



Author's Response:

Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it, and appreciate the constructive criticism.

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