Date: May 26 2016 5:06 PM Title: Chapter 3
Nice. Loved when the Mom lowered her foot too.
Great story,
Diesel
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Thanks!
Date: August 17 2015 9:09 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow!
:O
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Date: March 11 2015 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 3
Nice story! Again you are using a pretty style. After read the mention about Judy Stevens, I figured she using other people in her shoes than Scott.
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Thanks for reading/reviewing!
Date: March 10 2015 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 3
great story
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thanks!
[Report This]Date: March 09 2015 8:58 PM Title: Chapter 3
I also wouldn't mind seeing Mark enjoying himself in one of his activities with his mom or sister. They don't seem to want to scare him after all.
Author's Response:
"Enjoyment" may be tough since he'd rather not be shrunken, though he'll probably be a happier camper in a future installment as long as people aren't standing on him the whole time.
Date: March 09 2015 7:11 PM Title: Chapter 3
It's over already? Definitely wouldn't mind seeing a few more chapters, I really enjoy the detail you write with!
Author's Response:
Thanks! It was really just meant to be a quick story about this one scenario, but I'll have longer stuff coming up soon.
[Report This]Date: March 09 2015 10:35 AM Title: Chapter 3
Great story, i really enjoyed it and hope we see these characters again. I was a little confused why Joy didn't realize that he couldn't fight back because she was putting too much pressure on him though.
And for next time, i wouldn't mind if it was something mundane like helping clean her sister's feet.
Author's Response:
Thanks much. I will probably bring the characters back again, especially since they fit well into short stories like this. And Joy was just being a little too thorough to fully realize.
That may well be a situation explored in any future stuff with these characters.
[Report This]Date: March 09 2015 9:11 AM Title: Chapter 1
I was getting worried that Joy was starting to enjoy it. What sets this story apart from your other stories is the obvious, visibile affection this family has for each other. I hope to see more stories like this from time to time.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading. Yeah, this is probably the first family I've written about that don't enjoy tormenting one another at smaller sizes. It's a set-up I intend to bring back eventually.
Date: March 09 2015 8:34 AM Title: Chapter 3
I'm guessing the lesson that she's talking about at the end there is that when he's that small, she has to hold him completely enclosed in her hand while walking around, so there's no chance he'll fall.
Author's Response:
Hehe. That is indeed the lesson. She's learned well.
Date: March 09 2015 8:04 AM Title: Chapter 3
So Becky took Mark as personal stylist. cute story!
Author's Response:
Thanks! And that's an accurate title for Mark.
Date: March 06 2015 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 2
Great stuff!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: March 06 2015 2:23 PM Title: Chapter 2
Can`t wait to see mom`s turn. Nice work on this piece, man!
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Thanks!
[Report This]Date: March 05 2015 12:44 PM Title: Chapter 2
Seeing as he's not being crushed, does he have super endurance while tiny? I mean, even Scott Has Gotten Bruised.
Author's Response:
No super endurance. Becky's still not putting her full weight on him, just steadily adding pressure. Scott usually has someone actually standing on him.
Date: March 05 2015 12:10 PM Title: Chapter 2
okkkk.... eh it seems that her mom is perfectionnist or something like that. Becky is not fan foot safety thing ... yet
Author's Response:
Joy is just being very thorough. Becky's not totally on board with it yet, though.
[Report This]Date: March 04 2015 9:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great chapter, I already like the characters. As for Grammar/Spelling I found no mistakes. Keep up the great work. Seems you are creating even more interesting characters.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Glad you're liking it.
Date: March 04 2015 8:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
Hi. It´s me again.
Como ya sabras, yo leo la historia una vez finalizada. Solo leo los primeros dos o tres capítulos (o, como en este caso, solo el primero) para darme una idea más concreta del contenido. Así que esto no es algun comentario que se relacione con la historia. Es más como una clase de peticiones, pero nada que insinue que este exigiendo o algo por el estilo. Tomalas como simples preguntas de inofensiva curiosidad sobre tu punto de vista.
-¿Qué te parecería escribir una historia hacerca de un hombre que se encoge al oler los pies de las mujeres? La idea te parece ridicula, iverosomil, o simplemente no sería tu estilo tratar con una premisa como esta.
-¿Comó te suena una premisa donde un personaje de genero masculino es capturado por una organización donde las mujeres pagan por tener esclavos miniaturas para hacer con ellos todo lo que su imaginación retorsida pueda pensar? Algo así como la premisa de "Hostel" (en mi país esta escrito así, creo que en ingles esta escrito igual). Esa pelicula me creo un repelus tan indecible para describirlo, pero el pensamiento de que las torturas hubiesen sido implementadas por mujeres hacia hombres pequeños estuvo presente despues de terminar de ver el film.
Soy consiente que en mi último comentario dije que prefiero una trama bien estructurada e interesante a un concepto atractivo, y este tipo de sugerencias contrastan de manera ingente ese comentario, pero solo son preguntas que me surgieron de la nada (ecepto la dos que la vengo arastando de hace tiempo). Sencilla e inofensiva curiosidad sobre la opinion que tienes sobre esto.
Si mi comentario te ofendio de algun modo, de ante mano te ofrezco una disculca.
Sin nada más por añadir, me despido.
Bye :)
Author's Response:
The idea of someone shrinking to an odor isn't a bad one, but it is probably not something I would write myself. I have seen Hostel though and actually once wrote part of a story with a similar premise to what you're describing, where women could pay to play with shrunken people in a discreet location.
Date: March 03 2015 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love where this is going. I love the "I can do it" attitude of the sister. I would absolutely love to see some sock/shoe insertion! While I'm dreaming, I'll bet he'd be nice and safe between her cheeks! Just saying! Looking forward to the next update :)
Author's Response:
Thanks! This is a fairly short story, so there won't be any mouthplay, but there's still some fun foot stuff coming up.
[Report This]Date: March 03 2015 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
I really like these characters immensely. The mom seems genuinely kind and caring while his sister seems very loving and quite affectionate. Looking forward to see what happens next and what he did to be shrunken.(would be funny if it was a relatively benign offence like peeking in the girls locker room or something)
It's easier for me to see that his mom and sister do actually care for him but aren't against having some good natured fun at his expense. I liked that the reason for this was because one of Becky's classmates had an accident through their own negligence. Would like to see some one on one time with Joy(nice choice in name btw) and her son.
Since it's the same universe as Time-Out, I'm assuming it's after the shrink act was written into law. I guess what I'm saying is in theory you could be shrunk for just about anything, especially if you're a minor.
Anyways, great stuff and can't wait to see Joy's feet.
aaron
Author's Response:
Hehe. I figured these characters would be more up your alley than Julia. You're right that Joy and Becky do genuinely care for and love Mark, even if the lessons are at his expense. What he did to be shrunken isn't explained in detail, but it's implied that he helped graffiti his school's gym.
And yes, this takes place after the Shrink Act is in place. Technically, his mom can shrink him for anything for her own disciplinary purposes, but a crime still has to be committed for him to be legally shrunken for an extended period of time like he is here.
[Report This]Date: March 02 2015 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great stuff! I can feel that this family actually OPENLY cares for eachother. It might be nice to make this a longer series to help contrast with the Time Out series. Maybe have a girlfriend visit and see a little making out (but that's as far it goes, since these characters are younger then TO). It'd just show that this mother isn't as possessive as Judy and while believing her son should be punished for his crime, the punishment doesn't need to be too severe.
Keep going with this!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading. You're right that this is a family that actually cares about each other. I don't have plans for a series currently, but I may bring these characters back again at some point if people like the rest of this shorter story.
[Report This]Date: March 02 2015 3:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
Jack by your stories can shoot movies!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading/reviewing!