[Report This]Date: October 06 2015 6:20 PM Title: Part 1
Such a mean-spirited girl, even if she is as gentle as can be with him! An enjoyable read all the same, if at Jay's expense. :P Love the little bit of foodplay involved too, that's always been another personal favorite.
You have such a variety of descriptions for everything, too! Some of them do occasionally feel a little overdone, but the detail is always welcome. Nicely written overall, and thank you for suggesting it to me, it does fit nicely into what I'm comfortable with.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading this one too. I often go pretty heavy on descriptions, and this one especially I was really trying to lay it on thick.
Date: June 03 2015 12:00 AM Title: Part 1
Nice story! Very succinct and effective. Makes me wonder if I should write a short story here and there as well.
Author's Response:
Thought I responded to this one. Anyway, thanks! I'd be very enthused to see what you'd do with a short story.
Date: March 18 2015 7:32 PM Title: Part 1
Great story man im not ususally one for mouth play but this story really did it for me. Love graces playful nature right down to the way she calls him "little boy" and "precious little guy" despite jay being the elder of the two! Will we see grace and jay continue their fun in another story down the road? Also do you plan on incorporating any footplay into graces next tale? I was also curious about the age of the characters and is it possible grace has somewhat of a crush(ha!) on jay? Thanks as always for the great story man!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I'm not sure if we'll be seeing Grace and Jay together again, though we will be seeing Grace looking for more games again. Can't say for sure if there will be footplay, but anything's possible. Grace is 16 and Jay is 18. The nature of Grace's true thoughts about Jay aren't really shown, so a crush is certainly a possibility.
Date: February 28 2015 12:10 PM Title: Part 2
Maybe a long story with Grace playing in the main role??? :)
Author's Response:
Not quite, but she will have a lengthier appearance in the next story.
Date: February 23 2015 5:50 PM Title: Part 1
It´s me. Again.
Empesare por decir que yo no soy un gran fan del concepto "Vore". Lo considero atractivo a su modo, pero jamás me lansaría de lleno para leer una historia que maneje este concepto en toda su historia. Así que, con esta pequeña introcucción, me alegra decir que la historia me encanto. Para empesar, lo que me indujo a esta respuesta es el personaje de Grace. Es el tipo de persona que ve a sus victimas como meros objetos de valor. Además de la desesperación con la que sumerjes al personaje (unos de los atractivos que me encantan del concepto vore) y al final la aceptación de todo el asunto y su inevitable final. Pero no llego a más para mi porque el principal atractivo de estas historias para mi es lo que ocurre despues de la ingestión. De todas manera, con lo que trabaja, lo hace más que bien; además de que ya me tienes enganchado con la proxima historia que involucre a Grace.
Lo segundo que quisiera comentar es que, con lo que leí en la respuesta de tu último comentario, tienes pensado hacer una especie de historia distopica que (segun lo que leí) se trata de un escenario ficticio post-apocaliptico que dará enfoque en el fetiche que manejara. Así que esto me ha llevado a preguntar ¿habra alguna especie de trama-aventura o solo sera una ventana a la vida cotidiana de las personas de ese mundo? y ¿qué clase de fetiche manejara?
Si mi comentario te ofendio de algun modo, de antemano te ofresco una disculpa.
Sin nada más que añadir que espero con entusiasmo el cuarto acto de "Julia", me despido.
Bye :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing again. I'm glad you enjoyed the story even though you're not a big fan of vore.
The dystopian story is not post-apocalyptic, but follows a widespread phenomenon where people shrink because of an inherited gene and become property. The fetish material will mostly focus on feet and mouth action like it does in my other stories, but there will be some variety. There will be some overarching plot, but the story will show many different people affected.
Glad you plan to read the new Julia!
[Report This]Date: February 23 2015 2:33 PM Title: Part 2
Neat little yarn you've spun here.
Though it turned out to be more or less a simple power trip in the end, bullying a tiny as a schoolyard crush is oddly cute.
In any case, it's nice to know Julia will be continuing, is there anything else you're rolling off the assembly line any time soon?
Author's Response:
Thanks. I do acknowledge the coolness of the schoolyard crush idea; in this case, though, since there's a plan in mind for her in a future story, I had to keep the characterization consistent.
Aside from Julia, I'm working on a short story in my PMRD series, another story in this witchcraft universe, and then a dystopian sort of one with more focus on gritty fetish action.
[Report This]Date: February 22 2015 1:44 PM Title: Part 1
I'm sorry for not reviewing in a while Jacksmith, my life has gotten so hectic, that I can barely afford time to read anymore :(
But enough of my complaining, you want to know how the story is, right? Awful, terrible, 0/10, stop writing now! Just kidding; once again you've done a fantastic job here Jack, and have successfully immersed me in a world of magic and peanut butter. Still loving the dialogue you write, it’s so natural and flows effortlessly throughout the scene; like peanut butter. Fine details as well, particularly the scene with her lips, and the way you described how utterly powerless he was.
I loved this short story, and look forward to the day I can get caught up with the rest of your work. Until then, it’s been a treat.
Author's Response:
Good to hear from you again man; glad you're enjoying the story. Especially appreciate what you say about the dialogue. I look forward to whatever commentary you have in the future.
[Report This]Date: February 19 2015 4:09 PM Title: Part 1
This almost seems like a schoolyard crush kind of thing. She messes with him not to be mean, but because she likes him and likes having fun with him. I mean, she goes out of her way a bit to make sure he doesn't get hurt by any of the fun she has.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! That's definitely a fair perspective. If nothing else, her intentions are genuinely not to harm him in these games of hers.
Date: February 19 2015 11:58 AM Title: Part 1
no bad start even if im not into witches. Do you post Omega: Hostages soon?
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading. I probably will not be posting any Omega stories for a long while though.