Date: January 20 2015 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 9
The mother eating that soup with micros in the beginning of the story hooked me. I love casual vore like that. The interplay between mother and daughter was also fun to read. This story really reminded me of a book called Mistress Masham's Repose. Not going to lie, but that ending seemed rushed and unsatisfying. Don’t get me wrong, I was delighted to see Cole mashed up in the end.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I think the ending would have been a bit more weight yhad I put in those few extra chapters I initially planned. But I'm glad there were parts you enjoyed. Casual and unaware vore are probably my favourite types of vore :]
Date: January 04 2015 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 9
Such a sad ending. Oh well. It was a decent read though, I suppose.
Date: January 04 2015 4:23 PM Title: Chapter 5
I knew socks were a bad idea. And this chapter proves my point. Anyway, an unexpected chapter, I must admit. I was not expecting Edith to shrink.
Date: January 04 2015 4:18 PM Title: Chapter 4
I am confused. Wouldn't the maids notice a bulge in Edith's sock? Surely her underwear, bra or panties, is a more sensible place and less nauseating for Cole (because the incessant movement of her foot would surely cause sickness). Which brings me to another point – Cole is too young and innocent to understand female anatomy so there is no chance of him being perverted. Cole has a certain cuteness to him, which I hope is emphasized in later chapters - as it makes him a fairly unique main character for a Giantess World story.
Author's Response:
Well remember how small Cole was in porportion to Edith. The little bulge he may have formed would have been completly missed by the maids, despite their keen eyes. And one of my debates while I was writing this was Cole's age, but I ultimately decided younger would be better. I wanted the bonde between the two of them to be like that between siblings, to create an illussion of purity for their characters (especially Edith's).
Date: January 04 2015 4:08 PM Title: Chapter 3
Oh snap - Cole is the missing tiny! This chapter was surprisingly tense. Nice work on this one. I personally would have liked to have explored Cole and Ediths relationship a bit more beforehand though.
Author's Response:
I decided that the adventure the two would go on would better establish the bond between the two, and hopefully filled the reader in on most of the dynamics of their relationship. However, due to time constraints I have a "missing" chapter or two that would have further defined their friendship.
Date: January 04 2015 3:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow – my first review for many months. I left, lurked for a bit, and now I’m back, kinda. I won’t bore you with the details, but essentially there’s been several really nice stories I’ve seen recently and I just had to start reviewing again. This chapter just screams: Parents who are stuck in the past and cling onto outdated clichés. Also, her mother comes across as very money hungry, which I guess was your intention.
A little short, but the chapter seems to get the central idea across just fine. The chapter could have done with a bit more description perhaps. That is to say, more emotion - I think you could have made the chapter more emotive than it is.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review! I agree, I could have been a bit more descriptive with the chapter, trying to draw things out more. But the time constraints I set up didn't quite allow that, so I instead focused on setting up family dynamics rather than emotion impact.
If/when I go back to edit the story, this chapter will probably be changed the most (Chapter 2 as well).
[Report This]Date: January 02 2015 12:04 AM Title: Chapter 7
I understand now, trying to finish these wonderful stories before the new year. Which is kinda a sad, since there all awesome.
Oh if you could can you space out your big paragraph more. It would be easier to read.
Author's Response:
I went ahead and spaced it out, thanks!