[Report This]Date: January 08 2015 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 9 - A Spoonful of Zack
Great story !!!
Does Zack will go survive on erika digestion?
[Report This]Date: January 07 2015 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 9 - A Spoonful of Zack
If Zack survived that oven temperature, then my guess is that he is immune to her stomach acids.
Either Erica barfs or poops him out.
There is no way the story ended. The sleepover never happened yet. lol
Anyway, if you miss a day of writing, no worries. You write more often than about 90% of the authors on this site. A chapter a day is excellent, and Im glad you are committed on continuing that.
Author's Response: Thanks for understanding. Unfortunately, I've got a few really busy days coming up, but I will try to write when I can. I also don't want to cram in a chapter and have it be not as good as I envisioned it. I really like to put out a chapter every day, but I just need to learn that that isn't always possible. I will do the best that I can, maybe every two days at the very worst. Anyways, thanks for reviewing, and yeah, they didn't even sleep yet!
[Report This]Date: January 07 2015 5:02 PM Title: Chapter 9 - A Spoonful of Zack
Love this story, I especially liked the butt chapter! I always love storys where the person is innocent but is assumed guilty. I love the idea of him fianlly getting attention and being able to explain it was the other two guys!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and I'm glad you love the story! Zack clearing up this whole mess may happen eventually...
Date: January 06 2015 1:37 PM Title: Chapter 8 - Mistaken Identity
Really want to see this story advance. Currently writing a story also based on being taken care of, I understand the difficulty involved.
[Report This]Date: January 05 2015 7:24 PM Title: Chapter 8 - Mistaken Identity
Well played.
I would have never even thought of Kiana having blurry vision due to her not wearing contacts.
I felt just like Zack during those 30 seconds when Kiana stared at him. I was thinking the same thing. Does she see him? Well now I know.
Yes, I think Julia will add him to the cake. She probably will cover him in frosting or something. Then Zack will try to free himself from the gooey substance while 3 hungry girls are trying to eat the cake.
Im also impressed at how you write a new chapter everyday consistently. It shows your commitment to this story. Keep it up, and I cant wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: January 05 2015 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 8 - Mistaken Identity
Really great story, I just found it today and read it, so far it's awesme. Good unaware micro plots are just too damn rare, even on this site. One critism I have though is the size, you wrote he is around 1 inch, which is way too hugh for unaware, especially of what all happened so far. Also 1 inch doesnt really count as micro. Good micro plots are around 1/16" to 1/8" in between it would be ant size. But the plot is fantastic, and I love revenge or prank scenarios, especially if the story has an unfortunate ending like vore with digestion or anal insertion. My favorite part was chapter 6, but also the saddest, because I was hoping it were going a different way, of full insertion. I would had loved it so much more, if he were laying totally scared on the anus, and if he wasnt shot out by that fart, but fallen through while the anus opened like a fish mouth and he fell directly inside her rectum, the anus shutting of course and wouldnt open anymore, even if he banged against it in totally agony and fear. But I loved how it was Julia in the last part "finding him". My wish or review thouhgts of what should happen would be, her maybe using the shrinking ray a 2nd time, and shrinking him to truly micro suze like ant or dust particle size. Keep up the great work, will of coursr follow this :)
[Report This]Date: January 05 2015 4:34 PM Title: Chapter 8 - Mistaken Identity
Really fun story to read, well written loving the things that are happening to zack. Look forward to seeing how it goes in the next chapter :)
[Report This]Date: January 05 2015 3:53 PM Title: Prologue - The Incident
Awesome! can't wait to see what's next!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! I'm really glad that you're looking forward to the next chapter! These kinds of reviews really make me want to write more!
[Report This]Date: January 04 2015 9:10 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Relieving Herself
Wow! I think Kiana actually knew the plan all along.
Kiana probably faked her reactions every time savoring the feeling of Zack on her body.
Anyway, the unaware part just ended with Kiana. I wonder what she will do with him, now that she is aware of his presence.
By the way, when will they start sleeping? It seems like this day just keeps on getting longer.
Looks like a bath scene is next. I cant wait!
Author's Response: Oh trust me, there is still a whole lot of unaware action to be had. Your idea is interesting, but there may be another secret Kiana has been hiding. However, Kiana is certainly aware of...a...presence.
Date: January 03 2015 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Beware of the Butt
i realy like this and exspeshaly secns im an butt guy but closer to the eng maby she could find out what raly happond and stuff the she still unkowingly torchers him while trying to save hime then if he ever gets back to normal he gets her as his girl and the proper guys get punished
[Report This]Date: January 03 2015 3:24 PM Title: Prologue - The Incident
I have been reading stories from this site for a long time and I have never written a review but this time I had to write one. Your story is absolutely great! It has all the elements I like, unaware, flattened body, fused to a part of her body... I can´t wait to read more. I have also read your additions in writing.com and sincerely all of them are amazing too. Thanks for this story and I really hope you can continue like this:)
Author's Response: Wow! Seriously this means a lot to me, thanks a lot! I'm really glad that you like my writings so much! I hope you stick around for all my future works! Thanks again!
[Report This]Date: January 03 2015 9:33 AM Title: Chapter 5 - Tanning With The Girls
Very Good.
Julia could fart in Zack sealing it in your ass.
[Report This]Date: January 02 2015 5:15 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Tanning With The Girls
Sory has been really good so far, now I'm intently watching to see what happens next! :)
Author's Response: Thanks, and I'm glad you're keeping watch! Much more action and craziness will happen, so stay tuned!
[Report This]Date: January 02 2015 8:06 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Boobie Trap
Zack will turn tattoo on chest Kiana?
[Report This]Date: January 01 2015 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Boobie Trap
Can't wait for Chapter 5 !
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm glad you're looking forward to it!
[Report This]Date: January 01 2015 11:31 AM Title: Chapter 3 - A Relaxing Swim
excellent story, continue us boobs of Kiana.
[Report This]Date: December 31 2014 8:42 PM Title: Chapter 3 - A Relaxing Swim
I agree, the unaware moments in this story is fantastic! I love how Julia is basically putting Zack in positions to be tortured by the other girls.
Kiana must have felt Zack entering her cleavage, unless his body was so insignificant to her boobs that she never felt him. Either way seems reasonable.
The only way now that Zack can escape without being detected is if he slips through her boobs and ends up into another crazy situation.
Another idea is if the party is over, and Julia leaves Zack stuck with Kiana, the hottest girl of the three. Im wondering if Kiana has any other hot family members (Mom, sister). With one hot person, there is likely to be others that resemble the same traits.
Or Julia can spot Zack if he falls to the floor. Then she can take him home to her "lair". (Does Julia even know if Zack is with Kiana?)
There are many possibilities, my friend. I just love stories where one giantess is aware of the tiny, and the other giantess(es) are unaware of him.
Keep up the good work, and Happy New Year!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for this review! I'm glad that you are liking the story. I'm also happy that you shared your thoughts and ideas, and I will certainly take them into consideration. As for your having Zack stuck with Kiana and family idea...heh heh. I don't want to spoil anything, but if you stick around you may get to see some action some time down the road! Some day...
[Report This]Date: December 30 2014 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 2 - Shrinking Revenge
Great! I love unaware parts, it makes the journey so much harder.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! Yeah, I love unaware too, so that's why my stories tend to be mostly unware. You can certainly look forward to much more unaware fun in the future!
[Report This]Date: December 30 2014 2:17 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Sleepover Begins
Very good, is quite suspenseful ...
As Zack will shrink??
[Report This]Date: December 29 2014 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Sleepover Begins
Certainly enjoy the motive, and the characters. I would suggest slightly longer chapters, as the story is enjoyable.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yeah, the chapters will definitely be longer, just you wait! We have one more chapter to set up the story (but even that chapter will be eventful), and then everything will just get crazier from there! Don't you worry about longer chapters, they will come!