Date: December 26 2014 7:37 AM Title: The Meeting
Okay, I like the concept you got, a gentle giantess over a mile high is pretty interesting, even more so when she has been fed and looked after, the amount of resources she'll has to be enough to feed a continent of people. Now I have to say something, call it constructive criticism, it is just that.
I didn't like how Lola's father Nicolas suddenly freaked out and punched the guy in the face, seemed too sudden with little to no explanation. You want to keep the chapters to no more than 6 and that's fine but you need to clearly describe the surroundings, feelings of each character and their actions. Right now its too brief. Also carefully develop their character as the story progresses, I see the potential for a great story here. You just need to refine it and it'll be a masterpiece.
Last thing, I laughed at Nicolas Cage being the father here, can totally see the guy fitting in here. That's all I have to say. Don't be disheartened, I don't mean to put you down, far from it. I want to see you continue.
Author's Response:
Oh no, I LOVE Constructive advice, I actually thought it was soemthing kinda fun and just making it up as I go along. I'm planning to go back and add more, however I just wanted to make sure if I could add more then 500 words to a chapter. I'm going to go and add more to chapters, hopefully People enjoy the story. I don't think I'd ever seen a titaness love story and I like gentle giantess while also wanting to get myself out of a writers block.
I'm, glad you agree that six chapters is right and I Hope to be as good as you and Everyone on here someday.
Yes! I wanted to get poeple laughing at Nicolas Cage as our new savior and the fact that he's the father of giantess girls is all the more fun to explore. So thank you very much Nostory.