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Reviewer: MostKnownUnknowns Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 20 2014 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 1: Arrival

Interesting plot you have there. Reminds me of an anime called Love, Chunibyo and other delusions. Pace of the story is very fast though. Try slowing it down and giving more details. Character development is always good. Keep writing though. I'm interested in seeing where it goes.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your reivew. I'll try to slow it down a little bit and develop the characters more as time goes along. Thank you for your critique and I'll do my best to improve upon what I am currently writing.

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