Date: June 29 2023 11:48 AM Title: Chapter 1
I wish all mature moms and milfs were Ascended
[Report This]Date: September 20 2015 7:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
I've posted the first chapter of my continuation, "Luna, Ascended." Looking forward to any feedback!
http://giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=5461&index=1
Author's Response:
Btw, you did an excellent job with the continuation. I'm considering continuing from your continuation.
[Report This]Date: July 26 2015 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
A couple other questions have come up while digging deeper drafting my continuation... sorry if it's a bit too much.. and again I *love* the story..
Most are some version of "what has life been like for them for the four years before the story, since Luna met Regan?" What have they been doing?
1) Where are they? (it says Topeka, as in Kansas?) Where did they goto college? Where did they grow up? (says L/A grew up together, but I didn't see any refernce to where)
2) what season is it? There is a reference to it being cold, but no mention of snow, so it sounds mildly cold, like fall or spring.
3) How long have R/A been guardians for L/A? How did it happen? The closest time reference I can find, is Ch7, where Luna admitted Regan has "lived with this for the last four years", where I think "this" refers to being in proximity of Ash. However, if they are all 23, 4 years ago they would all be 19, which sounds like when Luna and Regan would have met as roomates in college. So the four years could just be how long Regan has known and been around Ash.
Did college require them to get guardians? (aka, was Luna instantly her guardian, and thus her roomate?) That would sort-of make sense, in a world difficult for and potentially dangerous to small people. Ash could have been independently assigned Addison as a guardian, but it seems improbably though that L/A would marry, and their individually assigned guardians would marry.
4) Why did R/A marry so young? L/A have been married for a "couple of months" (so still age 23), and R/A have been married "a year longer" (maybe age 22). Society requires *men* to marry young, but it doesn't require this of women. Is it common for women to marry eachother so young?
5) Why is Ash still complaining about riding in a car-seat? Why is this the first time they've been on a long hike, or needed a carrier? Why are these issues only coming up now? Did they only recently become guardians? Did they recently move to a new city (after graduation from college perhaps)? If so, that might explain why good hiking trails are newly available. Where did they go to college? Where did they grow up? (we know L/A grew up together, but I don't think we know where)
6) What is the timeline? The tail end of chapter 9 "morning wakeup" says it's Monday. Which would mean their "checkup" hospital visit was Sunday, Luna's ascension was Saturday. When did they visit the mall? Was that Sat morning? If so, it seems quite the rushed day to have discovered her tumor Sat afternoon, and have her at home ascending Sat night. Though I guess once the decision is made, no point in waiting.
7) Regarding the very end of Ch9... Ash seems insistant on going to work. His wife just had a life-threatening tumor, which resulted in her undergoing induced ascension. Why wouldn't Ash expect to take several days off work?
8) Regarding the hospital checkup visit (sunday), seems like too much focus on the tracking implant. They are riding in the car to make sure Luna's life-threating tumor is taken care of, and all anyone is talking about is the tracking implant. Seems more like they would be all there for Luna, and then when they randomly saw a sign at the hospital that the implant clinic was open (on a sunday!) they would get Ash to do it. Maybe even after they figured out Luna was in the clear. -- (though what's done is done, just a bit of a critique)
Thanks again for the incredible story, world, and characters.
Author's Response:
Wow, I wish I could answer all your questions. :) Unfortunately, I can't. It's been too long since I wrote this story. I'll try to give some thoughts.
1) If it says Topeka, yes, I'd have to say Kansas as that's what comes to my mind when I think of Topeka. As for college and growing up, if the story doesn't mention it, I have no answer. Your guess is as good as mine. I could open my 'outline' but I prefer to rely on the story as the source of 'truth'. The outline is merely a suggestion-box of potential paths.
2) I want to say Fall.
3) Can't remember. Pretty sure college marke the age when guardians became necessary.
4) No answer. But I can say that this post-Ascension world has a different view of sexuality which may play a factor.
5) Lol. I strive for realism even in giantess stories. When I first read this, my initial thought was: 'ut oh...did I drop the ball here?' :) I vaguely remember it was their first long hike (which seems entirely plausible...not everyone hikes a lot). I also know Ash has his own car (hence doesn't always ride in back-seat car-seat), and that he complains about things in general in a way that may seem juvenile by our standards. It can be hard to imagine the mentality of a young man in this society...someone who has spent his entire life treated like a kid in some sense. Is it entirely unrealistic that he acts 'immature' on occassion? Yet at the same time mature and wise beyond his years on other occassions? An odd mix perhaps, but it's fun to imagine how environment and upbringing can impact one's mentality.
6) In many of my outlines, I have a timeline. I checked and couldn't find the timeline for this story. Perhaps it's 'rushed' but given the nature of Ascension's requirements, I can see why they didn't want to waste time. :)
7) I actually wrote part of chapter 10: Ash's life at work. Created the characters for it and everything. Then I decided to chunk it, i.e., if I ever came back to this story, I wouldn't have him at work. It was just a situation where what I'd written felt wrong. I had some other ideas, but who knows what will eventually make it to paper.
8) Well, he *has* worked as a healer before. So he knows what a healer is capable of doing (there's a reason for the title of 'healer'). It's just part of Ascension biology -- the landscape of medicine in this world is entirely different, primarily focused on aiding men. As for women, 'healing' is the ultimate (albiet expensive) cure for most ailments. Plus we saw other things like Luna's vision improving dramatically, etc. Given the nature of Healing, Ash's (perhaps) blind faith in it, and his sporadic moments of immaturity, the car ride conversation around the implant seems a bit more plausible to me. :)
[Report This]Date: July 21 2015 12:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love the story, the world, the characters. Awesome work. One of my favorites in Gentle/Amazon/MiniGTS.
I have a few questions:
1) How did Regan/Addison get to be both neighbors and guardians? The suggestion is that they were guardians first (because Regan was Luna's college roomate). However, in our world, it's very unlikely to find two places next-door and both available at the same time... There might be two units in a large apartment building available, but Ash's weight room being in the 'basement' suggests a smaller building, like a house or townhouse. -- Were they just lucky finding two townhomes near eachother? Would they have all lived in a single place if they hadn't? Is it common for several neighbor places to be rented together, because of the frequency of polygamy?
2) Why didn't Regan and Addison take advantage of Ash prior to Luna's ascension? Was it merely the threat of breaking the law? There is such a big deal made of how unsafe it is for them to be in certain "zones" without a Guardian escort, it sounds like it's pretty commonplace for un-ascended to be bothered, harmed, abducted, something. Is that because a large percentage of society ignores the laws? The laws are hard to enforce? A small minority is very active? How does this relate do Regan and Addison? Are they just some of the "good ones"?
3) I've been working on a continuation of the story... I'll use a different title, but I'd like to use the same character names, unless you have an objection. If you want to chat about it, PM me @ giantesscity.com
Author's Response:
1. The role of guardian is taken seriously in the society. It's very rare to have an unascended woman with a man. I suspect the government aided in making the arrangements and yes, they would have likely inhabited the same house if two couldn't be found adjacent. They wanted to give Luna and Ash some semblance of independence.
2. Regan would never do that because of how much she cares for Luna. And Addison wouldn't ever do that because she's involved with law enforcement herself. Addison can be a scary character in terms of stoic straight-faced enforcement...at least in what I had planned for her. Addison had never been 'with' a healer or a man and she, oddly, never felt the drive as strongly as others. As for the rest of the world, yes, men are at risk in unsafe zones simply because of their relative rarity and the benefits they can provide. Guardians help ensure men don't get too much exposure in the real world, thus reducing the need for law enforcement. The law isn't corrupt or anything, ascended women simply have varying degrees of ability to resist their instincts. Most don't have harmful intentions toward men, they simply have an attraction based on the scarcity of the opposite gender, the nature of ascension's cravings, etc.
3. Go for it. I wish I had time to continue it. Send me an email (see my profile) once you post it and i'd love to read it!
[Report This]Date: May 30 2015 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 1
Just wanted to let you know that this is one of my favorite GTS stories. The characters and world you have developed are just superb. As a new author myself I now have an appreciation of what feedback can do for a writer, so I wanted to offer my kudos for your most excellent story. Really hoping you decide to continue this when you get a chance.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm a bit inspired at how you manage to continue writing in spite of a job and caring for a family. I'm tempted to see what I can do in the near future.
Date: March 27 2015 8:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
That's nice to hear, hope to see you back soon!
Date: March 11 2015 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 1
May I know when you'll update, this is an excellent story.
Author's Response:
Will do. Might be a while tho. Started a new job, and things have been quite busy.
[Report This]Date: February 08 2015 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 9
Fantastic story, which seems to be the norm from you. Hope to see this continued.
Poor Luna. That doctor either lied about the effects on her personality or really had no idea. Her friends just don't seem to understand either, because they've lived their lives ascended. If she's not careful, she'll slowly drift away from being the person that he fell in love with. She encouraged his more independent nature before, but now she's tricking him out of it, realizing she's doing it, knows it's not right, but is doing it anyways. She needs to learn to better control herself, or she's liable to try turning Ash into an obedient little "pet" like that man at the hospital. It might even happen slow enough that she doesn't realize it's happening.
Author's Response:
Once I return to writing, I'll definitely finish this story. However, I'm not sure when that will occur.
Luna's going through so many changes that it's hard to blame her if she treats Ash a bit different now. Hopefully, their original love will persist.
Date: January 31 2015 11:27 AM Title: Chapter 1
Please update! Such a great story! Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Hank!
Date: November 25 2014 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
I hope life has been treating you well, as it seems that you've been extrodinarily busy. I would like it if this story was updated, it had such a great premise, and build up that it'd be a darn shame should it disappear into the lifeless archives. As with Nostory it'd be glorious if you'd update us on your progress, or hold-ups, as there are many of us who are fans of you story, and wish to continue reading the work you've laid down.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind words. Indeed, life has pulled me away from writing for now. Though I hope to finish this story, I'm not sure when I'll return to it. Just being honest.
Date: November 12 2014 9:03 PM Title: Chapter 1
It's been a while since you updated, may I ask when the next one is?
Author's Response:
I've been pretty busy lately. Not sure when I'm going to return to writing, though I would like to finish this story.
Date: October 18 2014 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 1
I may hate Twilight but I got to say it was a very neat idea of you to put it inside and modify it to have Bella as an Ascended vampire. Really wonderful addition!
Author's Response:
Yeh, I'm not personally a fan of Twilight. However, Luna seems to like it. :) Thanks!
[Report This]Date: October 18 2014 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 9
I now understand the danger of ice cream when the portions are meant fo ascended. Poor Ash, that's got to be like a gallon easy.
Author's Response:
Lol, ice cream isn't necessarily bad. It's just one of the few times Ash has ever experienced it. So he ate too much and paid the consequences.
Date: October 18 2014 3:12 PM Title: Chapter 9
A nice chapter! It looks like Luna is adjusting to her new status. I like how she's making changes to Ash's life, without him being aware of it. I like the further information you're giving about Ascended and how they derive sexual pleasure. I wonder how she'll react when its Ash's turn to act as a healer (I'm thinking it might work like a military reservist. He gets called up to serve from time to time, or on a set schedule). I hope she'll continue to love and respect him as she continues to adjust to her new life. I hope you continue to write about this interesting world!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Good questions. There's still more about the Ascended to be revealed, and perhaps more about Healers too. We'll see. :)
Date: October 10 2014 10:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
So far I've seen Luna acting more or less the way she did as an Unascended woman and Ash still loves her all the same. I kind of assumed all men were healers but it doesn't seem to be the case
Addison and Luna seem like a mother and daughter where the latter is finally grown up and gained her independence and the former is feeling powerless to stop her from doing anything.
Author's Response:
A Healer is a profession, but it's often used interchangeably with a male 22 years or older. That's because it requires no special training. However, as we learn in this chapter, there's a big difference between a husband and a professional Healer in terms of expectations and risks.
As for Addison and Luna, I think you meant Regan and Luna. But yes, I agree to an extent.
Thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: October 10 2014 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 8
This chapter gives me a lot of questions I'm not sure have been answered yet so here I go!
1. What's the legal age for men to become healers and what's this draft? It sounds mandatory are there legal reprocussions if a man refuses?
2. Do men go to school? I think you might have answered this but I'm not sure. Ash seems pretty smart and he does have a job. I just wonder how security works for young boys at school it seems they would be at very high abduction risks for women who are willing to wait a few years.
3. What's the lifespan of a man compared to ascended women? Luna may have to come to terms with severly out living Ash.
4. Why is Regan so against Ash having ice cream? I mean come on?!
5. Are there men not monitored by the system? It seems pretty totalitarian and I know I would not be on board for any of that shit. How has Ash not snapped yet? [I know the answers Luna :) ]
6. Where does male homosexuality fall on all this? I know it's not very likely in this society but still possible and I worry for the gay man a little.
That's enough for now I broke my promise and did another long post. I only ask these questions because you're doing such a good job world building it's becoming more fleshed out which only leads to more questions.
Author's Response:
I can only answer based on information provided in the story thus far:
1. "it required a Healer, a male within three to four years of the recipient. The male had to be at least twenty-two years old, the age when the dormant virus activated." So we can assume 22 is the legal age. Younger males lack the active form of the Ascension virus. As for second question, we're not sure. We can speculate based on similar situations in our world: Penalties for failing to register for the military draft (i.e., Vietnam War) included 10 years in prison and up to $25,000 in fines.
2. Yes. Ash attended college as mentioned in chapter 1. In chapter 3, Jamie mentions 4 boys at her school. As for security, I imagine it has escalated over the years. Ash mentions he "sat beside the teacher for protection, never attended recess"
3. Good question. Hopefully we'll find out.
4. Lol. Refined sugar is bad for your health. Either that, or she took her job as Guardian too seriously. :)
5. Another good question. We don't have an answer but we know some things. There are very few men compared to women (1% estimate). Also, Ascended women have natural, easily accessible, methods of seducing men. Ash hasn't snapped because he loves Luna. As for other men...so far we've only met Harold. :)
6. The Procreation Edict requires marriage, and although the story didn't specify heterosexual marriage, it seems unlikely two men could marry each other (exclusively) in this universe. I'm just speculating. I could be wrong.
Great questions, and thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: October 10 2014 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love this story so much, it's perfectly written and it's impossible to stop reading. What more could you ask for in a story?
You've done such a good job, this is without a doubt one of the best stories I've read!
Amazing, I'm looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Excellent! There's a lot more ahead, so stay tuned! And thanks for the encouraging words!
[Report This]Date: October 10 2014 3:29 PM Title: Chapter 8
What is going on!? This is the third story that I've commented on within the last week, where the author not only addressed my questions and comments in the review section, but acknowledged and answered my questions and comments IN-UNIVERSE! This is seriously pretty cool; I feel like I'm actually helping stories improve!
I really liked how you addressed something that I totally forgot should exist in this world. You mentioned the fact that men are sometimes maritially enslaved to Amazons, and are unable to escape much of the time. This is an interesting direction to explore. Maybe Luna and Ash might have to contend with this aspect of their new lives, and their relationship might change. I thought this chapter was really interesting.
But now I have four questions to ask, three of which relate to the world you've built: 1) How tall is Regan? (The unimportant question) 2) Why is the population of the world so small now; there's less than 2 billion people? 3) Does natural reproduction still exists? 4) How come artificial insemination never yielded male results?
Author's Response:
Since authors are addressing you're questions, that must mean you have some good questions!
As for men being maritally enslaved, we know a couple of things so far. Men are forced to marry before 25, but they get to choose who they marry. However, once married, a man cannot get divorced without the wife's consent (unless there are extenuating circumstances such as abuse).
1) We know "her head nearly reached the top of the twelve-foot doorway" from chapter 1. So we can assume she's over eleven and a half feet tall.
2) We know the world population 'in real life' was 2 billion in 1927. We also know the first Ascension event occurred in early 1800's in this story. Perhaps that reduced population growth. Perhaps food supply had an effect (it can be assumed Ascended eat more).
3) "As a result, due to the scarcity of heterosexual intercourse during those years, very few men were born." So, it can be assumed natural reproduction (i.e., heterosexual intercourse) still exists and is, in fact, the only way to have a chance of giving birth to males.
4) Good question. Also, assuming a roughly equal ratio of male/female before first Ascension event, why would 'natural reproduction' produce fewer males? We don't know the answers. Yet.
[Report This]Date: October 10 2014 3:15 PM Title: Chapter 8
Aww poor regan getting ganged up on. Ash and luna should do something nice for her and addi.And that fara lady seems horrible, i bet it sucks to be Harold. Stop being a baby and take it like a woman. .haha i see what you did there. I love this story.
Author's Response:
Yeh, Regan really tries. I agree, a gift would be nice.
As for Fara, she does seem pretty intolerable. Does she represent the typical wife in this world? We're not sure.
Glad you're enjoying the story!
[Report This]Date: October 06 2014 6:53 PM Title: Chapter 7
I like where this is headed. Wondering how much bigger Luna will get as this story develops. The tallest woman in the area maybe? Also really getting into the inner struggle she's having between raw instinct and loving compassion. Really good stuff. Hope to read more soon.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Jim!