Reviewer: Afroking Signed [Report This]
Date: April 29 2012 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 1

 

first story i read on site

Reviewer: The GTS Reviewer Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 29 2011 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 36

Hello, Cayce.  I am aware that you’ve taken a very long leave of absence from this site, which is unfortunate for myself and many of your other fans, because you are truly in tune with the giantess fantasy: you understand nearly as well as possible, I believe, how to take the enticing spirit of the fetish and elevate it to something more.

 

COMPLIMENTS: What can I say?  There’s a lot to comment on.  Your narrative itself is perhaps what makes this the strongest and, in my humble opinion, the greatest story on the site.  You focused entirely on creating a 100% believable story before integrating admittedly arousing elements of the actual fetish, and yet it all fits together like the perfect literary PBJ.  Few pieces of dangling illogic show up, and honestly, a connection to the plot itself is made far easier because of this.  I felt myself being inserted fully into the story, living out the events from the perspective of your hapless character, because the story flowed so naturally, once the hump of unreality is crossed; indeed, you made it a hump easily crossed.

 

Your characters are stunningly well-realized.  You managed to craft half a dozen, if not more, fully-developed giantess characters, each with a unique personality and interactions with the main character.  Perhaps best of all, though, was how they ran the gamut of genre types, six of which stand out most clearly to me: you had a calculating, conniving woman as the primary antagonist.  You had a disgusting and subtly clever best friend of the mother who knew how to be a complete psychopath, and yet stay cool the whole time.  You had an entirely becoming and likeable love interest, whom I actually sympathized with the main character’s attraction toward.  You had a mischievous stepsister, and you managed to make the interactions somewhat sexy without making it become creepy between them.  You had a best “friend” for the stepsister, who was an excellent younger reflection of her mother.  Finally, you had a humiliating step-mother character (the best of the story, in my opinion) who managed to be a terrifying, dominating source of power without having her resort to abject, destructive cruelty.

 

The variety of scenarios is excellent.  As you’ll see in the below section, one particular aspect of this felt slightly out of place for me, but for the most part, I was surprised by the glorious amount of varying situational breakdowns of your protagonist’s psych and emotional fortitude.  Just when it seems like it’s not going to get worse, it does, and because, as I mentioned, the human element is so thoroughly adhesive to the reader, you get to feel each unique mini-adventure along with the character, and that’s fantastic.  A favorite moment is nearly impossible to pick, but one in particular stands out to me: the Oreo crushing scene with Kimmy as Ray slowly starves in her captivity.  Sheer, maniacal brilliance for both characters.  It’s a scene I plan on rereading from time to time.

 

THE CRITIQUES: There aren’t many to give on my part for this category, but here we go anyway.  Honestly, my biggest complaint I can possibly level is that the story is so foot-focused, and it’s so long, that I almost wished I could have seen other genres pop up more frequently.  You certainly fit in several others in a few occasions, but for the most part, it’s a gigantic footfest, no pun intended.  Granted, you keep the tension and enjoyment factor up commendably well in these segments, but still, a tiny bit more variety would have been greatly appreciated, especially having seen how well you write “foot” scenes; I would have liked to see some more showcasing for a few of the related genres that could have fit in with the tale just fine and left room for the feet spotlights.

 

One other tiny suggestion I might make is to be aware of your character’s relative “catchphrases” throughout the progressing storyline, as he tends to repeat similar phrasings on more than one occasion.  I know this is bound to happen in such a lengthy story, and many probably won’t even notice it, but it was a tiny reminder to me of the character’s fictional nature.  Again, this is but a tiny blemish on an otherwise phenomenal story.

 

Author's Response: Thanks for the extensive review (and the utterly reasonable critiques =) I know I've been incommunicado for a while, but I'm still around! I've been lurking quite a bit, and working (intermittently) on a new story. Homunculus was the first thing I wrote for this group, and while I remain quite proud of it (especially the ending), there are a few things I would do differently if I were writing it today. But such is the peril of publishing a chapter at a time! My favorite stories on these boards have always been the ones with relatable, realistic characters. When I first started this story, I was basically aping the authors whose stories I most enjoyed (Nemo, Jamie, Branford, DX Machina, and Canuck, to name a few). Nemo in particular has a talent for taking a cliched giantess scenario, deconstructing the crap out of it, and turning it into something totally unique. I'm quite fond of the Oreo scene as well, as well as the first bath scene with Cheryl (which was admittedly inspired by Branford's Bad Day for Shopping). I like most of Ray's interactions with his stepsister Nicole, but there's one that felt wrong and a little out of place when I wrote it, and I've never warmed up to it. I wrote it in reaction to a debate that was raging at the time on the now defunct Giantess Magic message board, where some rather strident members of the community were insisting that merely acknowledging the existence of children in a story was the same thing as child pornography. But going back and rereading the scene, it now seems hamfisted and ill-advised. As you said the repetitiveness is a symptom of a lengthy story, especially one that is published a chapter at a time. I often come up with a particular turn of phrase that I like, and I forget to check and see if I've already used it or not. If I showed this stuff to my editor, I'm sure she would catch those mistakes and slice them out post haste. But when you're editing your own work and publishing piecemeal over the course of a couple of years, that kind of thing tends to slip under the radar. It's a fair cop on the "gigantic footfest" (heh!), and I'll readily admit that those scenes are what really drove me to write this story. Again, my editor would probably cut most of that stuff out as superfluous (and would likely advise me to "quit writing about goddamn feet and go get laid or something"--she talks like a sailor, that one). But as any writer will tell you, killing your own darlings is a difficult thing to do. Thanks again for reading the story and for the great review!

Reviewer: Phil_Tiny Signed [Report This]
Date: May 30 2011 12:27 PM Title: Chapter 1

Cayce this is the GREATEST story
I have read in years!I beg you to make a sequel.PLEEEEEEASE!!

Reviewer: underherheels Signed [Report This]
Date: March 20 2011 6:33 PM Title: Chapter 4

I wish that you would have let Him suffer in her sock for the rest of the night, and than in the morning be placed in Naomis High Heels or something, too bad.

Reviewer: Mr E Signed [Report This]
Date: February 02 2011 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 18

no thank you. I enjoyed reading it. 

and just to clarify things i meant the final line of chapter 18. not the very last line of the last chapter.  I'll get to reviewing that chapter one of these days

Reviewer: Mr E Signed [Report This]
Date: January 09 2011 11:41 PM Title: Chapter 18

nice surprise twist and the final line was a nice touch.

Author's Response: I'm rather happy with the ending myself, so I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reading, Mr. E!

Reviewer: underherheels Signed [Report This]
Date: November 28 2010 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 1

Hey Cayce, Just wondering when your coming out with the new story in the shoe store?

Reviewer: Magicredmonkey Signed [Report This]
Date: January 05 2010 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 1

man you really out did yourself! You know how to pull someone in don't you? Anyway greatest story evar!?!

Author's Response: I appreciate that! It was my first and still my favorite =)

Reviewer: Nitrotix Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2008 5:15 PM Title: Chapter 1

Dude that was amazing. It's discribed perfectly. Every foot scene, even walking was so discriptive. It go me into the stroy, and i felt Ray's pain. You should cntinue to write more stories here on GIANTESS PLANET.   Thank you for being apart of this.

NITROTIX

Author's Response: If I didn't write so damned slowly, I totally *would* write more stories here on GIANTESS PLANET. I've got one more planned after I finish my current one (Summer Job). After that, who knows? I'll probably be in my nineties. Glad you liked it, Nitrotix. Thanks!

Reviewer: Redius Signed [Report This]
Date: October 29 2008 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 1

The best 8 hours of my life well spent. Indeed I could not stop reading this story. I do not know why, but I just couldn't. That usually never happens to me but I ain't complaining. The story the chracters all of it was beleiveable and sucked me right in.

 The ending was surprising to as I thought Ray was done for but could't help but feel joy for the chracter. During the story I actually felt for the guy. I leaped from my chair and laughed when something good finally happened to Ray and utter saddness when things looked down. I will recommend this story to my friends not for the GTS or the sexual encounters but for the chracters and how the world treated one boy who could not "fight" back.

 Thank you for your hard work in this Novel and I look foward to reading any work you do. 

Author's Response: Those bits where Ray does fight back were a lot of fun to write. There's a gleeful abandon to the way he acts every time he gets the upper hand. He knows he'll be punished for it eventually, but he just doesn't care. Glad you liked it, Redius. Thanks!