Date: January 06 2015 1:24 PM Title: Payback's A Cassie
This is a crucial moment in the story it seems, however I felt there could have been more detail in the chapter. The chapter is clearly supposed be be quite tense but description of the critical parts was rather brief I felt. It alsmost seemed, dare I say it, rushed. I don't want to come across as rude. My feeling is there needs to be 'more meat on these bones', as they say. Well, you know, it's a decent chapter but it needs more...descriptive language...which should help add to the tension.
Author's Response:
Okay, I'll do my utmost to improve upon it. You're right about it being a crucial moment in the story but fret not, it's not the only one, there's at least two more of those moments on the way although I won't tell you what they're about. Thanks for pointing these things, they really help with improving the story.
Date: January 06 2015 12:57 PM Title: Dolls
This is story didn't go in the direction I was expecting. Yeah, I'm (kind of) back. Guess the urge to read good stories became too strong to stay away permenatly as it's easy enough to dismiss ones I don't like. I can't see myself uploading any new ones to my account here though. And plus, I've barely written declared I was leaving, back in June of 2014.
Anyhow, I was expecting Cassie be nice to Alvin from the start. Well, half-expecting that is. Secondly, I did not expect her to have a doll house in her room. She is an unexpected character and I'm still trying to 'get my head around' how she miscontrue Alvin's being tied up as him being a pervent. Surely his predicament would be obvious? Maybe I wasn't pay enough attention.
I am quite eager to keep reading, actually, so I'll keep this review stort. Basically, I like how this story has surprised me. That's all I got for now. Have a nice day!
Author's Response:
Thanks for it and I'll say that Cassie having a dollhouse would be for nostalgic reasons from her childhood, that's the reason for it. It's also great to see you back on the site and I hope you stick around.
Date: January 02 2015 6:18 PM Title: Bios
Why does he only have to go through this until the end of the month? What happens then? Did I miss something, or is it a secret?
Author's Response:
His graduation is at the end of the month, that's all really.
Date: December 31 2014 8:08 PM Title: Bios
how about cassie takes allen home for the remainder of the month, then there is no cinderallen at home. Wendy will have to cook and clean for herself, and patricia will be too busy finding a job to care or notice.
Author's Response:
That's an idea, it would certainly solve a lot of the problems you mentioned. But it's a little too easy don't you think?
Date: December 30 2014 9:38 PM Title: Bios
oh, i put a link on "this one" to the story, but it didnt work. copy and paste it into your browser.
http://www.giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=3646
Author's Response:
I read it and I'm sorry, it doesn't really interest me. However I do have plenty of stories planned once I finish what I have at the moment so perhaps you'll enjoy those.
Date: December 30 2014 9:12 PM Title: Bios
You should do a story that continues this one. The author does not update it anymore, but it is intresting.
Author's Response:
Wait, I'm confused. Did you mean another story?
Date: December 30 2014 7:40 PM Title: Counter
“ Oh really? You can’t even reach the top of the shelf without a stepladder and you’re talking about hitting moi?”
Is the "moi" on purpose?
Author's Response:
Yep, just for Wendy to further insult Alvin.
Date: December 30 2014 6:40 PM Title: Bios
I did create the account to rewiew this. I am the same person with the account "joemomma" that commented on aftermath a few years ago(i forget how long)
Author's Response:
It was only last year but it does feel like a few years, what with all the writing I've done. I recall someone with that user commenting, thanks for the review there and many reviews here.
Date: December 30 2014 6:20 PM Title: Payback's A Cassie
You said "“ Cass-” Alvin’s SOS call was cut off by Camilla’s hand clamping itself on Alvin’s lips like a facehugger, her vice like grip squeezing his cheekbones, A lvin swore they would break if she so much as increased the force on them."
There is no space in Alvin
Author's Response:
Ah, good of you to notice. Must have missed it during editing. I'll fix it later.
Date: December 30 2014 6:13 PM Title: Bios
do thier cup sizes really have to be on the bios???? Thats kind of.... weird....
Author's Response:
I find it helps to visualise the character better, I used to include eye and hair colour but it was kind of obvious so I dropped that.
Date: December 30 2014 4:01 PM Title: Pasta and Meteors
I like the story though!
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Author's Response:
Thanks, I noticed you created an account on the same day you reviewed my story, did you do it for this?
Date: December 30 2014 3:55 PM Title: Pasta and Meteors
you said "Alvin calmly wiped some spit off his cheek, Patricia’s tirade feeling limp and impotent."
You mispelled tired
Author's Response:
No no, tirade as in a scolding of some sort, I wasn't describing her energy level.
Date: December 30 2014 3:53 PM Title: Pasta and Meteors
You said "As he walked back to his house, a simple two storey building, the second floor was where all the bedrooms were, his load felt a lighter."
You mispelled story
Author's Response:
I used the British spelling for this since where I'm from we normally the British format.
[Report This]Date: December 27 2014 3:03 AM Title: Counter
Excellent chapter. Great to see some of Patricia away from home. And now she's been fired with only Alvin to vent her frustrations on. Also the fact that Wendy showed some emotions hopefully means something positive and nit just that she was embarrassed about tripping. Love the part where Cassie contemplates going to Alvin's track practice(I hope she does). Hope Patricia can be nicer to her son(or is he stepson) because what happened to her was actually kinda awful.
aaron
PS in a perfect world Cassie and Wendy would become friends but Wendy is gonna have to change.
Great story!!
Author's Response:
I don't think Patricia would do that but you're right in that she isn't too fond of Alvin at all, she could easily turn into a full time abusive stepmother.
Oh you picked up on Wendy's trip? Observant of you to see it, remember that bit.
For the rest of your speculations, I'll neither confirm nor deny it, just ask that you look at the next chapter in 3 weeks.
[Report This]Date: December 26 2014 7:10 PM Title: Counter
So does Cassie really think she can keep Alvin safe even at home? What about from his step mom Patricia? Who knows what she might do to Alvin now that she lost her job, they never really were on good terms to begin with...It looks like Linda taking over wasnt good for everyone at the company!
AND did I just see Wendy cry!? Am I supposed to feel bad for her now, because it's not working, especially since she just tried to burn Alvin against the stove!
Good chapter, this is probably my favorite of your still updating stories, no joke!
Author's Response:
Yeah, Linda becoming CEO didn't benefit everyone but I would say it's for the best, no more sexual harassment or scams being perpertrated by the company.
Yep, Wendy shed some tears there but there's more to her than I've revealed so far, keep your eyes peeled.
If this is your favourite, I shall have to work harder to find something you'll like even more, can't settle for just this, although it does seem to be very well received.
[Report This]Date: December 26 2014 5:00 PM Title: Bios
Amazing Christmas gift, even if it was a little late :)
This chapter was interesting to say the least. Wondering what both Wendy and Cassie have planned for Alvin. Also curious to see how Katherine, and Cassie's friends will tie into all of this.
Author's Response:
I'll just say that not all of the characters introduced in this story will have their arcs resolved by the time this story ends. Some of them need more than one.
[Report This]Date: December 26 2014 11:21 AM Title: Counter
Intriguing subplot you've introduced, here. Will Wendy be stealing a shrink ray, from Patricia, to use against Cassie? Or, will it be a gigantism ray to make her Titan-sized?
Author's Response:
If they were on the same scale, Wendy would probably win in a fight since Titans have lighter bones and less muscle density compared to them. So if Wendy did as you suggested, Cassie would be a lot less powerful. Having said that, if they were on the same scale Cassie would be taller as Wendy is a short Amazon and Cassie is a tall Titan.
[Report This]Date: December 26 2014 10:56 AM Title: Counter
Well this was a awesome Christmas gift. Wendy tried to get revenge but sorta failed.
Alvin and Cassie are growing closer and closer. Soon they're probably going to go out.
Thanks for the amazing chapter
Author's Response:
You're welcome, Wendy kind of failed but at least Cassie has made her think twice before laying a finger on Alvin again although Alvin is still in danger from her.
Date: December 09 2014 6:31 PM Title: In the Company of Titans
Nicely done. I like the relationship between everybody. Flowing naturally.
Author's Response:
Thank you, I place a lot of emphasis on character development in my stories these days, trying not to make the mistake of Aftermath.
[Report This]Date: December 08 2014 12:56 PM Title: In the Company of Titans
Yep! Wendy's proven herself a typical bully. She can't take what she dishes out.
P.S.---Sorry about almost missing this update. :-(
Author's Response:
It's okay, if you didn't review the chapter then I take it either you're too busy to review or the chapter wasn't engaging enough for you to review, which only means I have to work harder.