[Report This]Date: August 30 2014 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
Well I guess I better investigate the sudden disapperence of my friends. *buys plane ticket*
I swear to god If I'm not in the sequal...
Author's Response:
Hahaha - Sequal :P?
Also, I'm pretty sure Casanova is writing a similar story to this one if he hasn't already finished it - check him out and see.
Date: August 28 2014 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great as always, Ryth. I was rooting for ya, as you know. But was also rooting for Emma to sit on you in the end. Oh well. ;)
Author's Response:
Hehe, that's for another time ;)
Date: August 27 2014 11:21 PM Title: Chapter 1
Aw shit, I meant feet are greater than or equal to butts. I don't know why the hell x05 showed up instead. Maybe I really am that tired.
Author's Response:
Hahahaha - Feet multiplied by 5 = butts. Therefore, Butts are five times better than feet.
[Report This]Date: August 27 2014 11:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
Aw, a party, why wasn't I invited? I like orgies... (and I have three unoccupied holes at the moment, HINT HINT)
Feet x05; Butts
Feet are just my thing, I don't know why. But in the humiliation department, butts totally trump feet. Poop comes from there. Also farts. Sometimes poo-infested semen.
(I'm really sorry man, it's 1 in the morning...)
Author's Response:
Ha :P - I don't know if this site has private messages, but send me one with a more vivid description of the things you like and maybe I'll make you the subject of my next 'orgie'.
[Report This]Date: August 27 2014 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 1
IF THIS HAPPENED I WOULD MISS JAMES!!!!
This was a great story and :-( i wasnt there, i was sick. I laughed at this story only because of ETZ's line in the end. Keep up the good work and i expect more great stories.
Author's Response:
Oh there shall be more ;) worry ye not.
[Report This]Date: August 27 2014 6:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
>tfw story with Ryth and Emma
>tfw it's super hot
>tfw
You've outdone yourself, with an interesting concept that I honestly had no clue how you'd manage to tie it together and have it be as fun, engaging and erotic as it was. This could have been a disaster in many ways, but you had an excellent hand the entire way through, and managed to write quite possibly my favorite story on this site. Well done. <3
Author's Response:
Sometimes you've just gotta go out on a limb with a story like this one; if you believe it can work as a writer, you've got to be willing to risk total failure :P
[Report This]Date: August 27 2014 1:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
Rythmear, this story was deliciously meta, and as far as I know it's the first of its kind written on this site. I must say that not only is the premise creatively captivating, but it also is executed very well. Your writing mechanics are top notch throughout, and you are able to convey both characters' personalities well, particularly EmmaGear's progression from subtly imposing to outright aggression. I also appreciate how you didn't waste a lot of time on the set-up: just a few lines in you set the stage for a chatroom gathering, and the throwaway clauses about various members' trepidation really sells it. Going back to the premise, the idea that all of us would get together in real life, and having that get together lead to a real life shrinking strikes so close to home that everything that happens next has an edge of immediacy that makes the story that much better. Lastly, that final line is just perfect -- really well done!
There's hardly anything to criticize here, but one thing that did stick out for me was James's unwillingness to say "feet are better than butts." Of all things, that seemed the easiest to go with, whereas the physical acts of worship would seem to be worse. For instance, I would say "dicks are better than pussies" long, long, long before I would actually give a blowjob. It just didn't seem to make sense that that would be the sticking point. I think a more sensible sticking point would be the licking portion of the punishment; however, you do have a nice transition set up where James recites all things Emma is superior to him in, at which point he finds himself shrunk, and it would be a shame to give that up.
Regardless of that minor point, the story was extremely sexy overall, and I enjoyed reading it so much that I want to write a story with a similar premise (with your permission, obviously). Thanks for the great story, and I look forward to more!
P.S. Feet > Butts
Author's Response:
Butts 4 eva :P
It's funny, I was going to have the entire debate begin when he chose 'Buttsdabest' as his username in the game :P - but it didn't quite fit as smoothly.
As for the unwillingness to say rather than do, as I'm sure you've guessed, James is based on myself - and I often find myself in situations where I have to do something I don't enjoy, but I flatly refuse to say I enjoy it unless I do. The pride thing is extremely reflective of my real-life self; I'll shovel shit if I have to, but I'll never -ever- say I enjoy it, 'cause I don't :P
Your cock-sucking example is a good comparison, though were that a situation that actually occurred in one of these stories, I would never have agreed to it - it would've required an absolutely absurdly high offer from them, and if they were willing to go that high, then I'd suspect something was up. It was after all more of a personal victory for Emma more than anything else :3
[Report This]Date: August 27 2014 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
A very enjoyable read! I really loved how you played off the idea of people with opposing kinks here, especially her desire for an unwilling victim, and how that manifested in him. Haha, that last line is truly great. Also, I didn't know I would be in this. I could not stop giggling when I appeared as an unconscious prop. :D
I particularly enjoyed how James responded to being teased with the lure of his kinks. I feel like I know that kinda reaction and it made his character very lifelike for me. She did, too, with the texture you wrote into her preferences.
Even if this used random names instead of evoking people I'm fond of, I feel like I would have enjoyed it just as much because it's very well done all around.
Author's Response:
Hehehe - cheers dear ;) - and yes, the conflicting fetishes idea was the genesis for this one.