Date: August 12 2014 7:59 PM Title: 'Meet Christy'
I'm liking where the story is going! A++ so far
Author's Response: Thanks :) There's a lot more to come
[Report This]Date: August 12 2014 6:47 PM Title: 'Unexpected'
I can definitely like this style more. It worked really well with Kai and Tris, and there's no reason it won't work well here. It offers the opportunity to cleanly switch perspectives without confusion, and even allows you to replay moments from different perspectives, which is something I really liked with your previous story.
Now as for the content, I definitely love where this is going. Despite being a bit of a bully, you still manage to make her a sympathetic character. Glad you adjusted her size, as 40 feet works better, in my opinion.
Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks :) There's a lot more to come.
Date: August 12 2014 6:21 PM Title: 'Unexpected'
My only critism to this chapter : Far to many sentences start with "I". Most of it reads like a checklist of some sort. I aproach the door. I put my hand on the knob. I turn the knob. I push the door open. I release the knob. I walk trough the doorcase. I turn around. I close the door.....
Sorry if it sounds all negative but that really disturbed me at reading this chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks I'll try to start some of the sentences differently, I appreciate the help, not negative at all :)
Date: August 12 2014 8:18 AM Title: 'Meet Christy'
A nice start indeed, probably she finds someone who submits to her and stays with her accepting her "bad" behavor :)
Keep writing
[Report This]Date: August 11 2014 11:50 PM Title: 'Meet Christy'
You seem to have some of the scaling confused. I suggest you use the Giantess Converter in the Writing Tools section of this website. Can really give you a good idea of how her scale compares to normal people.
For instance, at her scale, a person would be between 1.5 and 2 feet tall. Not quite small enough to do some of the games described in this initial chapter.
Other than that, I find this premise to be enjoyable. I like that she isn't really aware of how much of a bully she is, which can set her up for "redemption", which is a subject I always tend to enjoy.
Author's Response: I'll address the issue with her size right away. I've always enjoyed reading about these story lines so I decided fo write one like it. Look out for a lot more in this story.
Date: August 11 2014 8:49 PM Title: 'Meet Christy'
Pretty good! Looking forward the rest
Author's Response: Thanks :)
[Report This]Date: August 11 2014 7:38 PM Title: 'Meet Christy'
Very cool, will this be ongoing?
Author's Response: Yes it will, I'll be writing the chapters slower than my last story though.
Date: August 11 2014 7:24 PM Title: 'Meet Christy'
Make her bigger if you want to do butt action since shoving a man down her pants at 20ft isn't realistic.
Author's Response: Will do :)
[Report This]Date: August 11 2014 6:33 PM Title: 'Meet Christy'
Awesome. I was sad to read that Kai and Tris had anded, but his ca become a great replacement :)
Author's Response: Kai and Tris could continue later on, but for now I'm taking a break from it. I felt like I ran out of ideas in that story, but I have plenty more for this story. :)
[Report This]Date: August 11 2014 2:39 PM Title: 'Meet Christy'
Good start to your new story. Butt action already? Must have more!!! Seriously though, I really enjoyed this so far. Naming her Christy was definitely a good choice of now.
Author's Response: Thanks :) It's a great name.