Date: January 21 2017 1:40 AM Title: All And Nothing
I think this one rates as one of my most favorite stories of all time.
[Report This]Date: December 06 2016 12:36 PM Title: All And Nothing
I've never got the whole permanent alteration thing. I'd give several weeks, maybe more, of serious thought and discussion with my significant other before I made that jump. Still. Great tale.
[Report This]Date: July 16 2014 3:56 PM Title: All And Nothing
Binary_Prophet, you've used quite an interesting style here. I have to say I usually dislike the no quotation marks bent that some authors use, but in this case I think it adds to the ethereal quality that you're clearly going for, and overall it works really well. In a lot of ways, this piece reads more like poetry than prose, and it's sort of crazy that the content is ultimately supposed to be porn. In fact, you've really blurred the line here, so kudos for that.
I usually try to write some sort of constructive criticism, but in this case there's hardly anything to harp on. I guess in a way your story is almost too good in that a lot of what we write and read on this site is meant to stimulate our more carnal senses, and what you've written sort of strays away from that. It's weird, I personally find myself favoring some of the more direct, yet objectively more poorly written stories, which puts me in a weird sort of space. On the one hand, I frankly love writing, and if I thought I was viably good at it, I would do it for a living. I strive to be better and to take it seriously, and I try to be that way when I write reviews for others. On the other hand, this is a site that doesn't exactly foster that same mentality, and I always find myself striking a balance in what I write between "The Good Parts" (a story written by someone who knows exactly what I'm talking about) and also just trying to improve my writing in general.
I don't know exactly what the point that I'm trying to make is, but needless to say I enjoyed reading what you wrote, and I definitely look forward to more of the same.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much, Casanova. I'm glad you enjoyed this one and how it was written. I do hope you found it to be erotic still, because it is supposed to be porn -- that's true. My aim is always to be erotic.
I know that space you're speaking of, talking about more to-the-point smut. I feel that for sure. That's typically what I'm after, as a reader. And it's true, this has no carnal scenes. This was rather emotionally written, I'll say, after the rough end of a long relationship (years ago). I had a different objective in what I aimed to capture here than I do most of the time when I sit down and crank out some porn. Perhaps this gives it a different quality.
It sounds like you're hedging between a style you want to write in and one you don't because you're concerned about the audience here at World. If it helps to hear, consider yourself your audience. If you write what you like, you'll find readers who like it, too. In this way, you please your audience by pleasing yourself. Or do what I do and get off as you write this stuff. If it doesn't turn you on, you know it's no good.
[Report This]Date: July 12 2014 8:55 PM Title: All And Nothing
Good short story, dont see them often. I like how you as the reader get to infer what she is thinking about.
Author's Response:
Thank you for that. Very glad you enjoyed it!
[Report This]Date: July 12 2014 5:54 PM Title: All And Nothing
That ended harshly.
Author's Response:
'Tis my preference! Thanks for reading.