Reviewer: Simpson3k Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2014 7:30 AM Title: Disorientation

This is really an intressting story. At the current point of the story i am still not sure if Alex did what she is charged for or if she is innocent and those betas maligned her. I wonder if you (the writer) are even sure about that fact at this point ^^ .

 

Anyway if she will be innocence in the end it the truth becomes puplic knowlede to the omegas and most important to Bridget, i wonder how she will react after what she did to her "friend" and if her friendship will be over after this.

 

But hey perhaps Alex is begging Bridget for death before it happens to end her suffering.

Author's Response:

I have a very specific plot in mind for this, so there is an answer to that that will show up later in the story.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2014 1:28 PM Title: Kismet

This chapter really shows that these two had common ground and became good friends! Which is why whats happening in the present is such a shame!

Author's Response:

A very bittersweet moment. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: aaron Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2014 7:55 AM Title: Kismet

"Never have to be afraid again" indeed.
Great chapter.

aaron

Author's Response:

Heh. Oh, mean irony. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2014 6:57 AM Title: Kismet

Well I wish I knew what exactly happened to Lexi in the subway but this is  tender moment. 

Author's Response:

There will be more background on what happened prior to this event later in the story.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: August 27 2014 5:50 PM Title: Guidance

A heartwarming Jacksmith story arc...this was unexpected. ;)

 

Great stuff.

Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 27 2014 1:19 PM Title: Guidance

This chapter kinda felt like filler to be honest, not that theres anything wrong with that. Im sure you'll bring some of this stuff up in the main story.

Author's Response:

Hmm, I'd say it's worth holding judgment on whether its filler or not until you've seen the whole picture and how everything fits together. Hope you like the upcoming stuff.

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed [Report This]
Date: August 22 2014 9:17 PM Title: Disorientation

I have a pretty solid working theory about happened, and I look forward to more chapters to see how right or wrong I am.

Author's Response:

The info will keep coming piecemeal in upcoming chapters, so keep your eyes open.

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 18 2014 1:34 PM Title: Answers

Every bit as heartwretching as I thought it would be...

Author's Response:

Good to hear, in a very sick kind of way!

Reviewer: Naoru Signed [Report This]
Date: August 18 2014 9:00 AM Title: Disorientation

This story reminds meof a short video I watched once "A man in the woods" a child in a school starts to say that there is a man in the woods in which proximity the kidsplay in the school. Starts to describe the man as a killer, and all the kids start to talk about it,and to say they watched the man too. Soon the parents know, and the principalstart being harassed. He know the kid is lying, but no one would believe that a "sweet innocent child"would lie. That the principal is neglecting to do something about the killer,and they get him fired and ruin his life. The principal then goes to the woods, deciding to play along with the lie forced upon him,and kills the lying child.

I dont think its a thing of omegas being abusive; its about when someone we perceive as a victim, a child, a woman, someone we see as innocent and unable to lie, acuses someone of abuse, what can you do? teenager girls have accused teachers of molestation, just for being grounded or their cellphones taken. It happends. Now, think on this universe. A beta, a small, helpless creature that had been abused as a race over the years. One calls on an alpha abuser, and no one ever thinksit can be lying or being confused. They are seen as victims for the omega. They instantly believe.

 

I picture a story with an alfa falsely acused that breaks and starts murdering betas, to take upon the label forced on them. It could happend, anytime, because the omegas cant just believe. They got to be sure. It happends with anyone, in any society.

Author's Response:

You bring up some interesting points.  Certainly, a conflict I'm trying to shed light on here is the one of Alphas and Betas, albeit from a different angle than has been shown before, and how their past involving Beta subjugation has made it easier for this situation to arise. The Omegas are indeed not being abusive, and do their best to give fair treatment to everyone, but in certain cases like this one, it's hard not to side with the Betas.

Reviewer: vitD Signed [Report This]
Date: August 10 2014 9:30 AM Title: Irrefutable

I got the urge to play one of the Ace Attorney games after reading the part about the evidence. It seems they were very quick to come to a conclusion without conducting a proper investigation. Not everything is what it seems...but maybe I've played too many Ace Attorney games lol. But I do get the feeling something crucial is missing from that incident. 

I'm actually hoping Alexandra is innocent, I really am. I know Aegis is looking out for the Betas but there doesn't appear to be anyone looking out for the Alphas (Though, like you said there may be some organisations out there but what can they do to Aegis?).

I get the Omegas are the peacekeepers; they aim to maintain a balance in this society, but there isn't anything to keep them in check from falsely punishing an Alpha (as far as we know). They seem so sure of their decisions and methods, but honestly, I'd like to see them taken down a peg or two - that no Alpha should be punished without a fair investigation and hearing. If not, how are they any better from an offending Alpha? I suppose they see it as performing justice, but from the chapters I've read between this and the original story, I get that some Omegas take enjoyment in punishing Alphas. And if one of those Omegas were an Enforcer to Alexandra, and she's found later to be innocent, it doesn't matter if it was an act of justice or not, they still took enjoyment from dominating and punishing someone smaller than them. They're really no better than an Alpha intentionally hurting a Beta. I hope this makes sense. 

This is based entirely whether or not Alexandra is innocent or not lol (Which I hope she is).

Long rant is long, but I'm really enjoying this story. It's one of my favourite stories on this site at the moment, and the wait between chapters kills! 

 

Author's Response:

Thanks for sharing your thoughts. Ethically there is indeed plenty of room to see gray area in how Aegis operates, though it is important to remember that the system was put in place as a necessary deterrant to the inhuman way things were being run before the Omegas rose to power.  There's still a very wide moral gap, despite how grim this particular situation looks.  Aegis really is looking out for the Alphas as well, but in cases like this, considering the historical difficulties between the classes, it's hard not to err on the side of defending the seemingly downtrodden.  I'm glad you're enjoying the story!