[Report This]Date: November 01 2014 1:27 AM Title: 'Enlightenment'
First off, Happy Halloween to you too. This chapter wasn't scary, but rather sexy.
However, it wasn't as sexy as I hoped it would be. It seems as if Zena is still trying to prepare Max for his long list of sexual torture.
Zena keeps saying that things are going to happen, and by the time that happens, it's either the end of the chapter or it beings in the next chapter.
Basically, only 2 things really happened in this chapter: Zena removing Max's body hair, and Tina discovering Max's clothes.
You did a good job explaining how Zena is trying to physically and mentally take over Max's mind by being this "goddess". I still think that Max believes that he is held captive be a large beautiful woman, but not to the point where Zena is his goddess. We'll not yet.
She has to break him down first, and you said that putting him in the panty drawer would serve that purpose. However, after losing his body hair, Max now looks at her underwear as comfort, as a blanket. Not as something to break him down.
Also, that paragraph about Zena having all these ideas to make Max an obedient slave, well, those ideas seem to be the same as the ideas of every other giantess in this story. Nothing was new that made me admire Zena any more than the next giantess.
What time is it exactly on this day? Zena woke up at 6:30 am two chapters ago, and they had sex, and Max has been unconscious for 2 hours. Sure they had breakfast, but why is Zena wondering how Max will do in the evening without a checkup when it sounds like it's still the morning? Where did all that time go? A clarification would be nice.
The removal of body hair was a nice touch becuase it gives Max the sense that Zena owns him. And what I mean by that is that he lost his hair, his own unique hair to a giantess who simply wanted Max to look 'cleaner'.
Without hair, Max should be touching something warm at all times, especially since he doesn't have his clothes too. I hope Zena puts Max in some tight, cozy areas that will warm him up.
I think it's time to switch to another giantess for the next chapter. Zena is taking a bit too slow for my taste. Well, that's my opinion. But I hope the next chapter will spice things up.
Author's Response:
Well, I decided to start off slower with Zena,... it seems that alot of the stories that I've read lately, move too quickly into the rough...
I wanted to be more 'visual' with her, and make the reader focus more on the suspense, and the slow build up. When Zena has more time to get playful with her new toy, Max better watch out,.. if she doesn't get her way, she gets very,... well, devious, and she loves to be worshiped!
Don't worry, it's gonna get 'Spicy'!!! ;`)
Date: October 31 2014 3:25 PM Title: 'Enlightenment'
I like the chapter, but I kinda wish we'd pan around to some other characters. We've been getting a lot of Max and Zena over the past several chapters...
Author's Response:
Coming right up! ;`)
[Report This]Date: October 27 2014 9:12 PM Title: 'Nancy's Toy'
Since I'm Tom in this story, this punishment sounds kinda sexy!
I luv panties, and now I'm stuck in a wet one!
I can't wait to see what happens with Max!
[Report This]Date: October 27 2014 7:03 AM Title: 'Nancy's Toy'
One might say that the major was overpowered by a minor.
[Report This]Date: October 23 2014 1:01 PM Title: 'Blueberry Jam'
For some reason, this cliff-hanger reminds me of a Billy Joel song.
"It's 6:30 A.M. on a Saturday.
And, Little Maxie gets shoveled in."
Author's Response:
Well, ... La La La, Di Dee Da, La Da Di Dee --- Dum, dee dee do, dee do...dee de doo...
[Report This]Date: October 23 2014 2:18 AM Title: 'Blueberry Jam'
How did she get turned on so fast? They were eating blueberries, then he was licking it off her nipple, and then she wanted him inside her? Hmm. I thought there would be more foreplay before that.
I like the descriptions u give Zena. I think every body part was mentioned.
6:30 am and it's already a life changing experience for Max. What happens for the next few hours? That's a lot of time for a lot of fun!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Well, I guess she's just an excitable girl! Max is in for some rough treatment, he might discover something about her though, that he could use in his favor. However, he'll have a lot of work to do before he finally gets a chance to prove himself to her,...
Thanks Tom! I have to agree that this chapter 'alone', did seem kind of rushed, but,... when you back up and read the two chapters before it, (leading up) it's really kind of, slow...
[Report This]Date: October 18 2014 10:09 PM Title: 'Zena's House'
She doesn't seem that bad,
Nice chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Although,... Never judge a journalist by her 'cover', she might lead a double life. ;`)
[Report This]Date: October 18 2014 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a good story for the most part although 1) spellchecking is desperately needed 2) I think there's some inconsistency about the number of dead in the early chapters 3) some grammar issues at times that can lead to confusion. Overall, this is a good story though!
Author's Response:
........ "desperately", 'needed'? I don't think there's That, many spelling errors! You may find a few, but, hey,... I'm doing this on 'Notepad', So....
I might miss a key stroke occasionally, but... I wouldn't say that it's "desparately" needed,... you make it sound like it's really bad. How many misspelled words did you find?
Overall,... good huh? and yet only two stars? Thanks for the review, I Think,... :/
[Report This]Date: October 17 2014 11:20 AM Title: 'Zena's House'
Yes, I suspect an ability to hold his breath a long time will come in very handy. Like, say, in the sport of giantess cave exploration (hereafter known as "she-lunking")?
[Report This]Date: October 17 2014 1:29 AM Title: 'Zena's House'
It sucks. I thought this was the chapter that Zena gets rough with him.
Nah, I'm kidding it was a good chapter. I still wanted the sexy stuff this chapter tho. The good news is that you put so much detail into this "setup" chapter, that I can't wait for the next ones.
You spent like 1/4 of the chapter talking about Max's struggle with pissing. I thought some of it was unnecessary.
The chain removal scene was great becuase it allowed Zena to gain Max's trust.
I was surprised that Zena didn't have any sexual feelings this chapter. Instead there was one statement that didn't sound sexuall but it defiantly was meant to be. The part about Max holding his breath. That was the first instance, and I think maybe when Zena was holding him in her hand that maybe she could start getting some feelings of sexual control.
I also like the relationship of luxury that you put for Zena. As a reporter she was wearing something fancy. Then here you mention that her house was fancy, and lastly her robe.
Some random details I enjoyed: Feeling the metal chain to see if it was connected to anything. That fact that he pissed before eating or drinking. That was his priority. Looking to see his reflection on Zena's fingernail. Nice touch.
As always, a nice chapter, and I can't wait for the next one!
[Report This]Date: October 15 2014 9:57 PM Title: 'Zena's Little Secret'
I'm loving Zena! Can't wait to see what she has in store for Max *weg*
So many tantalizing storylines going on, I want them all! lol. Love the style you inject to each scene. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response:
Thanks Max! I hope I'm getting 'somewhat' better at this,...
[Report This]Date: October 14 2014 9:13 AM Title: 'Zena's Little Secret'
That would make a great title for the next chapter: "Zena (Journalistic Princess)!"
Author's Response:
..... Zena- 'Warrior/journalistic/giantess'- Princess! ;`)
Thanks Cary!
[Report This]Date: October 13 2014 8:12 PM Title: 'Zena's Little Secret'
Epic chapter!
I can't wait to see what happens to Max! I already enjoyed how Zena stole him.
It could only get better now. I can't wait!
Author's Response:
Thanks Tom! There's alot more to come,...
[Report This]Date: October 06 2014 7:28 AM Title: 'Flashback'
1) Don't sweat it, re: LIFE'S "LITTLE" IRONIES. You did me a favor in disguise, as I'd grown bored with that story, anyway! And, I suspect more than half of my otherwise loyal lurkers had, as well.
2) It looks like Jennifer unintentionally put Billy Bob out of his misery. Ergo; it looks like Valerie will have to declare bankruptcy as a man-broker.
Date: October 06 2014 1:48 AM Title: Chapter 1
@gadget, I think it was an accident. She said "argh" at the end, which I think meant that she was angry at herself for killing him.
[Report This]Date: October 06 2014 1:46 AM Title: 'Flashback'
Wow, not exactly one of the most exciting chapters but definitely one of the deepest chapters in this story.
When I look at this chapter as a whole, it is indeed a flashback, but much more than that. You even mentioned more detail than the chapters about Billy. The types of customers, made me realize how sad his life has become. He hated farts so much that he would rather get abused. It makes his every breath worth it, but he enjoyed breathing his last. His torment is over.
Bill never had a sexy giantess. He was first abused by that Salon woman, then abused by the teenagers, then abused by Jennifer who put him out of his misery.
Captain Jim on the other hand got all the sexy giantesses. He had Marie, then Julianne, then Jane. Those are my 3 favorite giantesses and Jim got used by them all. Lucky guy.
With Billy gone, we start looking at who is left. Marie has 4, Zena has 1, there are 3 in the cage, a teen girl has 1, and ....I think that's it.
"When one door closes, another one opens." Bill's story has finished, but who do we visit next? I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: October 06 2014 1:38 AM Title: 'Flashback'
Wait did she kill Bob on purpose or was it an accident? It wasn't too clear at the end there...If she DID kill him on purpose, well, she's kinda stupid considering how much a commodity men are in this world.
[Report This]Date: October 01 2014 1:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
@Maximus. Wildcat is purposely putting us in the story. Since I'm Tom, WildCat read my fantasy mind and now I'm trapped in a hot teenage girl's panties. She is crossing her legs and getting me worn out.
For you, Wildcat made yourself captured by as ena Maxell. I'm sure you will have great time. I want to read about it in the next chapter, right Wildcat? :)
[Report This]Date: September 30 2014 8:15 PM Title: 'The Next Day'
OOooh, Max was captured by beautiful Zena MAXwell, yum. Can't wait to see how that plays out :) Looks like the rest are being rounded up, things are going to heat up soon!
[Report This]Date: September 29 2014 7:06 AM Title: 'Impetuosity'
Latest score from the Out-of-this-World Cup.
Marie: 4
Shrinkies: 0
Next quarter to start off with Jane handing off to Marie. ;-)
Author's Response:
Yes sir! Marie's got enough little men now to, maybe,... start her own little miniature cleaning crew? Or, maybe a pit crew for her tired feet? I don't know what she'll do with all of them, but,... you know it's gonna be fun! ;`)