You must login (register) to review.
Reviewer: lilguyunderfoot Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 19 2014 6:54 AM Title: Chapter 04: A Quick Get away

this is ok but you could use some more work on stuff. its super short and you don't need to tell all the bio stuff, just show it in the story.



Author's Response:

Thanks I'll try my best. I'll try to think of more things, but a lot of info. doesn't just come into my head like magic.



Author's Response:

Thanks I'll try my best. I'll try to think of more things, but a lot of info. doesn't just come into my head like magic.

You must login (register) to review.

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. No money is being made from this work. No copyright infringement is intended.