Date: April 26 2015 5:19 PM Title: Chapter 5
I hope that someday soon, you will update the English version of this story to bring it up to the status of your French version. It's a very enjoyable story, and I'm sure that the remaining chapters will be equally enjoyable. Unfortunately, my French is insufficient to read in that language.
Author's Response:
Thanks but don't worry about the French version containing more content than the English version. I can't read or write a word of French. Dood07 was generous enough to translate the story and unless he added more material they have the same amount of content. However, with the release of http://g.e-hentai.org/g/841400/91bc85c725/ I am feeling very tempted to add more to the story. After all it was the original hentai and my friend Max, an absoprtion fan, who inspired the first 60 pages.
Date: July 04 2014 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great work as always!
[Report This]Date: May 27 2014 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 5
I loved every bit of this story. It took me a while get through it. Some chapters took me several sittings to read through. But I never felt it dragged on longer than it needed to. I actually liked how you handled the fights, doing mostly recaps of the important parts.
Julia went from being a noble duelist facing other witches in battle, kind of like High-Lander, as much as I'm familiar with that. She than became a predator, hunting and stealing other witch's magic. And finally, a noble soul, countering the actions of evil witches in the world. (Though it almost looked like she was ready to turn to the dark side in Brexington at the drive through.)
I thought John adapted a bit too fast in the beginning. The story kind of glosses his coping with the lost of his old life. Julia spent more time agonizing over it. Still I'm happy for him and Julia.
I loved the bits with Rina and her continuous quest for equal attention in all things.
It's a shame the story ends just a major opponent appears. I kept looking for the double-cross with Sharon, especially when she started talking about puppets. I expected a supper powerful witch to spring a trap or Lina's mind controlled true witch partner to appear, but relaxed when the transfer went through. Then bam, you hit us with the twist at the end. (Though wouldn't Lina know what Sharon was up to?) If you ever extend this story, I wonder if they might find Sharon has contracted with Rina's mother.
Author's Response:
I'm glad that you enjoyed it. For me this story didn't seem like the type to have long battles descibed yet I didn't want to make it seem like a light matter. So going over the damage done to her after the battle and a few of the high notes seemed like a good way to handle it. It seems to have worked.
John didn't help her much at that moment but then again he made it pretty clear he hated that city. Of course. Even if Julia gets angry enough to use her magic against someone it doesn't mean she's going to go for their life.
True but I wanted to keep this story relatively short. That John and Julia are good friends I believe helps explain things plus I imagined John as very quick to adapt to new situation. I didn't want him to be the type to sulk about things that can't be helped or do something foolish.
Rina was fun to write about
A witch's familiar only knows what the witch is planning when it involves breaking the rules. So she knew when Sharon decided not to hunt other witches but not why not to hunt other witches. I don't believe Sharon or Julia would ever be enemies. Sharon was there to show that Julia isn't the only very cunning witch. I believe they're also cunning enough to realize they're plenty of weaker witches out there and going after one another would be counter productive. Each one see the other as too dangerous. As for if Sharon's plan worked that's unknown.
[Report This]Date: May 25 2014 8:41 AM Title: Chapter 5
Sharron was looking at the big picture.
Really enjoying the relationship between John and Julie as well as Rina. Rina is a awesome clueless soul, which that what I like.
Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
That could be a very long wait. For the time being the story is considered finished. I'm glad that you enjoyed it though. This story was my attempt to show the type of relationship I'd like to have with a giantess as a shrunken man and I believe I succeeded rather well. I'm glad other people have enjoyed it as well.
[Report This]Date: May 24 2014 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 5
This doesn't feel like a complete story. It feels like Act One, at most. You've set up a lot of intriguing plots without resolving anything, or even exploring their possibilities. You mentioned becoming a Resonance, and have barely even begun her quest to achieve that. This has all sorts of story potential - getting there and what Julia does once she's there could be several stories. At the end, you mentioned that Sharon has a scheme that could spawn an entire story on its own. I recommend that you make this the introduction to a series - I find your universe intriguing, and this part is well written. I'd like to see more.
I found the chapters too long. For me, the sweet spot is about 7000 words.
Author's Response:
I like to end things on a high hope point typically. The future looks bright but not everything is resolved. It is possible that I'll pick this story up in the future but not for the time being. Right now it's part of my short stories collection. I like to focus on one giantess story and one super fem story at a time occationally deviating to a side story. We'll see what happens once I finish my two main focuses but that won't be for a while. Though my current main focuses were short stories at one time.
I know the length chases away some readers but when it comes to the length I write as long as it takes for me to reach a comfortable leaving off point. I find that setting some artificial stopping point degrades the quality of the story as I struggle to fit things in or leave out details. Plus when i wrote this I was feeling really inspired. After seeing a manga with some wonderful sexual mouth play I just had to come up with a way for a gentle lady and guy to have some naughty fun.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2014 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
So far I do like the concept of becoming more powerful through absorption. There were way too many comics and shows where the main antagonist gained power by absorbing the heroes love interest like that one old show (Which sickened me to the point of ripping out my hair). Kind of hope you can actually sell the story to a studio or something because it feels like it should spread further then just this site.
I do find it hard sometimes to confirm who's speaking and find myself re-reading the same line a couple of times just to verify the speaker. There were also a few spots such as he/she were mixed up on small occassions. Others have stated the lack of a solid conflict so I won't add to it.
A plot error I am a little confused about is the concept about a Bane and magic. Witches defeat another and grow in size and power to become something far greater and a Bane is more like a person who is born to destroy witches and magic. I understand that John is not trained but how can a shrinking spell work fully when other magic seems to be in effective?
By chapter five however there were too many things set up to end it here. Not certain if you plan to continue as you seem to be juggling between several stories at once.
Author's Response:
When a paragraph includes action and speaking the person performing the action is the speaker, if their name appears just before the spoken word with no action or "" then that person is speaking otherwise if just two people are speaking the speaker alternates between spaces. I find that if I name the speaker before every statement it over saturates things.
As for a Bane. A Bane is not resistant to all magic. Julia says it in the story.
“John you're a witches bane. At least that's our word for you. It means you're a human who's mind is resistant to magic and you can do other things as well. You also have the ability to sense a witch. Remember how you could always track me down in the hospital? I just thought you knew me really well but now I'm sure there was more to it. We call you that because such humans were the death of many witches in the past.”
A Bane is someone who's mind is resistent to magic so they notice when a person suddenly changes due to defeating or being defeated by another witch. A witch can't read their intentions or even feel their emotions so they're rather stealthy to a witch while they on the other hand can feel a witch's presence and even track them over long distances. If you recall from the story Bane's rely upon going undetected and stealth attacks to kill a witch. When a Bane kills a witch either the fight is over before the witch knows she's fighting otherwise the Bane dies instead in the vast majority of cases.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2014 2:04 PM Title: Chapter 2
Rina, is a good matchmaker. Or just knows how to push things. I'm glad is finally helped the two love birds.
Author's Response:
I'd say Rina is really good at pushing buttons especially given how stingy she tends to be. What's hers is hers and what's yours is hers even if she doesn't need it.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2014 9:48 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is a great story! One of your other stories "The Inescapable Guardian" is one of my all time favorites. You seemed to imply there that there might be more of that story coming, as you labeled it Book One. I'd certainly like to see more of that, or maybe with some of the other giantesses that were introduced. And I'd definately like to see you continue this story. I love gentle/maternal stories, but everything is going too well, I'm sure there's some conflict upcoming, if it were continued. If you won't continue any of the above stories, then I'd like to see more in the same vein as them.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I'm afraid Lucy in the Inescapable Guardian fell out of interest for me due to her ethical failings. It's not a story I would be interested in continuing. You might like the story I'm currently working on. The giantesses of the story actually have a need for companionship. They enjoy a significant high whenever they're interacting with and nurturing another. This doesn't work amongst their own kind as they don't need one another the way one of the more fragile races do.
You may also like A Nurturing Heat if you haven't read it already. It's just a 12 page little short but the mini giantess in it is the carying type.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2014 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
Glad to you back writing really long stories. Like one of my all time favorite "Kate."
Most of my questions got answered during that chapter. On to the next four.
Date: May 22 2014 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
Looks super interesting, you have my attention.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed it. Though the five chapters that are up are the complete story. At least they are for the foreseeable future. If you're not that far in I hope you enjoy the coming events.