Date: March 15 2016 1:17 AM Title: Prologue
I have mixed feeling about the chapter. It's well written in places, and in terms of spelling and grammar I see no major issues, but there were a few things I didn't like. The first thing that stood out to me was "large branch of the oak tree",
They have oak trees on an alien planet? I get that maybe they look like oak trees, but that seems like a lazy way to describe the trees, unless you literally mean they are oak trees. When Jenna points out that they are oak trees that's fine because that's what they look like to her, but as the narrator, basically, you have more liberty to describe how they look.
Second, I didn't like the way the perceptive suddenly shifts to the little people. You refer to King Aele with actually introducing him as a character first. I found out that you suddenly switch like that considering the reader has just been getting introduced//used to Jenna and Laura.
When it suddenly says " The Gods were angry." I thought to myself: "What? Jenna and Laura are deeply religious? They don't strike me as the superstitious type.” It was only after I read the following paragraphs that I realized that the chapter was not being told from the perceptive of Jenna and Laura's anymore.
And, by the way, sorry for taking this long to revieww. I hope the review is not dissapointing. I mean it's science fantasy as it's not trying to get the reader to believe (where as science fictioon does try to get the reader to believe). Maybe I'll read a bit more later as I feel the story has potential, but the execution seems a little off at the moment (or at least in the prologue)
Author's Response:
Which chapter did you read? The latest one or the prologue?
If it's the prologue I absolutely agree.
In the prologue and the chapters immediately after, the writing is still crude, I'm still trying to find my way into the story. I added dashes in later chapter to let the reader know when the perspective shifts. It gets a lot better from there, trust me. When I re-read the old chapters now I'm feeling kind of embarassed.
Please read on.
And many thanks for this review. Keep it comming.
Date: March 06 2016 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 12
Reading this chapter has been awesome! ..just like the whle story.
I have to say that I was afraid that you abandoned this story due to the long time that passed from the last update.. But in these days, I was re-reading it and you can imagine my surprise when I realized that there was a new chapter!
I was so happy that I decided to find my old password to log here in order to tell you that your story is by far the best Fantasy GTS Story I ever read.. and one of the best stories I ever read in general.
Your titanic ladies are beautiful and impressive, scary, mischievous and mostly merciless.. just like goddesses.
The world you created for this story is incrediby well done. I can't help but notice some similarities with "Games of Thrones" in it.. for example, I learned to not grow too fond to any tiny character, since it seems that they die quite easily XD Anyway, at the moment I really like Dari.
I'm very happy that you continued this masterpiece and I hope you will not make me wait another couple of years for the next chapter.. ^^;
My best compliments!
Date: March 05 2016 11:05 AM Title: Chapter 11
It is surprising how hard it is to like the main characters even with a relativel interesting cast of minor and side characters. Laura and Janna bounce back and forth between levels of sadism without much warning or cause. Janna strts off as trying to be a good person does an unexplained 180 and becomes far more evil than the Laura, who simultaneously has become unexplicably smart and a forward thinker, establishing her own city. The main characters and ther descent into outright malice is quick and sudden with Laura and without a whole lot of reasoning behind it despite how the story enjoys to point out every so often that they are supposed to be students and scientists.
The world around them is interesting with a surprising amount of backstory and thought put into it for a size fic, but the min characters remain very unlikeable while many side characters who ever share the spotlight end up dead, especially if they act nice or reasonable. The setting is presented as cruel but the main characters, who are not from the main setting, quickly show themselves as far, far worse. They eventually find others like them and have a respect for Steve in particular though that is short lived and outight destroyed when the story falls victim (again) to a very common type of character. You know the ones that are too stupid to live. The distressed Valerie comes to mind, among a number of other annoying 'asshole characters who hate the main characters for no particular reason except that they are giant and continue to do so when it is very obvious these mino characters are doing the life-span lengthening equivalent of playing chicken with a freight train' we see so often.
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you very much. This is the most useful review I recieved, ever.
What I wanted to convey is the fact that power corrupts. People who have power of others have almost always been cruel, the evidence ranges from social experiments over the men and women who guarded Germany's concentration camps right up to mother Theresa who let people die in horrifying agony for her personal gain. In my reading of history, good people are a dwindling minority and so it should not come as a surprise that two failed college brats turned out on the evil side even though they remain in constant conflict with the moral education they recieved from their parents, teachers and society at large.
This conflict is supposed to be a main element of this story.
I'm glad that you apreciate the side characters and (not to spoil too much) I am looking forward on building on them more heavily in the future. I had to come up with a few that I liked first, though, and the reason for the first few dying like flies (next to my binge reading of game of thrones) is the fact that I simply didn't like them very much.
[Report This]Date: March 03 2016 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 12
Why am I not surprised Laura killed her? All these two think about is eating, fucking and killing. That's one down, I wonder how long until the other two end up on the chopping block? Great chapter though!
Date: March 02 2016 4:02 AM Title: Prologue
Well I read your prologue and I must say its pretty cool. I am looking forward to reading this.
Later,
Diesel
Date: December 01 2015 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 11
Any updates on this cliffhanger? Hope all is well.
[Report This]Date: August 09 2015 9:16 PM Title: Chapter 11
I don't wanna say this is my favorite chapter because you've so many outstanding ones but this is definitely up there. I love how Laura managed to scare Valerie, Christina and Steve straight without killing one of them. Now they are basically their personal servants/slaves and since their only way of communicating was destroyed, they can do absolutely nothing about it. I can't wait to see Laura or even Jenna have some alone time with Valerie, hope they make her be their pet or sex toy.
I also enjoyed hearing about, in the other chapter, how the human kingdoms are rallying to try for some kind of gambit against these titanic giantesses. That is shaping up quite nicely.
The only thing that seems a little off is that Jenna and Laura kept the dead giants around to study even though the male was starting to decompose and most likely smell awful. Well in retrospect it makes sense to have at least one on hand to study because thats what they were there for originally but the gross smelly male ginger? I'm not necessarily saying they wouldn't've had him there but maybe kept him in some kind of case, I don't know. My main concern would be the spread of disease with all those corpses around and the smell wouldn't be far behind.
Anyways, sorry for going off on some weird tangent because I really like this story and could never hope to write something half as good.
aaron
PS one thing I'd like to see is have Laura or Jenna force a tiny male to fuck a female while in the palm of their hand or maybe on the table so that they could get super close and see exactly whats going on and if they are enjoying it.
Also would be sexy as hell if they forced Laura's town to construct a giant dildo that could somehow transport tinies within it.
My only regret is that I wish I could give you more than 10 stars.
Date: August 01 2015 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 10
How do Steve, Cristina, and Valerie know for certain that when they went through the rift/wormhole it didnt screw with their electronics to make it record a shrunken height and weight as a normal height and weight?
Author's Response:
Damn good question :)
Date: August 01 2015 11:55 AM Title: Chapter 10
I see that Laura is once again showing her evil side. Really, I get they need to eat, but was tricking that man into outing his wife just to kill her first necessary? Jeez.
Date: August 01 2015 11:53 AM Title: Chapter 9
So now Jenna takes pleasure in corrupting other people? Makes sense considering how evil she's gotten...
Author's Response:
Well, who doesn't like corrupting people? I think, she has killed so many at this point that she regards the locals as nothing more than vermin. Let's see how that turns out, once the tiny classmates want to go exploring aswell.
[Report This]Date: July 29 2015 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 9
Glad to see this story didn't vanish. I was beginning to wonder what all had happened. I wonder what will become of the other classmates when they realize there is no rescue coming. Or will there be a rescue?
Date: July 29 2015 9:54 PM Title: Prologue
Dude! When you deliver, you DELIVER! 30k in the line-up, can't wait to read this and the rest! :D
BTW, since you had laptop troubles, you should really consider writing/backing up your work on a place like Google Drive for example. For writing such as the ones we do, its docs is good enough. :)
[Report This]Date: May 25 2015 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 8
The fact that there are others from Janna and Laura's world is great but the fact they are the same tiny size as the other people of this world is fantastic. Really looking forward to seeing how things transpire with them in the daylight. I honestly couldn't be happier with this new development.
But that's not all. Nagash kills some of her own kind and was saved by Dari. It was unfortunate that Dexter was squashed by the giant ogress but his death has seemed to have brought Nagash and Dari closer together than was previously possible.
I'm really looking forward to see how the goddesses react to the other giantesses trying to kill everyone or the fact that their dead bodies are still in or near the town.
I only hope Birsel is still alive because I couldn't find what happened to her.
aaron
PS I absolutely love the length of your chapters.
Date: May 21 2015 8:19 PM Title: Prologue
Hah, sorry man, I just thought pastebin would be faster. Didn't know it wasn't copying italics and stuff over.
If you create a DA, lemme know so I can follow you!
Author's Response:
I actually created one about a year ago. Same name.
Should I upload there aswell? Let me try and put a picture of Laura and Janna up, see if you can find it.
Date: May 21 2015 10:08 AM Title: Prologue
Np man. Just kerp writing! :)
If you want the best solution, it would be DeviantArt. If you copy it over from there, it'll save everything, italics too but also any identations. That's how I do it on my stories.
Author's Response:
Well, you should have said that in the first place :P
[Report This]Date: May 20 2015 9:07 AM Title: Prologue
I predict their Steve will survive, but as for the other two females... lesbian party :D
Date: May 19 2015 11:36 AM Title: Prologue
Hey man, haven't read the chapter yet, but I think you could solve the issue by first copy/paste-ing the text on pastebin, then from pastebin to gtsw. Here's the link:
http://pastebin.com/
Author's Response:
Thanks! That actually fixed it, only it removed the all the italic that I had put in. Leaving it like that for now until I find an even better solution. Thanks again, I owe you.
[Report This]Date: May 19 2015 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 8
There are no words to describe how epic this story actually is. Easily in the top 3 of best stories ever in this site. We had to wait for some time to read a new chapter but it was definitely worth it. Fantastic job and plot, keep up!
Date: May 19 2015 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 8
I have a suspicion that it isnt going to take long for Jenna and Laura to expose their true nature in front of their former colleages! They have both descended into evil, partly for survival of course.
But these girls go far beyond just killing to survive by doing unnecessarily evil things like crushing tiny people, using them as sex toys, eating them in painful ways, killing children, etc. I think those tiny friends of theirs dont have long to live in my opinion...
[Report This]Date: December 19 2014 2:12 AM Title: Chapter 7
Holy fuck. They are officially giant horny lesbians now.
Fantastic job in writing the actual story too. The Albino giant seems fierce. Also the old druid is still in the giantesses clutches where Dari has to somehow get him. Really looking forward to more about Dari(hoping against hope she doesn't get crushed though because she adds another element to this story. I realize Daisy was one dimensional but I was still sad to see her go because now poor Nagash won't have a close companion)
This is such an epic smut-feast and I'm loving every minute of it. Hope to see more after Christmas or New Years.
aaron
PS I can't wait till they start their journey south and possibly conquer more tiny kingdoms. But I can't get the idea outta my head of Laura and Janna sitting on giant thrones with tiny human and tiny giants servicing their bodies.