[Report This]Date: March 14 2023 6:37 AM Title: Chapter 1
Pretty good story. Like the interaction between the two women. Also, fun that the shrunken girl is now aware of how mean she had been to tinys and now she is one. And the concept of being found by one of her 'friends' and coerced into getting into her shoe - nice concept.
Date: February 17 2019 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is one of the best Shrunken Woman stories. A real pleasure to read
Date: July 07 2014 6:02 AM Title: Chapter 1
Dayum. That ending was too perfect. This was a well written story with a fantastic set of characters. Great job!
Author's Response:
Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it.
[Report This]Date: May 06 2014 2:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
Fantastic story, I was scared the whole way through that i would enjoy the bulk of it then be bored to tears by yet another lame "gentle" ending that seems to be so popular around Shrunken Woman stories...
You've got some great depth of description in there while keeping a good pace to the read, and it was a good idea to add some 'flashback scenes' as she remembered the treatement of other tinies she'd recalled.
Only thing i would suggest is that when you proofread, make sure that instead of scannig over it and kind of 'reading what you know is there', take your time and make sure you read every word you've written. There wern't many errors, but there were one or two grammatical/mis-worded errors in there.
Over-all though, nicely done, Thanks ^_^
Emma.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words and helpful feedback.
I have a tendency to start these projects mid evening and then by the time it is finished I should have long been in bed which results in me just pushing 'submit' after a brief reread. I shall make sure that I make time to properly check in the future.
NM
[Report This]Date: April 29 2014 12:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love, love, love this start! Really looking forward to what happens next. The last paragraph with Kristy breaking Madison under her toes was so good!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I think this story has reached its conclusion however I hope to submit a few new ideas in the coming months that will further explore size reduction.
NM
Date: April 28 2014 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow very nice! Good twist, I was thinking she was going to help her at first.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your feedback. I hoped I could maintain that idea at least for a little while, if you've read any of my other stories you'll soon see that it doesn't often end well for the small ones.
NM
[Report This]Date: April 26 2014 10:05 PM Title: Chapter 1
Kind of saw that coming lol.
But still good stuff.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for your feedback.
And yes, I wouldn't have had it any other way.
NM
Date: April 26 2014 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nicely done. Gets you feeling like you are in the story.
Author's Response:
THank you for your feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I have also written 'Final Exam' and 'Social Circles' which you may like as they are written directly from the reader's point of view.
NM