[Report This]Date: May 26 2014 6:29 PM Title: Chapter 17
Major plot twist... Can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: May 26 2014 10:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
Powerful chapter.
[Report This]Date: May 26 2014 10:50 AM Title: Chapter 17
Damn man, so this is what their mercy got them. Now there's only Tasha and she is not enough to stop them from taking Jaden. I hope they'll be okay but it seems like they're really out.
Come on Alex and Ava, you can do it!
[Report This]Date: May 26 2014 10:01 AM Title: Chapter 17
Pretty harsh chapter. I'd never peg Ava and Alex to be mass murderers!! I know giantesses eat and crush people in nearly every story but I thought those two were supposed to be better than that! I don't know; this feels a little out-of-character, even though it's a little justified.
Author's Response:
Still there's somethings you don't know. There's a reason behind the direction I chose...things will come to the light.
Date: May 26 2014 8:15 AM Title: Chapter 17
You know, if they had not been taking they're sweet time in mayham, that probably would have turnd out better.
Lord Ryan? Is the President of the country in this story so naive that he is allowing practical insurrection from Ryan? This cou- wait, memorial day, cannot critique U.S.
Like the chapter, I just wish they were longer, so more deatail and more steps in the story could go on without the wait.
Author's Response:
I want to do a long chapter, but I run out of ideas being that this is my first time writing something like this. Maybe if I just do a segment at a time and add them all in they'd be longer....something I'll definitely try next time. Also, you have to remember their not cold blood killers, which is why they gave so many chances for people to escape. Like in real life they have a conscious, yes they killed a few but they didn't want a full on slaughter fest. But the story still has some ways to go, so I'll try to do better in detail and chapter length next chapter...maybe that'll speed things up
[Report This]Date: May 21 2014 10:53 PM Title: Chapter 16
I would pay to see you make a manga out of this!
[Report This]Date: May 21 2014 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 16
Great chapter... Can't wait to see Alex & Ava get their revenge :)
Author's Response:
Will they get revenge? Or will it be spoiled by my rotten personalty? All will come to the light soon.
[Report This]Date: May 21 2014 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
Awesome stuff! I am so hyped for the next chapter. What's a 'mange'? So you mean manga? If thats the case you know what we think, hell yeah! But can you do it? Do you have the time? That's really the question here.
Author's Response:
It would take sometime to do especially since this would be a fourth project to put down in my manga section.
[Report This]Date: May 21 2014 6:39 PM Title: Chapter 16
I liked the chapter. Easy to read, lack of Ryan and a nice set-up for things to come. Although, there's no Commander so no bonus points.
[Report This]Date: May 21 2014 6:27 PM Title: Chapter 16
You could, it seems good enough. Just finish this before you start on the manga.
Tasha is making a run for it with Crystal while Alex and Ava decide to fight back. How exciting! Now if only there were a way to defeat Ryan but that bastard seems to be too big to take down at the moment.
Author's Response:
All may not be what it seems....
Date: May 19 2014 1:48 AM Title: Chapter 15
That was pretty scary; good job. Hopefully it won't be long before the torment ends though.
Date: May 19 2014 1:43 AM Title: Chapter 14
That was a nice chapter. I did enjoy it but I found some mistakes, only minor ones though:
Here:
The morning pass by quickly as
You mean either:
The morning passes by quickly as
But it could also be:
The mornings pass by quickly as
Here:
Some was laughing, some playing,
You mean:
Some were laughing, some playing,
Here:
“Sounds like you two are having fun?”
This is not a question and so does not require a question mark.
Here:
be harm by regular means
You mean: harmed
[Report This]Date: May 17 2014 3:34 AM Title: Chapter 15
Good chapter. Needed less living Ryan. Needs more Commander Richard scharacter development and more dead Ryan. But then again, every chapter needs more Ryan killing in it. If you posted tge same chapter where Ryan dies three times in a row, I'd probably still give all three chapters five stars.
Date: May 16 2014 7:53 PM Title: Chapter 15
Lots of action in this chapter... Can't wait to see what happens next.
[Report This]Date: May 16 2014 5:03 PM Title: Chapter 15
Knew Tasha was up against but shit's going down now, Jaden shot, Alex and Ava so helpless now that Ryan has come for their little guy friend. I don't know how they will get out of this one.
Just can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Yep shit has just now hit the fan.
Date: May 16 2014 9:22 AM Title: Chapter 1
I agree with the Commander Richarda thing, the fact that hes able to flatout say 'no' to uphold his duty despite the obvious power difference is deserving of much respect. Getting mushed by a beneath someones foot is a sad death for a such as him. Its weird how much can be conveyed by a character just by plainly uttering the word 'no', like that.
[Report This]Date: May 15 2014 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 14
Awese chapter, and great cliffhanger!
[Report This]Date: May 15 2014 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 14
Commander Richards, facing down an angry giantess with nothing but a rifle, a uniform, and the ground he stands. He's officially now my favorite character. Cause honestly, a guy like that deserves major respect. I'm going to be very sad if/when he dies.
This is easily the best chapter in a while because Ryan isn't present. Sure hope Jaden and Commander Richards team up to kick mega-fucker ass! Ryan must die a most gruesome death.
Date: May 15 2014 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 1
Indestructible is one thing, but just how is he supposed to fight with that? He doesn't have super strength or anything.
[Report This]Date: May 15 2014 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
No turning back now for Tasha. I still think she is making a huge mistake in challenging Ryan who controls the entire facility which effectively means she is fighting more than him. Should have waited a while, maybe team up with Jaden and the two girls before taking him on.
As for Jaden being an asset, maybe he could be the future of humanity? A race of humans that could survive a giant attack would be useful.