Date: March 20 2024 9:02 AM Title: Chapter 5
Nice, it will be great to see a world where mature women has grown twice size bigger and taller!
Date: March 16 2014 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 1
These other stories are interesting and all but I'm still hoping for an update on Levi and Amy.
Author's Response:
we'll get back to their story after I resume Vitamin X,I wanted to set the scene and try to cover different aspects of this new crazy world where men basically have to adjust to their new spot on the pecking order.
Date: March 11 2014 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
Some sizes for the women in comparison to men would be nice. Other than that, this story is great!
[Report This]Date: March 09 2014 10:11 AM Title: Chapter 1
Usually I don't see the unbirth idea used that often. And it's often used as a result of shrinking instead. So far it's pretty straightforward to understand. A few grammar and spelling errors are easy to go back and correct. Other then that it's enough to see what happens next. My only real drawback is the scaling value for objects. The fact that cloathing and cities are scaled for their new culture kind of makes it feel more like the men are just shrunken to a greater level then originally intended. Not stating anything wrong with that.
This next part is more my own personal thing so just keeping the unbiast bits seperate.
Again points for going for unbirthing angle and the giant angle at the same time. Although I do find reference to exsisting products a little immersion breaking. Will be reading to see if there's anything else.
[Report This]Date: March 08 2014 11:45 PM Title: Chapter 2
Well this chapter did clear up the questions from chapter 1. Great start can't wait to see where this story is going.
It's funny with even the sewer smell, they both smelled each others scent.
[Report This]Date: March 07 2014 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
How big are the women?
[Report This]Date: March 07 2014 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 1
Good backstory.
Now we need to get on with the real story.
I suggest you focus on a few couples or family situations.
You could also tell the story of jealousy and conflict between the wives and the punishers. Maybe add a couple of other forms of punishment?
Please add details of what the little guys are seeing, smelling, and feeling.
Date: March 07 2014 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
Was this a one chapter short, or will there be more? If there's more, I'll be intrigued to see where you go with this.