Date: March 24 2014 12:59 PM Title: Under Control
Good setup. I can hardly wait until he gets smaller. Will they run into any other women or adults?
Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thanks. There'll eventually be a couple other signficant characters, but honestly it'll be a while until they're introduced.
Date: March 23 2014 11:17 AM Title: Under Control
this is really arousing
Author's Response:
GOOD.
[Report This]Date: March 19 2014 10:09 PM Title: Under Control
Wow power shift, and nice chapter also.
Author's Response:
Thanks, hope you like the power shift next chapter too.
[Report This]Date: March 16 2014 1:18 PM Title: Intro
Loving your stuff as always, mikey. Thanks for sharing your great work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: March 16 2014 8:14 AM Title: Intro
Another great chapter.
Though, I was expecting him to be extremely furious for being left at the parking lot like that, but it got a bit downplayed as he let himself get bossed around for some reason.
Author's Response:
Yeah, my thinking was that he was really thirsty -- like, dangerously thirsty -- and all he could think about was how to get a glass of water at the time. But I can see how it might not have played out as well as I thought it would in my head, or seemed as realistic. But I still have bad memories of living in Florida and being drenched in sweat during long walks home, so maybe it feels worse to me, lol.
[Report This]Date: March 13 2014 4:35 PM Title: Intro
Liking this a lot so far. It's been awhile since I read a 'Slow Shrinking' tale so it's a nice change. Glad to see that you are taking the time to read through it again and touch it up. Much appreciated and your efforts are shining as I have seen almost no errors after your editing.
I've liked the father/daughter scenario in the past and you seem to be playing it well. Kyra is getting more and more dominant as she realizes that her father is slowly becoming more helpless and dependant on her. Before long I can only imagine that he will be totally under her thumb. When that happens though, will she realize her responsibility when the bills start piling up and no money is coming in? She is spending wildly apparently at the moment in Chapter 3, but soon Dad will not be able to work. What happens then? Will her 'Power Bubble' burst? Little things like crisis make the story more believable, but looking forward to see what happens.
On the technical stuff, like i said your writing is spot on. Your characters speak and act like real people. Dad is dumbfounded and lost with what is happening to him and Kyra is taking full advantage. No errors worth mentioning in grammar or punctuation, if any that I recall.
Looking forward to reading more as Kyra takes control. Good stuff! Keep it coming...
Author's Response:
I'm surprised this many people seem to be enjoying the father/daughter scenario, honestly. Because it's so effing hard to find stories in that vein. There seem to be considerably more brother/sister stories out there, and WAY more husband/wife stories, etc. But father/daughter has always been my favorite. Actually, if you know of any others similar to this one, I'd be much obliged.
As for crisis management and whatnot, I honestly didn't focus much on it in the story. Suspension of disbelief might be required in some sections, lol. But I kinda sorta address the financial situation, though not until later on.
Thanks, and hope you keep enjoying it.
Date: March 13 2014 10:09 AM Title: Intro
Getting really fun.
Author's Response:
yup :)
Date: March 13 2014 9:25 AM Title: At the Mall
This was a very effective chapter. The awkwardness of the changing room is played up excellently, and the dialogue sells it. Personally, I'd say you're a leader around here of taking what might be seen as the mundanities of ordinary life and tweaking just enough of it in unseen ways to get it to drip with subtle sexiness. The patience you exhibit in letting your scenes play out in as close to real time as possible is to be admired as well. Once again, very nice work.
Author's Response:
Yeah, you're right, I suppose I do focus a lot on otherwise mundane situations. Especially stuff like family life, with its predefined relationships and accepted norms of behavior. It's because these norms are so universal and taken for granted (and therefore mundane), that it becomes (for me, anyway) terribly exciting to see them upturned.
As for your last comment: haha, yeah, the scenes may feel like they're in 'real time' after the fact, but when I'm actually sitting down and writing them it feels sometimes more like they're in super-ultra-ridiculously slow motion. I just have to accept sometimes that I'll be writing a single scene for days at a time, lol.
[Report This]Date: March 12 2014 9:53 PM Title: Intro
Cool story. I got to say, you really have a way of writting unlikable characters! Kyra gets on my nerves and crawls under my skin just as much as she does with her father. Its weird to think that the ONLY thing keeping Kyra in check all these years was that her father was taller and stronger than her, its hard not to feel sorry for him.
I mean, at age 16 I was both stronger and taller then both my parents and while I wasnt perfect certainly respected and obeyed them...But I also know that this kind of person exists from watching shows like Dr.Phil so its not unrealistic by any means.
Author's Response:
Yeah, though I'm also kind of imagining that the height change itself could be triggering this behavior from Kyra. i.e. knowing that her father was once so tall and 'mighty' (and maybe she feels his authority is tied to this) but now is shrinking and smaller than her, might trigger something in her mind that wouldn't otherwise be triggered if he were always, say, four inches shorter than her all along. In that case, it would have been 'normal' to her that he was shorter, and she would still tolerate him as her father like a normal daughter would. But in the case of him shrinking, it feels like a big change to her and she sees it opening up a new opportunity for her and she leverages her teenage rebelliousness accordingly.
I don't even know if that's realistic or not (not many cases of shrinking fathers in real life to compare with, lol), but to me it makes for one hell of a premise for a fetish story :).
Oh, but yeah I agree, she would still have to be the 'right' kind of person -- like you said, the type you'd see on Dr. Phil -- not just anybody.
Date: March 11 2014 2:02 PM Title: Intro
Really looking forward to the tipping point when Kyra becomes the taller one.
Author's Response:
Well, she was already taller last chapter, technically, but I agree she hadn't really quite 'taken control' yet.
Date: March 10 2014 8:46 AM Title: Intro
I like how you're using the basketball sessions to really show how she's getting more and more difficult to beat because of his drop in size.
I guess he soon wont stand a chance against her anymore at all after a few more inches.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Yeah, I was surprised how much I enjoyed writing the basketball scenes. It really showcases the physical progression of things. Glad you liked it.
Date: March 09 2014 10:22 PM Title: A Little 1-on-1
So brute strength isn't the only way this girl gets what she wants. I can already tell that "Daddys" gonna be in trouble with this one! Its hard to get a read on Kyra, is she doing all this out of spite of her father? The man seems like a reasonable parent to me.
Author's Response:
Honestly, I didn't put too much thought into it when I wrote it. I suppose the best answer to why she's treating him this way is mostly just because she can.
Date: March 07 2014 8:56 AM Title: Intro
Well you have my attention
Author's Response:
Glad to hear it, thanks.
Date: March 07 2014 7:57 AM Title: Intro
Definitely a nice start. You do a solid job of establishing the relationship of the characters early on to give us an idea of why Kyra is probably going to make an entertaining giantess later on, and even making us sympathetic to her because of the speaker's strictness. I remember you mentioning your interest in this genre and have been curious where you planned to take it, so keep on going!
Author's Response:
Thanks, man. I suppose it could have used a little more backstory, actually. But let's see what you think about it as the story unfolds more. Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: March 07 2014 5:49 AM Title: Intro
I love this story line and I love where this story seems to be going. How small is he going to get? Hopefully around 2-3 inches. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response:
Well, I won't say specifically, but it is definitely a slow shrink story, with extra emphasis on the 'slow'. Just so you know.
[Report This]Date: March 07 2014 12:07 AM Title: Intro
I like this! Kyra is the perfect combination of bratty and smart, I can already see how domineering she could end up being.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I liked that about her too :)