Date: May 31 2014 9:39 AM Title: After Work
Nice wrestling match, WWA or whatever that fake wrestling is can touch what Jimmy went through.
Can't wait for the next chapter as Jimmy keep dwindling in size. Anyways I think in the next chapter, that Jimmy is so worn out from his fight, his body has to work harder which shrinks him like 5 inches and pounds. Just a suggestion, if not keep doing what your doing.
Author's Response:
I think I prefer his shrinking being constant each day in this story, making it feel like a slow, steady march of inevitability. It's an interesting concept though, and maybe something like that might find its way into a future story of mine sometime. Thanks.
Date: May 31 2014 6:40 AM Title: Intro
A wonderful chapter yet again, but towards the end when Kyra is on top of him you call her a 15 year old women. Just sayin. :)
Author's Response:
I went back and fixed this, thanks. I intended her age to be unspecified, somewhere in the 'late teens', so thanks for pointing that out.
Date: May 29 2014 10:32 AM Title: Intro
Really nice chapter, I personnally like the details you put about how he is being downgraded by everyone. The idea of having his former friend slowly turning to Kyra's side is really good, she seems to see him more and more like a child and less as a friend as the story goes on and I think it's nice and hope to see it go further.
One repproach I can do is it isn't really explained why the boss acts like that for Kyra, it seems a bit delusional. I can understand she'll really enjoy dowgrading James but I think you should have a bit explained why does she seems so happy to side with Kyra, even when they are proposing to buy clothes I thought her reaction was a bit too cheerful. She is supposed to be a rather smart person with a bossy temperament. Maybe it's because Kyra offered her to look after him some times ?
Anyways, I enjoyed the story so far, thanks for that , I'll wait eagerly for more :)
Author's Response:
Glad you liked the addition of Amy. I hadn't even thought of adding a character like that until I actually sat down and wrote the scene. That's what I love about writing -- no matter how much you plan out a scene ahead of time, it can always take on a new direction in the middle of writing it, usually with good results.
So yeah, I think that approach worked well with Amy, and also with Ms. Johnson, although in the latter case I realize I didn't give much backstory to why she treats him like that. I noticed that when I was rereading it last week but I just didn't have the motivation to go back and add a better backstory. I just figure that James did something in the past to make her strongly dislike him, whatever that may be. Anyways, hopefully the lack of a strong explanation in the story doesn't detract too much from the enjoyment.
Date: May 24 2014 10:50 PM Title: Back at Work (part 2)
Kyra manipulating everyone, with ease as well. Amy was sort of right about James, even though he shorter he she isn't acting his age.
Hopefully these next chapters get focused back on Kyra for a bit.
Author's Response:
Thanks. And if I recall, probably about half the remaining scenes have just Jimmy and Kyra, and the other half (or more) have other characters too. But Kyra plays a role in almost all the scenes though.
Date: May 24 2014 8:23 AM Title: Intro
You're such an amazing author, I loved Pariah and I love this story as well. If I had to make a list of what I liked about this story I would end up righting a novel.
My only question is how often do you post a new chapter? I can't seem to get the pattern down.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the compliments!
I pretty much post chapters whenever I have some free time. I usually try to make sure it's no longer than a week between postings, but sometimes twice a week if I can.
Date: May 23 2014 11:43 PM Title: Intro
I feel so lucky, I checked 15 minutes ago for an update but saw none...and then checked once more to see that you just updated!
I love this story! Me being into what I am, I would love to see him get small enough to visit/live in certain parts of Kyra's body, but I feel like the story won't be going that way. (Which is OK! And I'm not asking for any spoilers)
Can't wait to see how it ends :)
Author's Response:
Haha, well lucky me -- I was just about to log off and saw your review!
Interesting side note: I remember some of my earliest fantasies as a teenager were of shrinking down and living in or around a woman's body. But for whatever reason, my tastes have changed, and I much prefer minigts size ranges now with only a few exceptions.
^ Just a random comment. Not intended as a real response. Anyway ... glad you're enjoying it :).
Date: May 21 2014 10:43 PM Title: Intro
Messed up the stars last time sorry
Date: May 21 2014 2:59 AM Title: Intro
Hi,
I wonder how far this disease affects him, it seems only physical at first but will it affect his brain too? making him act like a child or even forget every skills he had to only let him the once he learnt in elementary school ?
Good story so far,
Ps: He calls her Kyra at the beginning of the chapter 14 but she didn't react. (While they are in the elevator)
Author's Response:
Ah, thanks, I went back and fixed that line in ch 14 now.
As for the first comment: yeah, when I wrote this story, I was torn between having his mind get measurably weaker along with his body, or not. I'll at least say that it's not so much like Pariah in terms of losing basic cognitive powers and stuff, but he definitely does at least experience some emotional/psychological changes as the story progresses. I'll be curious to see what you think about it when it gets there.
Date: May 20 2014 8:35 AM Title: Intro
Love this story. I wonder if little jimmy might have an aunt Becky now, and if she'll become another kyra.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I can't remember if I actually referred to her as his 'aunt' in the remaining chapters or not, but she definitely could fit that role, couldn't she? :)
Date: May 19 2014 9:46 PM Title: Back at Work
His boss must be on this site as well. With her painful fantasy that came true.
Some of part in this story I wish it was me. But others I'm happily reading.
Kyra really good at sweet talking, seem like she's a puppet master. Pulling everyone's strings especially Jimmy's
Thanks for the length chapter and the quick update, it's much appreciated.
Author's Response:
Yep, Kyra definitely starts seeming more and more like a puppet master, I noticed that too. Thanks for reading
Date: May 19 2014 9:12 PM Title: Intro
The fact that everyone knows its him and still treat him like this kinda breaks my suspension of disbelief...I mean its one thing when they think hes a child but they KNOW its him. I dont know. I guess Ill just toss out normal logic since I DO still like this story...
Author's Response:
His coworker Amy will show more compassion and respect for him starting next chapter, at least. Stay tuned
Date: May 17 2014 10:20 PM Title: Doctor's Office
While I usually favor size differences on a bit more extreme level, I gotta say I've been hooked to your captivating tale of psychological torture and humiliation from the get go. I've been fascinated by the various methods Kyra's been using to break James and am always curious to see just how further she'll take it with every update you post. And wow! This time she really didn't hold back the abuse. Seems she won't stop until he loses his grip on reality and actually believes himself to be "little Jimmy". Looking forward to seeing your next page soon.
Author's Response:
Yes, she's been taking things quite far now, hasn't she? :) Glad you're enjoying it.
Date: May 17 2014 6:57 AM Title: Intro
Hi ,
I wanted to share with you a tool I use in order to compare height easily, http://socialcompare.com/en/tools/compare-sizes. Maybe you already know it but I think it's rather important as it shows you exactly the height you enter (and you can chose male/female pictures) .
For the story, here are some ideas, you don't need to pay it much credit of course,
I really like how James appears to look like a child for everyone now. I'm really eager to see how everyone at work will act too, and especially his boss, I know it may be hard to keep any interaction with them but I'd really like to see her interacting times to times in the story, as she looks to be really bossy :P. I don't think that Kyra would still let him still go to work but I think that he still will have to give reports once in a month to his boss or smething if he works at home, or maybe Kyra will just take his job and sometimes invite his former colleagues over.
For the cure, maybe it would have been nice to be a daily treatement, like if he doesn't take a pill one day, he'll shrink , so that Kyra could just punish him further if he was going naughty.
Finaly, for his future I wonder if she'll manage to get some new ID for him and stuffs then force him to go to secondary school or elementary school were he'll be treated like a child by teachers.
Well that was my ideas, I hope you'll like it, I really like your story, it's a really interesting and original one! As always , I'm eager to know what'll come in the future and stay tuned ! Thanks for the amazing job!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the tip, I might check out the site, but actually what I usually do is create my own simple collages in Photoshop, like a guy compared with a girl, and then I incrementally change the guy's height to give the right size ratio for each size level in the story. Probably the same kind of idea you were thinking, though. And I agree, it helps a lot to visualize their appearances.
And thanks for the other suggestions. I thought about doing what you said in the last suggestion (him being forced to go to elementary school, etc.) but I ended up doing something a little different but pretty similar to that.
Thanks for reading!
Date: May 16 2014 8:21 PM Title: Doctor's Office
Asukafan is actually the one who handles featured stories, though it was well-deserved in my book. Nice work on this new chapter too.
Author's Response:
Well then, thanks to you both!
Date: May 14 2014 9:31 PM Title: Some Ground Rules
Great story, do you want to know why?
I'm constantly checking for a update. And having my mind fill with questions on what's going to happen next.
That's why :)
Author's Response:
Haha, thanks. I'll try to start posting a little quicker than once a week for now, but we'll see how much time I have.
Date: May 12 2014 6:12 PM Title: Intro
Hi, I think this story is really good, I like how the characters evolve throught the story.
It would be nice to see some interaction with other characters, like with that woman at the mall . It's really nice to see how the others also treat him like a child.
For the father's job, I would have loved to see how his boss treats him as he keeps on shrinking but I don't think he'll be able to go to work anymore, unless he manages to convince his daughter. What he could do is tell his boss because of his weird desease he won't be able to leave home soon, thus ask her to work home on his laptop.
Good luck ! And thanks again.
Author's Response:
There's a little bit in this new chapter with the doctor, and next chapter will take place at his work. Yeah, it went a really long time with basically just two characters, but from here on out there's a couple more that play a significant role. Thanks, and stay tuned ...
Date: May 11 2014 10:07 PM Title: Some Ground Rules
Slowly dwindling in size, pride, ego, and soul.
Nice chapter, just describing how James or Jimmy is feeling throughout this shrinking process.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it :).
Date: May 11 2014 6:28 AM Title: Some Ground Rules
Oh, don't get me wrong, role-reversal interplays are still great, and I'm sure you've done some cool stuff with it in the rest of the story. The difference is plain in their relationship in this new chapter, and I'm liking how it's shaking up the dynamics of their interactions even more. Really the only reason I said that on the last chapter was because there's far more mother-son stories than father-daughter on the site. Looking forward to seeing what else you've done.
Author's Response:
Yeah, hopefully the father-daughter nature of their relationship will remain very apparent even as the appearance of "mothering" grows. I think it does, but let me know if you agree.
Btw, not sure if you were the one responsible for getting this story on the front page (featured stories), but if you were, then I appreciate it :). It was a big surprise when I noticed it there the other day.
Date: May 10 2014 10:49 PM Title: Some Ground Rules
Well, I had to continue reading. I don't know why.
Again, the writing is excellent, and might be one of the few things that keeps drawing me back to the story. I do have two problems with the story, and they're problems that I've had for a long while.
One, why does James have so little control over his penis? He's got to be minimum 40-45 years old and I've had better before I turned 11. I don't care how the condition's affecting him down there; his self-control is borderline inept.
Two is the big one. There's a general lack of a certain sympathetic feeling. It's "concern". Literally NO ONE is concerned about James' condition. No doctor (whom he could really sue for malprractoce and negligence), Kyra, Jame's coworkers, or even James himself. It's an element that makes everyone seem more cruel than they really should, qnd I don't like it.
And again, no numerical rating. It's too good for anything except 5 stars, butbi really don't like it. It's like reading the giantessworld equivalent of Neon Genesis Evangelion.
Author's Response:
"One, why does James have so little control over his penis?" --> I suppose it's possible that the shrinking has affected his hormone balance or something. But I prefer to think of it just being because Kyra is so much bigger and more overwhelming (physically and sexually) for him as he shrinks.
"Literally NO ONE is concerned about James' condition." --> Yeah, maybe this makes it less realistic, but I really do enjoy the story this way personally. Especially as he shrinks, having people care about his rights and feelings less and less.
I started watching Neon Genesis once, but didn't get more than a few episodes in. I guess anime isn't really my thing, lol.
Date: April 29 2014 9:57 PM Title: Family Restructuring
His size isn't the only thing that is dwindling away. Pretty sure the ego is leaving soon also.
Nice chapter can wait to see what happens next. Especially since the recent events changed thing dramatically.
Author's Response:
Thanks, glad you like it!