Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2014 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 4

I couldnt agree more @slacker. That would be quite a scene.

Ok, I thought this chapter was going to be about Carly. Well atleast Im pretty sure the next one will be. I just hope Diane has something special for Bob after all this time they have been together.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2014 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 4

By the time these two nymphos are through with them, Mark and Tony will probably be resting in pieces.

Author's Response:

Nymphos?  Where? 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 18 2014 8:40 PM Title: Ch.3 Captured

Haha, it was purse! Man, you had my heart racing for a while. I thought it was something else and then I read all those clues which made me reconsider my thoughts.

Wow, impressive connection. Making the reader unaware of the situation just like Mark and Tony.

Author's Response:

Thanks Tom!  That's what I was trying to do...  ;)

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed [Report This]
Date: February 18 2014 10:30 AM Title: Ch. 2 'Pig Roast'

Please take my advice with a grain of salt as I’m still trying to learn the ‘art’ of writing. What editor do you use? I just use google docs at the moment but am looking for something better. However, it does have spell check. Even though many stories posted on this sight are first drafts, spell check is automatic enough nowadays that I’d recommend it. Would catch misspellings like surprizing, articals, vehicals etc. Another thing I’m trying to work on is reducing adverb usage. Words like 'nervously' are ‘telling’ the reader. Instead you can ‘show’ the reader via context. E.g., The two wild-haired boys, dusted off the their pantlegs and fidgeted, avoiding direct eye contact with the girls. Just an example. Sometimes it is possible to go overboard with ‘showing’ tho, especially if the story needs to move faster, so it’s a judgement call. As for the story, well looks like Jen and Chloe are about to have two more toys. If only it were always so easy to shrink people. :)

Author's Response:

I was just using 'wordpad', -no spellcheck- or anything else.  Although, I just downloaded 'Google Docs', I'll give it a try...

I see what you mean about the adverb useage, we should focus more on the action words, and allow for more detail...

Thanks for the info., and I'll let you know if I find something better.   

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 17 2014 9:43 PM Title: Chapter 1

Haha, You bet I cant wait! Especially when I am witnessing this relationship grow stronger every chapter. It will only be a matter of time until I see Diane confidently put him there. She could also show him how to pleasure a mature woman. I cant wait!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 17 2014 11:10 AM Title: Ch. 2 'Pig Roast'

Moral of the chapter: friends don't let friends drive shrunk.

Ba-DUM-Boom!

Okay; serious now. I'm glad that Carly is finally regaining her right mind. Maybe if she confesses the whole thing to her mother (out of fear that her little hubby fell off the bumper), Diane will take a little pity on her and reunite the two. But, callous as this might make me sound, I think Di should keep her in suspense a little longer. To make sure Carly's change of heart is sincere.

Author's Response:

L.O.L!  Yeah, it would be kinda hard to reach the pedals, or the steering wheel!  '*.*'

Diane has some 'issues' that she needs to work out too, and with Bobby, (being in the state that he's in) he's just the perfect size!

Although, for his sake, she knows, all too well how spoiled her daughters are, and she's not going to be so quick to just hand him back over to them... 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16 2014 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 1

Once again another great chapter. Not many tags in this story, so I didnt find this story immediately.

First of all, the the descriptive sentence of Diane was fantastic. As well as your use of the setting. Waking up early morning, and then saying it was dark outside; At first, I thought I misread something, but you actually had me thinking that at early morning, there were still stars out. I enjoyed that mini puzzle even though it was unintentional.

Also, is the main character, Bob, Bobby, Rob, Robert? or are they the same, becuase I hear a mix.

One thing that felt awkward as I was reading was wondering how Bob was able to see the mail box name while his body is moving rapidly up and down with Diane's hand?

Lastly, I am curious, why the hand? Usually its not the hand which carries a tiny during a jog. Its not that sexy in my opinion, and I feel that a jog/walk would eventually heat up and gradually open that hand to let in air. I dont mean to be rude, but of all the other places, why the hand?

Anyway, I wonder how Chloe and Jennifer handle their tinies which seems like they may pick up from the bar. Now here is a twist. If multiple shrunken men appear in the same scene, what if Bob gets accidently switched and Diane has no idea! Or Carly finds Bob, ties him up, then another tiny finds Bob, Bob then ties that tiny up to save his own skin, and Carly has fun with the tiny she still thinks is Bob.

Lots of possibilities my friend, keep it up.

Author's Response:

Thanks Tom!  Diane occasionally calls Bobby 'Robert', (as that is actually his name)- Bob is short for Robert. )  Bob isn't small enough to fit completely inside a womans fist.  He's six inches tall, so Diane was just securely holding his legs as she carried him along with her on her early morning walk.  She wasn't 'rapidly'  pumping her hand up and down, only slightly- as she was walking.  Diane's very careful with her tiny son-in-law, but even just the slightest motion while riding inside her hand would make someone 'So small', feel like they were floating up and down...

Yes, there's several possibilitys!  This story is could take any direction at this point.    '*-_-*'  no spoilers though....  (heh, heh, heh)

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16 2014 12:49 PM Title: Chapter 1

Wow, wonder how hard it would really be to hang onto a waist band for that long. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks Spooky!  Yeah, I'd like to find out, too!  ;)