[Report This]Date: April 08 2014 12:47 PM Title: Chloe's Bath
Well, it’s good Chloe isn’t a complete sadist. Still, she’s definitely not the best caretaker for poor Mark and Tony. Hopefully they find a way to escape to a less hazardous environment!
Author's Response:
When Chloe was alone with the two of them, she was actually a little bit more 'humane' with her tiny pets. It's when her and Jennifer are together, it gets a lot hotter!
[Report This]Date: April 08 2014 11:25 AM Title: Chloe's Bath
They could've climbed up and over her body, before it slipped beneath the waves. What I like to call the "Jack & Rose Method."
Author's Response:
I don't think she would have concidered it much of a wave, the water was only about 3"inches deep in the shallow end, where her head would have been; {Waist deep for Tony}, but Chloe's 'Titanic' naked body, would be something to climb up and over.... a little slippery though.
[Report This]Date: April 08 2014 9:50 AM Title: Chapter 1
You have a great, well wriiten, very detailed four part story! I've been reading it but I havent had the time to review yet and I just wanted to let you know you're doing a great job and to keep up the excellent work!
Author's Response:
Thanks Man!
[Report This]Date: April 08 2014 9:22 AM Title: Chloe's Bath
*Shakes his head in pity.*
They had a perfect chance to tickle her into unconsciousness in that bathtub (from hitting her head while laughing too hard). And, they blew it!
Author's Response:
H'm... I don't don't know. That might not be such a good idea, even if they could have caused her to pass out, then what? They'd be stuck in this enormous bathtub with her, and no way to get out! 'Yooooooowl!"
[Report This]Date: April 04 2014 8:49 PM Title: Chapter 17
Once again, beautiful writing!
"her stomach formed a wide beach of living softness".
Usually I cant picture your writing, but this was one of the many great examples that I was easily able to imagine.
Author's Response:
Thanks a Lot, Tom! That's really what I strive to do in my writing. I'm focusing more on the discriptions than the story itself. I'd like to think that you can visualize everything thats happening as you read it, and that's really what I'm trying to get better at...
Thanks again, your comments do alot to give me the drive to keep going and I always look forward to your reviews! :)
[Report This]Date: April 04 2014 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 17
Sounds like someone is becoming an unhappier camper than Bob, himself. Ah! The "little" ironies of life.*
*Come to think of it: that'd make a great title for a gts-story! ;-)
Author's Response:
Yes! I think 'someone', already did that one Cary. --- Roundrobin too...
[Report This]Date: April 04 2014 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 17
Good luck Mark! It isn’t going to be easy to escape, but you certainly don’t want to end up like Tony.
Author's Response:
Thanks Spooky! Mark's gonna need it! Tony, on the other hand, well.... -his luck has ran out!
[Report This]Date: April 01 2014 9:53 AM Title: Chapter 16
Midnightwriter85, You're great, always fun to read! I will expect you to continue!
Author's Response:
Thanks! It is getting easier for me write. Always helps to get some feedback like yours!
[Report This]Date: March 31 2014 7:26 AM Title: Chapter 16
Poor Mark. Little does he know he’s next in line for a bath.
Author's Response:
Maybe!.... maybe not. His job might be, 'a little bit dryer' than that.. ;)
[Report This]Date: March 31 2014 7:01 AM Title: Chapter 16
Good detective work by Di! One possible nitpick, though. If Mallory the Waitress' pleated mini-skirt was sewn on to her uniform, how could it have pockets (let alone, be detachable)? Could you, perhaps, have meant one of those pint-sized aprons that double as change purses for cocktail waitresses?
Author's Response:
Hm, I never really considered that... I kinda pictured her uniform like a school uniform, ya know? Button up white shirt, short black pleated skirt... I thought that they had a single front pocket slit across the top of a false pleat; off-set on the right hand side, maybe not... but apparently Mallory's had a pocket! Ha!
[Report This]Date: March 30 2014 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 16
I thought it was great, the jumping back to these relaxing events. We understand what Diane was doing and we get to enjoy this action as we read about what happens to Mark and Tony.
I would love to see Diane sneak in and kidnap Bob back. Perhaps the wiatress will bring Bobby back to the resturant and Diane is waiting and she knocks the waitress out and finds Bobby.
Ah. i know. Diane will rent Bobby and then keep him. Or some random hot woman rents Bobby, but then Diane pays the hot woman a lot of money to give Bob to Diane and to not speak of this.
Diane finds the shrinking formula and shrinks Bobby's captors. Then she retrieves Bobby.
Diane drives to Chloe's house and finds Jen and Chloe with tinies. Diane demands to know how they shrunk, and Chloe gives Diane the shrinking stuff. Diane uses it to rescue Bobby.
MaybeDiane goes back into the resturant and notices the waitress with something fragile, so Diane drops her plate and as the wiatress cleans it up, Diane looks down at the waitreess, see Bobby, amd takes him.
Perhaps, something random can happen, like Jennifer is driving home and crashes into the waitress. Jennifer sees a tiny human and thinks it is Mark/Tony. She distracts the waitress and steals the human but realizes that it is Bobby. Jennifer goes to Diane and Carly's house and Diane is first at the door. Diane sees the news and takes Bobby promising to give it to Carly. But she lies, amd Diane keeps Bob for herself.
Anyway, nice work!
Author's Response:
Thanks Tom! Wow, ya got a lotta great suggestions there! Ha! You did hit on one of my ideas, (having Diane 'Rent' Bobby so that she could get him out of there) but, I haven't definitely decided yet on that...
[Report This]Date: March 30 2014 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm glad to see Carly is a broken woman for losing her hubby, it really shows that she DOES care for him. And hopefully it means that if she gets him back she'll treat him a lot better!
It was her mistreatment of him that caused him to run away and land this mess in the first place; and if we go further back it was Carly that originally shrunk him...So it kinda is all her fault.
Then again Bobby is a macrophile but I doubt he likes being treated badly;a nice, gentle, gts wife would be right up his alley! I just want things to work out for the little bro...4 stories of following the guy around and he just can't catch a break.
Great chapter thought, I'm glad Diane piecing things together already so the story is not at a stand-still. And the stuff with Mark/Tony is interesting although secondary in my opinion to the story of Bobby and his adventures.
Author's Response:
Well, I have to say that Bobby had a pretty good 'Break' while his mother-in-law had him, if she wouldn't have messed-up, and taken him with her to the restaurant, he pretty much had it made! But, yeah... It really IS Carly's fault, that he became the first human subject. She insisted that Jennifer use the serum on him, thinking more about her own fantasy's...and what she could do with her tiny sized husband.
-and, yes you're right, the story is centered around Bobby. Hopefully, I can add more victims in the coming chapters. Also, I also want to bring back Sandra Too!
[Report This]Date: March 28 2014 2:40 PM Title: Chapter 15
Is it me or is it getting hot in here?!! Because that was by far one of the best chapters you have ever wrote in my opinion and is probably "Bob's Ultimate Experience".
I appreciated how you responded to my review with a new chapter. Fantastic! Hopefully this is just the beginning of these sexy scenes! :)
[Report This]Date: March 28 2014 11:34 AM Title: Chapter 15
So, basically, she took Bob for a test drive? Well, her screams of ecstasy certainly put the "echo" in "home economics." LOL!
[Report This]Date: March 27 2014 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 15
Wow, that's probably one of the longer insertion scenes I've read. Not bad. Now as for Jill's thought at the end...she's not going to make a lot of money if she doesn't get him out of there! A man can only hold his breath for so long. :)
[Report This]Date: March 27 2014 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 15
Best chapter yet!
More like this, please...
[Report This]Date: March 26 2014 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 14
You are such a tease! Mallory tells Jill that "I think he wants to get into your panties" and I thought things were about to get real again!
Then Mallory talks about Bob massaging feet? I mean really? That was so random that I thought you wrote that just to bug me or something. haha.
[Report This]Date: March 26 2014 10:19 AM Title: Chapter 14
A lot of detail in Jill’s interaction with Bobby. Very nice.
Author's Response:
Thanks Spooky! Means a lot coming from you!
[Report This]Date: March 26 2014 8:04 AM Title: Chapter 14
So, let me get this straight. He's going to become their foot-slave (among other things) while Mallory tries to sell him, on-line?
I hear a bidding war being declared...with Diane and Rosanne as the first two combatants.
Author's Response:
I don't think that the lady's would put Bobby, (Himself),.. up 'For Sale'. No. Mallory, will just rent him out,... for say, $500.00 / Hr. ?
Date: March 25 2014 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 14
Bob keeps descending further and further into shrinking man hell. It seems every bad thing possible is going to happen to him. And now he's stuck with total strangers, so his chances of getting back to his wife are very low, unless he gets help. Not likely considering how every woman he's encountered has treated him. I hope things start turning around for him soon. Keep going!
Author's Response:
Ha! Yeah, He's getting passed around like a hot potato, but- he did have a pretty nice time with Diane? At least, he didn't end up going on the road with Roseanne! I don't know if he'll ever get back to his wife, although he doe's still stand a slim, but small chance of reuniting with her...