Date: May 20 2014 5:25 PM Title: Burning Desire
Can't wait for the next part!!!
Date: May 13 2014 7:58 PM Title: The Dream
In addition, if you are interested in creating another story alongside this one, I suggest starting a story with a random guy who somehow gets shrunk and is seeking help. He wanders into a house with a girl and a mom. Then you could add all these sexy MILF and teen girl scenes without having any incest.
Or, if you are just focusing on this story, then you can make Abby and her mother as the main giantesses. I can think of Abby's mom as a hot mom, but Adam's hot mom just feels awkward.
Anyway, its just a suggestion. I cant wait for what might be my favorite character and that is Abby's mom!
[Report This]Date: May 13 2014 7:48 PM Title: Burning Desire
You need to write more MILF stories! I know some people dont like MILF stories but you are good at it. The only problem is that it his own mother.
In this chapter, it felt weird reading about Adam's acceptance of being his mom's tiny man. I can understand his own mom's desire, but not Adam's desire.
I know its your story, but thats a lot of chapters with just Sandy and Adam alone. Im glad you are changing things up a bit. If you still want Sandy to have fun, then I suggest Sandy can place Adam on the seat of Abby's chair, or even better, Abby's mom!
By the way, it will be helpful to rename your chapters. :)
I cant wait for the multiple MILF party! The next chapter has so many outcomes!
Author's Response:
Haha I'm glad you like it. I will be including plenty of MILFs don't you worry! Thanks for the review.
[Report This]Date: May 13 2014 10:30 AM Title: Burning Desire
This seems great so far... Just not so into the whole MILF thing tho.
Author's Response: That's fair enough, I'm not the biggest lover of incest but just think of it as a hot mum I think that works well. Anyhow, I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Date: May 11 2014 8:55 PM Title: Reunion
Okay, you've somewhat redeemed his mothers previous actions. The details of her past could've- should have, been poured out in the very first chapters.- then, it wouldn't have seemed so strange...
The fact that he's totally safe within his mothers hands, isn't very exciting though. Like the other reviewers, I'm antisipating his escape.
I really like the way that you set up each scene. Ex: the staircase, with her towering over him. Nicely described!
I'm still with ya!
Author's Response: I agree with you I could've explained back ground details a little better. Well don't commit so soon because things are about to heat up, and not just with his mother. I'm glad! Thanks for the review.
[Report This]Date: May 11 2014 6:21 PM Title: Reunion
Fantastic Story!
I just read leverage and this story, and this story is by far better in my opinion.
Im glad you made that comment on your chapter end notes that there will be more than Sandy and Abby. Unlike most writers, Im a fan of MILF, and I prefer the MILF to be non-blood related to the protagonist.
So in this case, While everyone is hoping for Abby, Im want to see Abby's mom.
Also, as a side note: It would be helpful to rename your chapters. It will be eaiser to remember what part of the story happens in which chapter.
Your setting of the scene was interesting. A guy living with his hot, young mother, and notices a hot girl move in next door. Then when Sandy uses the syringes to shrink Adam was a good scene. Personally, i just wished it wasnt his mother but another MILF.
In addition, if Sandy was a rude mom, or if Adam was an annoying kid, then Sandy never had to feel sorry for sexually dominating him. Just thought I would point that put.
With the lack of reviews,I believe its the lack of Abby, which most reviewers here are wiating for. Perhaps you could involve a tease for the audience where Abby rings the doorbell, and gives Sandy a gift while Adam is watching from Sandy's bra. or something similar.
I like the change of body parts. Feet, boobs, ass, I like it. But not as much as your creativity. Your creativity was great. I love the themes of bondage, and when a tiny is trapped awaiting thier giantess. The scenes of Adam stuck on the bed, stuck on the chair, were a thriller to me. Another good scene was when Adam held onto Sandy's panties; good unaware moment.
As for suggestions, my direction of the story would be Sandy greeting the new neighbors while hiding Adam with her. Then Sandy meets Abby's mom and decides to trap Adam with Abby's mom. Sandy could ask to go to the restroom, but she actually sneaks into Abby's mom's room, and ties Adam to her bed, her panties, her bra, her heels, or all of the above,you name it! As for your other reviewers, you could later have Adam escape Abby's mom and Adam gets trapped by Abby. But the main part of my suggestion is to get to Abby's mom.
Forgive me for the long review, I just had a lot to talk about since I read all 5 chapters at once.
I cant wait to read the next one!
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it! I didn't want to rush straight into Abby which I know a lot of readers are waiting for rather build it up instead. I have read novels where I have been yearning for a particular character and they haven't appeared so I can understand the frustration. However, with regard to your thorough review, I have thought of utilising many of the ideas you have suggested so don't worry. In spite of that, as a note to everyone reading this story, be patient; exciting times are just around the corner.
Date: May 05 2014 2:42 PM Title: The Dream
I think the mother going on a power trip is less farfetched than her son being shrunken. I mean, IRL there are abusive parents, sexually, physically, emotionally, whatever.
It's okay to get a little crazy with it sometimes. These stories are about X happening. What would it feel like -if- you shrank and -if- your mother turned into this sexually charged giantess who no longer saw her saw as a person but as a toy or less.
Of course, I'm sure we don't think of our own mothers when we read these things. We're thinking of pretty women. :D
Anyways, enjoying the read.
Author's Response: I think we share the same view and I agree with you. Furthermore, these stories are purely figments of my imagination and I like to explore all sorts of diverse aspects. I thought my other story Leverage was more far fetched than this. Anyways glad you're enjoying it.
[Report This]Date: May 02 2014 2:14 PM Title: Momentary Rest-bite
I'm glad the I-stuff is over! Now, maybe, he can make it to the new neighbor's yard.
Author's Response:
Haha I know after re-reading I feel like such an idiot! Let's wait and see eh.
Date: May 02 2014 10:49 AM Title: Momentary Rest-bite
Hoping the next chapter is when the new girl next door comes into the picture.
Awesomewell work so far
Author's Response:
You'll have to wait and see ;-)
Date: February 22 2014 7:08 PM Title: Power Shift
In chapter ll, Adam was shrunk down to 6 inches tall (when his mother picks him up out of the middle of her bed) - then, in chapter lll he's suddenly down to 3 inches tall?
Is he slowly getting smaller, or what? -just thought I'd point that out.
Kinda strange for his mother to actually, 'Want' to do this to her own son, too.
On Purpose, I mean, it's just a little farfetched, I think. Just my opinion tho', the story seemed to be getting off to a good start, but then it just felt kinda rushed after Sandy instantly puts him to work on her feet. You would think that the fact that she just found her son shrunken down to such a miniature size that that in itself would take a little bit of 'getting used to', if you know what I mean...
I think you can still pull out of it though, maybe...
Just my $0.02
Author's Response:
Fully taken on board, I'm going to try to adhere to these criticisms later on, thanks for reading.
Date: February 20 2014 3:00 PM Title: Power Shift
Wouldvlike tossed some of Abby too
Author's Response:
She will be involved shortly but you will have to wait and hold out for her. Abby's inclusion in the story comes later.
Date: February 15 2014 8:03 PM Title: The Dream
Imagine how disturbed he is now to realize how fast his mom was so fast to...you know...;) MY WHOLE LIFE WAS A LIE! Poor dude. lol. interesting start tho.
Author's Response:
Haha I guess that's one interpretation, although you could read it as purely the excitement of having such power. Thanks.
Date: February 13 2014 11:45 PM Title: The Dream
I like where this story is going, I'm a decent fan of good incest.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're on board, enjoy it while it lasts...
Date: February 13 2014 2:24 PM Title: The Dream
But...but...ITS HIS MOTHER!.....................Kill her with fire........
Author's Response:
Haha hey it's not that bad!
[Report This]Date: February 13 2014 12:10 AM Title: The Dream
I can see that this story has much potential. I hope you continue it and turn it into a fully fledged adventure =)
Author's Response:
As can I. Hopefully this story will run for a very long time.
[Report This]Date: February 12 2014 8:02 PM Title: The Dream
Extremely well developed, the scene is definitely set! I like the set up too. His mother being much younger than most, and the new neighbours moving in just at the right time...
The larger blocks of text is a little hard to work through. If you could break it up just abit it would be much easier on the eyes. Although, other than that, I have no other critic's...
Looking forward to the following chapters of this story. It seems like you've really got a handle on where your going with it, and I can already tell that it's going to go into my favorites.
Thanks for posting it! I'm on board! ;)
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it! I felt that the age of his mother was important as I have seldom read mother's being as young as Sandy is. Ah I'm sorry about that, I find that if you set the text size on 5 it is much easier to read.
You're more than welcome and I'm very pleased you're enjoying it as much as I am. Stay tuned for further updates.
Date: February 12 2014 2:57 PM Title: The Dream
I think this is a good start but I still need more to make a descision as to a score for this.
Author's Response:
No worries, completely understandable, hopefully Chapter II will whet your appetite.
[Report This]Date: February 12 2014 1:58 PM Title: The Dream
Intriguing opener! Welcome to the club.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it! I hope to continue with this and update it more frequently than that of Leverage.