Date: June 08 2014 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 9
I'm really enjoying this story. You should continue with playful vore and such. I want to see Susan swallowing many shrunken women :-)
[Report This]Date: May 31 2014 5:23 AM Title: Chapter 9
I love this chapter it really paints a good picture of what is going on I love vore so very near digestion was so sexy. I hope to see more soon!! One criticism I do have is if chapters could be updated a little faster maybe? I know it takes time to make brilliance like this so it's not important :)
- frankie
[Report This]Date: May 24 2014 10:31 AM Title: Chapter 9
Very nice chapter. Looking forward to the next one--curious about how Linsey managed to get out!
[Report This]Date: May 24 2014 5:49 AM Title: Chapter 9
My favorite bit was the quiet and muffled scream when Susan swallowed in her sleep. Too bad the camera died just before that. If Susan knows her audience, she can edit it in during post.
[Report This]Date: April 30 2014 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 8
Another really great chapter I loved reading in it I can't wait to see where this story goes in the future :). P.s slightly confused why some of the reviews say best story ever then only give 3 stars lol but oh well :)
-frankie
[Report This]Date: March 31 2014 9:35 AM Title: Chapter 8
Really hot story. I'm especially loving this new friendship between Linsey and Susan. Keep up the great work!
[Report This]Date: March 26 2014 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 8
Thanks for the new chapter! I had been waiting for so long..
Excellent job, once again! Please, don't stop this! I know I sound greedy but it's the best story ever!
[Report This]Date: March 26 2014 11:01 AM Title: Chapter 8
Nice chapter. Not as heavy on the actual swallowing as some of the others, but it feels like you're setting up for couple really fun encounters. I'm looking forward to them.
Keep up the great work!
[Report This]Date: March 06 2014 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 7
One of the best stories ever and just getting better! Bravo!
Date: March 06 2014 4:21 PM Title: Chapter 7
I love the characters you are adding to the story. I hope to see more of Jen and Susan interacting with a tiny girl.
I'm kinda surprised that Linsey didn't tell her mother what happened. Is she too afraid she won't let her go to school if she found out?
Author's Response: I meant to put that in this chapter, but yeah, that's her line of reasoning. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.
Date: February 26 2014 8:48 AM Title: Chapter 6
I like the addition of the new tiny. It opens up some possibilities. Now that there are a couple of them, one could actually end up being digested and the story could still continue.
I have a story idea/request, but I don't want to offend you by saying it here. Send me a private message if you're willing to hear it.
Thank you again for the story.
Author's Response: Thank you. I appreciate the review. I'd love to here your idea, but I don't actually know how the messaging works on here.
[Report This]Date: February 21 2014 8:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
Excellent! More please
Date: February 21 2014 4:56 PM Title: Chapter 6
I'm finding this story incredibly hot. I'm still uncertain how Holly can survive more than a few minutes without air in someone's stomach, but I'm also uncertain whether it matters. The fact that Holly enjoys being swallowed (by people she trusts, at least) makes her a girl after my own heart.
Date: February 19 2014 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 6
Wow, another tiny girl, this one even smaller! Quite an interesting development. Can't wait for Linsey to arrive at the school and join the antics. I wonder what her reaction will be to Holly's dangerous lifestyle.
[Report This]Date: February 19 2014 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 6
This story is really good. I am liking how you've introduced a new character to mix things up and this revealed healing power. Although this ability will lower the stakes as it is less likely the girls will be digested it does open new and exciting opportunities. Well done on this =)
Date: February 19 2014 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 6
Holly seems to be starting to enjoy living dangerously. I'm going to guess, based on the first chapter, that this still won't be the end of her yet. I wonder how Linsey would handle knowing that her fellow tiny (if not quite as tiny) girl is starting to like being "play-eaten." Something tells me she won't enjoy it as much herself.
On a technical note, while I can handle most of the minor errors I've seen, one thing that bugs me is your dialogue formatting. It gets a little tricky to follow conversations that are short sentences on the same line. The general rule is: when starting a new subject or someone else begins speaking, make a new paragraph. The lack of indication of who is talking makes it a little tricky sometimes, too. Just my two cents.
Date: February 18 2014 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 1
Please don't abandon this story. I've loved each chapter and I'm looking forward to more. Thank you.
Author's Response:
I'm not planning on abandoning it. I just haven't had much free time to write. I did just post a new chapter.
Date: February 04 2014 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 5
Loving the story! Just one little niggle; Try not to use the same first letter for the names of multiple important characters! It's confusing with all these Diane's, Danielle's, Holly's and Haley's!
[Report This]Date: February 04 2014 10:15 AM Title: Chapter 5
I love it! Please continue. I can't wait for the next chapter. :-)
Date: February 03 2014 10:35 PM Title: Chapter 5
Drunkeness and tiny people. Never a good combination. Very sexy chapter. I'm sure Holly's interaction with these other girls will be quite entertaining...assuming she survives Barbara.