Perfect. I enjoyed your imagination and detail. I just wished that the trip to the Mall was also described in detail as well. The conversation would have been interesting. Jim seems to be doing fine, how about Bob? Cant wait for next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!   The trip to the Mall would have taken place during the time period that we were watching Bobbys scene play out, so as I try and keep everything within the same time period, I was forced to narrative that part, rather than skipping back in time and all that jazz,... I guess I got a little bit lazy too!

A mother-in-law who's a gentle giantess? How refreshing! :-)

It remains to be seen, though, if Bob is going to wake up in the "protective" custody of a birdcage or a hamster cage?

I like this intimate start with Diane, but she needs to sound confident and sexy like she knows all the moves or something. A mother of five should have had plenty of experience. Diane's behaviour reminds me of a teenager who discovered pleasure.

There are plenty of moments where Bob is thinking, but I would like to see some thoughts from Diane. For example, im a panties fan, so maybe she could be thinking, ("You know", Diane thought, "I know exactly where to put Bob to hide him for the entire day"). (Then Diane says to Bob, "Little man, I got the perfect spot to hide you from Carly. You will be completely safe".) Then you can insert a narration, "Little did Bob know what Diane was talking about, but he felt reassured hearing that it was safe". (Just a suggestion. I enjoy a confident Milf).

Lastly, I hope Bob falls through the cup into her underwear or something similar. Or you can surprise me. :)

Keep it up, I like your commitment to posting rapidly.

Well, no help for Bob from this crazy family.  The way things are going, he's probably going to end up going native, since he's probably losing faith in his fellow man.

Thanks man, great story! Want more scenes with Sandra and Jim.

I know Diane won't do anything that will hurt her daughters, even at Bob's expense.  My hope is that she'll try to patch things up between him and Carly.  Maybe a little unprofessional marriage counseling if you will.  Otherwise things could get a lot worse for poor Bob.  And remember Chloe now has a vial of the stuff.  Who will she shrink?  I can't wait to see more!

Quite the--ahem!--little adventure he had there! But, now that he's back at her house, I still vote for discovery (even unaware capture) by the mother-in-law. ;-)

Author's Response:

Diane has you under her spell?...  Me Too!   I think your going to like the next few chapters...

I think I'm in lust wit' Carly! ;`)

Really nice update! Bob running away really spices things up, and hes completely right!...Any more of that and he'll end up buried in a matchbox in the backyard! Carly and her friends are insane! I kind of feel like sandra was treating him better, although looking at her now makes me shiver...I kind of feel bad for poor bobby, he seems like a decent guy and doesnt deseve to be humiliated and hurt by the one he loves.

I love this series and hope that it sees a proper ending! Having said that, I don't know how you can give this story a satisfying conclusion...Right now, bobby is stuck in a no-progression situation, and the bobby is starting to feel like a camera rather than a character.

Make him fight back a little, give him some more thoughts...The story is starting to suffer from what a lot of writters on this site succumb to which is: turning their main characters into cameras and putting them in set piece after set piece.

I loved the fact that Bobby got angry in this chapter and wanted to be in his dollhouse, a bit more of that would be nice! I hope you don't get bored and give up on this, despite my criticisms, I really do enjoy this story!