[Report This]Date: June 02 2014 7:19 AM Title: Chapter 8
After giving this a full read, this is becoming one of my favorite ongoing stories. I think the relationship between him and Haley is cute and I can't wait to see where you take it. Frankly, I hope the mystery of his shrinking gets solved but that he stays shrunk and has a future with Haley. I'll keep reading!
Author's Response:
I hope so too! Thanks for reading.
[Report This]Date: April 10 2014 12:40 PM Title: Chapter 7
Excellent chapter, you always leave the reader wanting more! I like the dream he had too!
Author's Response:
Hopefully some of his dreams will come true... =]
Date: April 10 2014 12:37 PM Title: Chapter 6
last sentence. so creepy
Author's Response:
I wouldn't mind Julie creeping on me.
[Report This]Date: April 10 2014 12:36 PM Title: Chapter 5
I like how you wrote her subtle hints she's giving. a nice touch of realism.
Author's Response:
Haley might be my favorite character that I've ever written.
Date: April 10 2014 12:33 PM Title: Chapter 4
I would love to be in his shoes at the end of this chapter...or actually IN her shoes lol.
Author's Response:
Someone will be in someone else's shoes before this is all said and done!
[Report This]Date: January 06 2014 11:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very much enjoying this. Keep up the good work and you could have a bona fide classic on your hands.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review, NFalc. I doubt that this will be a "classic," but I do think it's some of my best writing, at least plot-and-character-wise. I attribute it to the fact that I've been thinking about this story for months -- I just never actually wrote it because I wanted to finish "Perfect Dimension." I just hope I can actually close this one out. Anyway, thanks again for the review.
[Report This]Date: January 06 2014 9:19 PM Title: Chapter 6
This story is fantastic. I can really root for these characters.
aaron
Author's Response:
Glad you like it, aaron! Plenty more to come.
[Report This]Date: December 30 2013 12:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
So far, it's fine, but if I may be so bold, I'd suggest editing your author's note. There's nothing wrong with trying to write realistic characters -- indeed, I applaud the effort -- but there are several active stories right now that feature realistic characters and scenarios. The authors note distracts from the story, which should rise or fall on its own merits, and which so far is good.
Just my $0.02.
Author's Response:
Point taken. Thinking back, I vaguely remember being told that author's notes in general are no-nos, and that the reader's experience should be untampered with at all costs.
Anyway, I'm definitely aware of some of the stories you reference. In fact, your stories in particular (among others) inspired me to write more realistic encounters. I guess I just wanted to remark on the preponderance of fantastical characters/settings (of which I'm certainly guilty), and how I'd like to try my hand at imagining a more life-like shrunken scenario.
Thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: December 29 2013 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 2
This is my kinda story. I hope to see more. Great characters too.
aaron
Author's Response:
Glad you like it.
Date: December 29 2013 12:50 PM Title: Chapter 2
the name "sushi" is a funny and nice touch too.
Author's Response:
Within a week, I guarantee Carycomic is gonna come in here with something puntastic.
[Report This]Date: December 29 2013 12:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very good start so far. I loved the first chapter and the second chapter seems to be setting up well for the rest of the story.
Good luck with trying to make a girl want a footslave as realistic as possible. It shouldnt be too hard since your the one writing the story and there A Lot of girls out there who would want one, but would never admit it
Author's Response:
A lot of girls out there want a footslave? I'd like to believe that, but I'm not so sure. In any case, it's a moot point because I'd never scrounge up the wherewithal to broach the subject. =D
Thanks for the review!