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Reviewer: dilbertaco Signed [Report This]
Date: October 10 2018 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 1

Perfect little escape!  Bravo and creative!

Reviewer: Tunes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 16 2014 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 1

I know I'm a little late to the party, here, but I loved this!  Admittedly, I'm often not a huge fan of one-offs, but this was awesome and wrapped itself up very well.



Author's Response:

Thanks, Tunes. I think in the future I'll be writing almost exclusively one-offs. I just lack the wherewithal to really build a storyline/plot or whatever haha.

Reviewer: Nsolo6672 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 1

Awesomeness!

Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 1

Epic one off.

Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 1

Thanks for sharing this! It was a real treat. :-)

Author's Response:

Well I hope I didn't trick you into... ahh damn I got nothing. You win this round, sir.

Reviewer: Jacksmith Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 1

Very nice work.  You've got some solid description throughout that engages the senses well.  The sorority pledge dare was a nice touch to make the event seem a bit more plausible than just a couple of psychos showing up on the doorstep.  You did a good job in general of making the story feel self-contained, especially in the more light-hearted ending, compared to how stories of this type often conclude much more gorily.  If I had to critique something, I'd say the dialogue here and there from the girls was a little more stiff than it needed to be, such as how they don't use contractions as often as most college girls do, but that's a very minor nitpick.  Again, a great little tale here, 5 stars easily.



Author's Response:

I really appreciate the in-depth review, Jacksmith. I have to say on the description front I was actually inspired directly by some of your stories; I think you're one of the best at describing smelly feet (among other things) in creative and different ways. And actually, I decided to make the ending the way I did because I had been actively trying to avoid some of the tropes you are currently harping on in "The Chronicles of Jimmy Reynolds." In many of the stories put out today, the girl/antagonist is a totally unrealistic psychotic bitch (although obviously many of us find this sexy). In real life, I feel like you'd have to have some kind of spectacular motivation in order to actually kill/enslave someone; so while it's all fantastical smut in the end, I guess slightly more realistic characters in said smut might come off better.

Anyway, thanks for the tip on the dialogue. It's definitely an area that I've been looking to improve. Hopefully I'll be able to make some adjustments for the next story.

Thanks again for the review.

Reviewer: ltltb Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 28 2013 2:07 PM Title: Chapter 1

I'm not into feet but this is hot!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

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