Date: September 19 2015 11:44 AM Title: Chapter 1 The accident
Thanks for the reassurances, and I'll be looking forward to the succeeding chapters.
Because I was a technical writer in my pre-retirement life, I cannot help but notice when you make grammatical errors, so I'll be making notes about them (when I remember -- I get so involved with the stories that I sometimes forget to mention them) when I remember. Occasional mispellings I ignore, unless I see them repeatedly recurring. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I do know the difference between there, their, and they're. The reason it might get messed up is because I type fairly fast, I just do a quick read to make sure it comes up right, and the computer auto corrects if you type it wrong. I change them when I catch them when I catch them but a few get by me.
Date: September 19 2015 10:20 AM Title: Chapter 34
I guess I finally caught up to what's been completed! You have me wondering what purpose Nyarl is going to serve. Well done! I look forward to new chapters as they come out.
With regard to your English forms: their = belonging to them
there = where?
they're = contraction for they are
You do have a tendancy to misuse them, as well as a couple of other hominym forms.
Date: September 19 2015 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 28
I guess that I'm reading and reviewing long after you have written this story, but I will continue to leave a few thoughts about it.
I have found this story to be very entertaining, and quite original in outline. Only a couple of other writers (to my knowledge) have written stories involving races of giants who live side by side with other races, in a relatively peaceful manner. Unfortunately, one of them never finished her story, which I very much wanted to see completed. I hope that you will complete this story.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for reviewing! If it makes you feel better I'm not done writing this story. I got the mid story finally already planned out, its just a mixture of finding the time and inspiration to write it. When I do get free time to write it is usually taken up with a short story that intrigues me. Again thanks for reviewing and know that this story is still on the top of my writing to do list.
Date: September 18 2015 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 16
It would appear that I was wrong! How tragic... Meanwhile, you are still doing great!
Date: September 18 2015 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 15
Could I tender a guess, finally, that Icarus was born Prince Exia? I suspected this when the Mayor told Terra the story of the Elves.
Date: September 18 2015 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 11 Awakening
Fast bit of action... The mystery of Icarus intensifies!
Date: September 18 2015 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 10 Instinct
I'm sorry. I've never downloaded/uploaded on this site, so I can't begin to help you with that.
Date: September 18 2015 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 9 Connection
I won't criticize, since this is better than anything I have ever tried to write. I just want to cheer you on with a fascinating story that I'm enjoying.
Date: September 18 2015 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 7 Past to Future
Reads very well, and seems to be very promising. I can't wait to continue with the next chapters.
Date: September 18 2015 3:32 PM Title: Chapter 4 Escape
Great, revenge is best when least expected. Too bad the little man chickened out of a probable reward...
Date: September 18 2015 3:29 PM Title: Chapter 3 Sacrifices
Curiouser & curiouser! Is there a bit of sexual interest developing on either side?
Date: September 18 2015 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 2 The meeting
Interest continues. Hopefully, this little half-elf is able to accomplish something useful.
Date: September 18 2015 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 1 The accident
You have a good start, and I'm interested to see where this goes. Mostly, your spelling and grammar appear to be in order. The girl seems to be interesting, and the bad guys are definitely nasty. So, what's the hold-up?
Keep up the good work.
Date: August 13 2015 8:19 AM Title: Chapter 34
I kind of like the dynamics between the two, Icarus and Terra. Their physical relationship so far feels very real and easy to love.
Date: August 11 2015 12:22 PM Title: Chapter 34
Guess who's back!!!
[Report This]Date: April 19 2015 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 33
The new character is cool. He's very similar to Icarus. That probably why he spared his life.
Sure, why not for adding detail to 31x. The more material the better this story gets:)
[Report This]Date: April 19 2015 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 33
I am looking forward to the next chapter. It would be hilarious if Nyarl met Terra's family. Those women are so weird! XD.
[Report This]Date: April 19 2015 10:11 AM Title: Chapter 33
Great to see this story back! I love Terra and Icarus. You should add the bath part. I love when Terra dominates little Icarus
Date: April 19 2015 9:26 AM Title: Chapter 33
So this world still executes people for things they do not understand? Tragic. Nyarl deserves better.
Author's Response: It's a world where slavery is still a thing, only for humans, and the scars of the war two hundred years ago are still present. Beastmen did a lot of terrible things during the war. They are mostly savaged beasts that humans still fear. Try thinking of what would happen if a gobblin just popped up in the middle of a dwarven city. There is nothing the goblin could do to stay alive. The beastmen are only considered as monsters.
Date: April 09 2015 10:01 AM Title: Chapter 1 The accident
You have to continiue this, it is just such an awesome story. I'm okay if you don't continiue "Connected Fates" but you just HAVE to finish this story!