[Report This]Date: December 02 2013 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 8 Branding
Can Icarus only communicate with his master? Great chapter, I'm glad that there was an update to this!
[Report This]Date: December 02 2013 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 8 Branding
Nice chapter, I feel so bad for Icarus. Hopefully things will get better soon.
Glad your back writing again.
Date: November 06 2013 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 1 The accident
I sense a reference to the Dwemer but okay, I can accept it. I hope Icarus speaks soon but how can anyone know that he is in love with Terra if he has not said a word? I am curious and hope he speaks more to Terra or their relationship will not grow much unless Terra likes silent types.
I do want to know what happened to the elves and if Icarus is the last of the elves , keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Don't know what the Dwemer is, but this story is heavily influenced by ancient greece and rome. We'll learn what happened to the elves in around 4-5 chapters if someone hasn't already figured it out. To the question about how Atticus knew is because he is very "intuned" with those around him. Terra knew because he peeked a few times, cried when he had to leave, and worked himself ragged.
[Report This]Date: November 05 2013 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 7 Past to Future
Wow that history felt like a twist of lord of the rings, Elder scrolls and something else.
I can see why it took you so long to write. It had good information and answered a lot of questions; but not boring like history book.
Great chapter can't wait for what is upcoming.
Date: November 05 2013 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 7 Past to Future
Came up with a few ideas for the name to your land. I hope you like any of them or at least get inspired for an idea. I kind of just randomly tossed them out because I have yet to get the full feel of the land itself.
Ymir Zedra Galahad
Phidarie Skymira Inhert
Nithilis Epion Mythos
Asteris Xyn Lumina
Halya Jeanous Rem
Date: November 05 2013 11:26 AM Title: Chapter 3 Sacrifices
No, I meant this
"What caught her attention something about the size of a regular human palm on the right side of his back" I think he was either abused recently, or burned
Author's Response: Again I completely miss read your post, but I answered it in the reply right below yours. Your theory of Icarus being burned is extremely close to what it really is. I've hinted at it several times, but an actual answer will be posted next chapter.
Date: November 05 2013 9:08 AM Title: Chapter 7 Past to Future
Can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: November 04 2013 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 1 The accident
Wow, this is a great story! I'm glad I decided to take a chance on this one, its really well written and has a great setting. Im not usually a fan on miniGTS but Terra is a good enough character that she offsets this for me somewhat...Keep at it, this is definitely on of my favs at the moment.
Author's Response: Thanks for your opinion! This story will take a while to finish as we have only scratched the top of what it is about.
[Report This]Date: November 02 2013 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 2 The meeting
Hey Lance sorry about the late review, I got a bit carried away with my writing.
anyways its always good to see a story that goes day-by-day, in my opinion it keeps the pacing constant.
I also can appreciate the fantasy world you have created. It's unique enough to stand on its own, yet also easy to jump into thanks to your use of classic aspects of the fantasy genre.
Your main character is also unique seeing as she is merely 10ft tall. this is unusual since most stories on this website have giantesses well over 100ft. Its a good change in my opinion.
Good work Lancelot and keep on writing.
[Report This]Date: October 31 2013 10:05 AM Title: Chapter 6 For what price?
I enjoy it. So far I get the impression that Terra's greatest enemy will be society itself. Of course that may change if there will be an actual antagonist. Personally I did have some trouble identifying who was speaking but that's just me. Only other critisism I have is that I found a few of the confrontations a bit underwhelming as what started off as darker cruelty ended in a lightning quick resolution. It may be intended that way you can get to the bigger part of the story but it would be nice to see some of her enemies put up a little more of a fight. If there is any scene where Terra gets any bigger then I think I'll be bought. But please do not do that unless it was already apart of the whole plot.
Author's Response: I'll respond in sentence orfer of your review. The way it is now the human society doesn't accept other races unless there is a benefit. There will be an antagonist but he/she won't be intruded yet. Easiest way to tell who's speaking is that Icarus doesn't talk. Every event in the story is connected in some way. The solution to the three men was rushed but their role was to so that even terra can be helpless. What your reading right now is just an introduction to the story, and the main plot hasn't been revealed yet. There will be growing parts later on but I can't say too much more.
Date: October 30 2013 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 6 For what price?
O3ooooooooooooooooooooooooO
Author's Response: What?
[Report This]Date: October 29 2013 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 6 For what price?
Yeah that clears up the questions besides the cliffhanger.
Love this story and love the frequent updates.
Author's Response: I didn't mean for there to be a cliff hanger. I didn't feel like making a multi paragraph dialog for Atticus so I'm making the story itself into a chapter. The story should clear up thing s up even more. Lastly, I write as long as I can see that someone is interested.
[Report This]Date: October 29 2013 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 6 For what price?
And the plot just continue to thickens! I have a nagging feeling thag Icarus had his tongue cut, hence his inability to speak.
Author's Response: To put that feeling to ease, Icarus' tongue is still intact. I will say that Icarus can talk. Think of it as we have the ability to eat dirt, but we are naturally inclined not to. It will be revealed later in the story for Icarus' silence.
[Report This]Date: October 28 2013 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 5 Icarus
I really like that name "Icarus" it's different and sounds cool.
Pulse alot of questions have been answered. But now I have more.
Like why is Icarus a slave?
How will Terra react?
And a couple more but they'll probably get answered next chapter. Awesome story so far.
Author's Response: Originally his name was susposed to be Lucas, but Icarus makes more since later on. We'll probably get the answer to why he's a slave and Terra's reaction in the next chapter. Also I plan on adding a dialog explaining certain events. Thanks for reviewing and continue reading to find out!
Date: October 28 2013 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 5 Icarus
DRAMA!!!!
[Report This]Date: October 28 2013 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 1 The accident
i really can not wait to see where this goes, keep it up please
[Report This]Date: October 28 2013 12:33 PM Title: Chapter 5 Icarus
I am not sure if he should be doing that to Terra's saviour, she might not like it at all! I am enjoying this so do continue!
Date: October 27 2013 11:13 PM Title: Chapter 4 Escape
Well I am sure Terra will find a way to thank the little elf. My only reL criticism is that you might want to flesh out th chapters more.
Author's Response: I'll admit that I rushed this chapter, but I wanted to get out of the forest. Rhe second part was put in just to show that she got the rest of her money.
[Report This]Date: October 27 2013 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 4 Escape
Last chapter was really good, can't wait to learn more about that little elf dude. Seems like a mysterious character.
[Report This]Date: October 27 2013 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 3 Sacrifices
Yes, I actually did read Randall and Ashley in about one sitting and this chapter is a good addition even if nothing major happens. I want to see whaf adventures Terra and the elf boy get into.