Date: June 03 2019 4:42 AM Title: Chapter 7 - The Dreams
Absolutely love this story! Definitely love the world you created here. Crazy that his mother wasn’t even sad to give up her son at all and now he’s in the clutches of another woman. Hope he finds a way out.
[Report This]Date: March 29 2014 5:10 PM Title: Chapter 3 - The Family Friends
Oh, James.. What do you expect to happen now? Asra will want to keep you for herself, make a pet out of you, think that your the cutiest little thing that she's ever laid eyes ON!
Hey, one can HOPE! Great Chapter Dude ;`)
Author's Response:
Haha, thanks for your comment. I make these chapters on the fly so I don't really have a general direction I'm taking this. But I will say this, James isn't so small that only the giant world can dictate what he can and can't do. ;)
[Report This]Date: March 28 2014 6:08 AM Title: Chapter 3 - The Family Friends
One recommendation I have is to avoid capitalizing all spoken text. It should be sufficient to simply describe how James hears voices once or twice (i.e., very loud to him). Perhaps he covers his ears on occasion.
As for Asra, not sure that James is going to get the girl of his dreams after invading her breasts. Then again, maybe Asra will be forgiving of his predicament.
Author's Response:
Yeah, sorry about that. I was trying to be more descriptive, but I guess there are others ways to do that. For styles sake, I'll keep it as it is and change it for a new story if that ever happens. I'm slowly setting up the plot with how/why this shrinking condition happend and make this a character development for James as him coming to terms that he's still something other than a bug sized being. That may be true, or that may not be... he really just fell on her breasts and slide off the slope of her sweatshirt, there was no cleavage for him to fall into. But thanks for commenting though!