Reviewer: G Man Signed [Report This]
Date: February 12 2020 7:53 PM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

I had enjoyed the story so far!! Did you delete the other chapters????

Reviewer: spot Signed [Report This]
Date: May 29 2015 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

Howdy.

 

Sorry that I havn't commented on this before, but to be honest I just found this story.

 

I have to say how mcuh I have enjoyed reading and getting caught up with the story. I find the character development to be well paced. The story itself moves well, dwelling just enough on the fun stuff while not sacrificing a good pace.

 

Since this is my first comment on the story, I'll not nitpick anything. I don't want to come across as ungreatful for the story you're sharing with us.

 

I'm looking forward to seeing more and promise to be a lot more dilligent with the comments. As a writer myself I know full well the gratification of seeing the comments popping up.

 

TNX    *

Reviewer: realRS Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21 2014 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

This series is great fun and I really enjoy the gentle dynamic you're writing. 

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: September 30 2013 10:58 PM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

Maybe Kim is tough enough to beat the crap outta Cindy's bf, I certainly wouldn't put it past her...I've met quite a few chicks that could prolly kick my ass, and most of them fit Kim's description.

Awesome chapter, it was great to have Kim show this side of her!

Reviewer: Story smith Signed [Report This]
Date: September 27 2013 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

Kim doesn't seem like a girlly girl to me my friend I think she needs to stay that way. If there was a confrontation I would rather her throw a punch at Cindy than bitch slap her.

Of course it's your story so do what you please

Author's Response:

By girly Kim isn't a pushover. She can be emotional and sensitive at times but she isn't some super girly girl so don't worry. I'm looking forward to writing more chapters were she expresses both her sweet side and her more serious don't mess with me side.

Reviewer: reversehero Signed [Report This]
Date: September 26 2013 9:37 PM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

I feel i HAVE to write this Kim is nice but shes boring you make her appear to be different but she comes off as a blank slate she deserves better i want a deeper look into her mind then i like music and videogames why doesnt a normal guy please what is her reasoning not her sisters not johns mom what is hers? Id like to know what she can do that makes her better then the woman that broke his heart....

kim could be to gentle giantess as julia is to evil but you need to expand on Kim alot more please take what i say as harsh constructive critisium i look forward to more

Author's Response:

I see what you are saying, but please understand it's still early in the story. I'm using this time to establish the relationships, going into character detail and feelings is something I plan to do down the road. But don't think I'm brushing all this off, I am looking at the constructive critisium and using it. I may look over the next chapter and see if I can throw in some more character backstory and detail.

The concept for Kim was I wanted to make a girl look like she would make a great cruel giantess appearance wise. But flip the tables and make her sweet and caring.

Reviewer: Story smith Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24 2013 8:40 PM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

I like the story so far you made a smart logical move with his mother having trouble trusting giants keep up the good work

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24 2013 1:46 PM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

Parts of the chapter did make me chuckle, especially the parts relating to the magazine, although I do have a number of comments. The first is the spacing issue between sentences/paragraphs. There's way too much empty space and I hope you can sort the formatting issue in time for future chapters.

My second comment would be I don't think it's believable to ask a John if they are single after they just met, even if it is for her sister rather than herself. I don't think anyone would be so bold/forward so soon (unless they were in a nightclub looking for sex), especially since John was scared at first. It would be better to add some descriptive language to show that the two are getting along really well rather than be so blunt.

John was at first scared of Kim so I think such a question would make John feel a little uneasy perhaps, especially given what you told us about tiny people being abused (Kim mentioned her tiny sister after the question). I’m guessing she would be able guess that he was single anyway eventually. Not much human communication is actually verbal and body language says a lot. I'm not a psychologist, but things like tone of voice, fidgeting and hand/finger and eye movements are all important and there are surely more signs if you do a bit of research into human body language.

It’s just that with a few hours of first meeting she wants to know such personal things about John. Perhaps if you lead into it a little better and add more to the chapter that might work. For her to want to ask such a direct question as that she needs to first have a chance to properly judge John.

Maybe I’m wrong on this though. My reasoning would be that I feel there needs to be time for their friendship to blossom first as over time they learn more about each other rather than trying to cram lots of (important) conversation into one chapter. This could be such a good story so I don’t want my thoughts to act as a discouragement. I see these thoughts as something to consider. Obviously, you can ignore them if you wish, because you may have a different view on this. If you do, I’d like to see some justification. Maybe I’ve missed something about the characters, but I don’t think there was that much to go on because

I did also notice some minor grammatical mistakes.

Also here:

''You should meet my sis'' She is looking for a fellow little person like yourself.

The speech mark is in the wrong place.

Here:

''What! Hahaha sis your joking right?

You mean either: you’re OR you are

 

P.S. Sorry, I didn't intend for my review to be that long.

Author's Response:

Yeah for the grammer errors I usually check over my work but sometimes things like speech marks can slip since they can be hard to notice. As for the spacing I didn't intend for that much room to be between text. It was more so how the website handled my document I uploaded and not so much me.

 

In regards to Kim moving a little fast on the personal questions. I tried to establish that they broke the ice some when I mentioned how they made small talk during the project. Since this was the first time Kim and John actually talked to each other. My reasoning was Kim felt after that day she might not have many chances to talk to him about maybe dating her sister since unless they are paired together the shrunk and normal don't really hang out a whole lot. It's like when you meet a girl you like and you don't want to come off as fast but at the same time you don't want to risk not having another good chance to talk to them if that makes sense.

Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed [Report This]
Date: September 23 2013 6:33 PM Title: Chapter 1 The Way Things Are

Love this story so far.

I prefer gentle giantess so I'm enjoying that your writing something beside cruel.

Author's Response:

Thanks happy to hear it.