Reviewer: Jacksmith Signed [Report This]
Date: September 17 2013 5:04 PM Title: A weekend at my Parents

While this is a solid premise and you convey your ideas pretty effectively, it moves along so quickly that I think it goes beyond just dispensing with backstory and instead becomes more like summary.  I agree with the first reviewer; don't be afraid to beef this up a little more.  You have a lot of room to grow here without it becoming overly complicated, as you say you want to avoid.

Reviewer: William Signed [Report This]
Date: September 17 2013 2:21 PM Title: A weekend at my Parents

Well.. I think the idea is great. Don't get me wrong.  Its just this story here feels a little..rushed.  I felt like it was happening so fast I couldn't really get into it.

 

I know you're not trying to make a complicated story, but sometimes a little detail would really help make the setting seem more realistic.