Reviewer: William Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15 2013 2:31 PM Title: The walking paper.

I really like Male on Male interaction, despite being straight myself.  I know you will be getting a ton of reviews telling you to add women into it, but I would keep it they way you are going.  Its hard to find M/m stories these days.

 

Anyways, I read the first two chapters and I can say I really enjoy it.  When making stories the two big things it needs is a good setting and a good background story to go with it.  I would suggest spacing the dialouge though, you did good with the paragraphing but when I try to read what they are saying at times, my eyes have a hard time looking for who says what.

 

All in All I give it a solid 8 <3  Keep it up.

Author's Response:

I'll change it.  Thanks alot!  Hugs from Curtis