Date: September 21 2013 7:59 PM Title: Consolation
I really like the background setting for this story. Curious as to what road you'll take with the interaction between Jack and Penny. Also wondering if you'll be adding more in-depth characters among the Alphas - whether they are kind or mean-spirited. Overall, this story is very intriguing and I look forward to more soon.
Author's Response:
I've tried to set the scene to show that the Alphas don't really interact with the Betas on the same level - they view them as second-class citizens with little to offer. Like in life, there are a few more tolerant and sympathetic Alphas but they won't be too public about it, as they themselves will become ostracised from mainstream Alpha society.
Take it as a given that pretty much every Alpha either ignores or bullies people like Jack, so mean-spirited is the norm.
Date: September 20 2013 11:55 PM Title: Consolation
Been meaning to say this since it was posted. Great stuff, really like the world.
[Report This]Date: September 15 2013 11:03 AM Title: Consolation
Oh that gets interresting I can feel that :)
[Report This]Date: September 14 2013 1:52 PM Title: Introduction
I'm reall enjoying this story so far and i can only encourage you to continue.
I hope this story isn't forgotten
Author's Response:
I won't be forgetting about the story, but updates might be quite far apart. Ta, Imagin8
Date: September 13 2013 1:31 PM Title: Consolation
That was nice. I wonder if Penny will become his bodyguard. I can see their relationship blossoming.
Date: September 13 2013 1:16 PM Title: Humiliation
Wow; that chapter was pretty scary. I'm sure Jack will survive though.
Date: September 13 2013 1:05 PM Title: Introduction
It's a nice introduction and the explanation as to why the girls are bigger is actually quite believable, unlike in the a lot of stories. There's probably more I should be saying but I'm eager to get to the next chapter as I am enjoying the story so far. The description is generally good although I suppose a little more about the school would be nice. That's not too important though as the main focus is the girls and I see you have enough description about them. I especially like the emphasis on the legs as he wouldn't necessarily see their faces from his perspective.
Date: September 13 2013 9:29 AM Title: Introduction
I am guessing Penny was a late bloomer, became an Alpha at fifteen which is why she wont talk about her life beyond a year ago.
[Report This]Date: September 13 2013 7:52 AM Title: Consolation
You really should separate the character dialogue from the narrative text, a whole lot more! I say that as someone who was initially--and quite frequently--guilty of it, himself. Aside from that, this is a masterfully poignant story. :-)
Author's Response:
Done.
[Report This]Date: September 13 2013 7:48 AM Title: Humiliation
Please, don't tell me she's had a secret crush on him all these years! I know opposites are supposed to attract. But, to get her object of desire, this way? Even for a gts-story, that's a little _too_ conventional.
[Report This]Date: September 13 2013 7:43 AM Title: Introduction
Uh-oh! Looks like this trio has a new shopping mascot, after all.
Date: September 12 2013 10:37 PM Title: Consolation
Good start I would say, carry on. Characters are well written so far. Hope to see further development between Penny and Jack.
Date: September 12 2013 9:50 PM Title: Consolation
Really like this story and the length of it is perfect.
Thing between Jack and Penny are getting more interesting.
Date: September 12 2013 9:23 PM Title: Introduction
This story is pretty great so far. I've read other stories like this but unfortunatly they never seem to get finished. PLEASE DON"T FOLLOW THAT TREND! I have high hopes....Also would you be interested if other authors wrote stories in your universe? Maybe.
Author's Response:
I'm currently writing Chapter 6 and I've planned out for at least another 3-4 beyond that, so assuming I don't change it around drastically or drop it there will be more to come - it might take a while, as I'm quite a slow, anally-retentive person and I don't have a great deal of spare time! I can't promise there will be a 'finale' either, but I have plenty of ideas to keep it moving and potentially tie it up at the end.
In terms of other authors writing about this universe, I'd prefer that if they did they set is somewhere completely different and didn't involve any of the locations or characters I'm using - just so I have freedom to go in any direction and not worry about other people adding their restrictions to it. Another issue would be if anyone tried to expand on things like GH-X2, the way society functioned towards Betas, etc - which I'm planning to go into further detail on later - so if you'd like to write about a world with normal and double-size humans then go for it but please do your own take on it! Furthermore, it's not a completely new or unique premise; as I've mentioned in the story notes, I've merely taken a brilliant concept from a story called 'Classic Guys' and tweaked it to fit what I wanted - all credit to SpawnGTS for the highly realistic and compelling original.
Thanks for the kind words, Imagin8