Date: August 10 2015 10:58 PM Title: Introduction
I disagree with gadgetmawombo however.
Calling the police would simply worsen Jack. For one, Caitlin is rich, with a well connected father. The police would see the claim as being an attempt to blackmail her, or be a result of a kid with no friends trying to get attention. Plus Alex, Hannah, Caitlin, her rich family, and Amber would all refute Jack. Compared to Jack who has no one. Delon even thought it might be a sick joke, and he was one of Jack's only friends.
Things similar this happen in the real world, but with normal sized people, there is a reason you never hear about it.
Author's Response:
This is the sort of thing I'm going for.
In theory, calling the police could easily sort this problem out in a very deus ex machina sorta way - they'd come round to check, find a Beta boy being humiliated by at least one Alpha girl, get him safe and charges might be made if Jack wants to (he might not just so as not to take on the Reids and risk a legal battle). This means that a lot of people get involved, which leaves the story very little breathing room and makes it very complicated to continue without everyone being aware of what's going on - his parents will keep him at home and everyone will know what's happened to him, it'll become all about the aftermath of the event and not about pushing the story on.
In practice, as pointed out in the review, justice is rarely simple even when it should be, and I've chosen to take a more guarded view on the situation to reflect the kind of loaded deck stacked against Jack even if he is 100% honest about what's happened. I've tried to paint the picture that this sort of thing has happened before, and the Reids have managed to evade prosecution and even set up the precedent of people blackmailing them. The police therefore have reason to be cautious in steaming over to the Reid household and gaining entry, and who's to say that they've not been warned or incentivised not to follow through with this kind of claim by a higher authority who has had his wallet filled by Caitlin's father to keep this stuff at bay?
[Report This]Date: August 10 2015 5:53 PM Title: Realisation
Wow!
I thought Amber was going to be a playful one.
Instead she is just as scary as Caitlin or even worse!
At this rate, they are going to drown him. Or at least give him a taste of water boarding.
Not sure how long he will last. Caitlin has already broken him down, and now Amber is going to take him home after this? It's all going downhill for Jack.
With the new girls, I wonder if they can be any worse than Amber. I guess we will see soon.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: August 10 2015 5:47 PM Title: Realisation
Definitely agree with @gadgetmawombo!
These bitches need something to throw them down a couple of pegs.
Definitely loved the new chapter, and try to update soon!
Date: August 10 2015 5:12 PM Title: Realisation
Great chapter! I still don't know why these girls feel the need to torment the poor guy like this? Are their lives bad, it certainly doesn't seem that way. To me it looks more like a bunch of spoiled rich kids thinking they can do whatever they please with a poor kid and suffer no consequences.
I reaaaaallly hope that isn't the case and that these girls at least get a stern punishment of some kind. They can't keep him forever I would think and I really don't think they are crazy enough to kill Jack to keep his mouth shut after all this. Plus, Jack already told someone about all this, I really think he should have just called the police, at least they would have broken him out of the house!
Author's Response:
The girls are doing this to Jack because they can - he's half their size, an eighth their weight and strength - it's funny to them and they don't truly put themselves in his position as they've never had to think like that.
It definitely aligns more with the spoilt rich kids motif than anything else, it's not that they are always directly trying to torture him, more that they don't care if their insensitive actions seem like torture - being thrown through the air without warning and landing in the water is actually quite a scary and disorientating moment for Jack, but from their perspective they just tossed a little guy into a pool playfully and he swam up just fine.
Amber and Jack both have mean streaks and seem to enjoy his displeasure for whatever reasons, Hannah is quite ditzy and would appear to not really know or care that he might be upset, and Alex is an unknown quantity at the moment as she's been shown to be complicit in his humiliation before but isn't quite so keen at the moment.
Date: July 23 2015 6:38 PM Title: Complication
These bitches are crazy, and the parent's have some kind of sway over things! Basically, it doesn't seem like Jack is safe even if he managed to get away, what's stopping her from kidnapping him again?
[Report This]Date: July 23 2015 4:20 PM Title: Complication
Jack made a great point. If he fell asleep, when he wakes up, he might make sounds or he could snore during his sleep. It may be quiet, but when you are that close to Caitlin, a single movement is risky. He made the right choice.
This story has a lot of reviews. Especially a lot per chapter. I blame your writing; its just too good. This story is like a giantess thriller that even my own heart is pounding! I guess thats what makes it unique.
You would think that with Caitlin's power, she wouldnt mind just kidnapping another little guy. I really wonder what is her interest of Jack. Does she like him? Is she obsesed with him? Did Jack do something and she wants revenge? I dont think theres any connection. I think she just wants someone to control and someone that no one will care about. She even said that "he is the weediest kid in school". She wanted a nobody, someone that no one will miss. However, some people do miss him.
Penny and Delon miss Jack and now want him back. The question is how, especially in a deathtrap such as Caitlin's house.
Not only is Caitlin's house a trap, but she got a 'friend' who is gonna find Jack and guard her room.
I have a feeling that Amber will find Jack. Caitlin would never check her own teddy bear, but when you look at the teddy with a new set of eyes, one may find a good hiding spot and I think that is exaclty what Amber is going to do.
Another reason why I think that Amber will find Jack is becuase she is good at finding things, especially when Cailtin keeps calling her to help her. We can see this when Amber says "so, what have you lost, again" implying that Amber has helped Cailtin find other things before. She is specialized in finding things, and Jack is no different. He is a thing in their eyes, and even Jack knows it.
I dont know how Jack will escpae this one, but my bet is that he has to secretly make a deal with Amber to hide him, and then Amber has to fake the rest of her search as she hides Jack. Otherwise, I think he is screwed.
I cant wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: July 23 2015 1:12 PM Title: Complication
Unlike Edexdexx, I never SAW any of those movies. But, I do know that he won't be able to FOREVER evade AMBER.
;-D
Date: July 23 2015 11:26 AM Title: Complication
And the suspense builds. I'm glad that you're continuing this story. Really interested to see if Caitlin has some kind of secret love-hate relationship with Jack (which maybe is why she kidnapped him?). Also wondering how Penny fits into the coming chapters. Tingling with anticipation whatever the result. Keep posting it's getting juicy!
[Report This]Date: July 23 2015 10:06 AM Title: Introduction
Feels like Jack is in one of Saw horor movie traps, a wrong move ending in death or maiming. Sleep deprivation, two giantesses, gotta be getting hungry, nature calling. Next chapter/s going to be rough. Can't wait.
Date: July 23 2015 9:14 AM Title: Complication
Are you ever gonna make the story esrn its gentle tag, or are you just gonna keep stringing me on :p?
Great stuff as always. Looking forward to more (and renders!)
Author's Response:
Haha! Inevitably the story arc will continue along its current path for a while, but gentle content has been planned out and will take place. I cannot promise when, either in the context of the story or in terms of when I'll get round to it - but there will be more eventually.
Date: July 23 2015 8:25 AM Title: Introduction
Penny replied! They will need some Alpha help if he wants to live, Penny will be key although not in a fight, Caitlin is way too strong for Penny.
Date: June 27 2015 4:00 AM Title: Dissipation
Love the story, hope you continue!
[Report This]Date: June 03 2015 10:54 PM Title: Dissipation
Well you've done the job and you've done it well. I do agree with what you said earlier, Caitlin's disirability juxtaposed with her cruel nature make for an interesting source of conflict all on their own. But with that one scene of her breaking down and showing physical emotion, you've significantly increased her depth as a character.
This comes complete with two benefits to Caitlin as a character.
1) Now we have a little mystery in her. If Caitlin is capable of being emotional and feeling grief, is it possible she wasn't always cruel? What was she like before? What turned her this way? Does it justify what she's done?
2) Now we have a little mystery for her future. Will she repent? Will she redeem herself? Will she continue to be an antagonist? Will she humiliate Jack further? Will she go too far? Will she befriend him? Will she hurt him? Will she eventually turn everyone in the school against her through her own cruelty?
At this point, I don't even care which direction you take it now. Caitlin could do any number of those things and, if handled well, any one of those outcomes would make a great story. More likely, though, Caitlin will remain the antagonist as it appears that Penny may already be the female protagonist of the story. Not to mention, no other potential antagonists have shown themselves, outside of Caitlin's friends. I'm actually thinking I like Caitlin better as the bad girl. She's just so damn sexy and dominating. I don't think anyone else that's been shown in the story so far could do a better job of replacing her as the "villian"
But none of that matters. What matters is that there is a mystery to look forward to in this story, and that's going to keep everyone coming back for more.
[Report This]Date: June 03 2015 10:52 AM Title: Introduction
Wow super interesting chapter, Caitlin showing some actual humanity for once. It doesn't seem like it was a mere ploy to draw Jack out. I wonder if she has legitimate feelings for him or some kind of issues stemming from her background. Can't wait to find out about this new depth that's been created for her.
[Report This]Date: June 03 2015 3:49 AM Title: Introduction
After a few months off the site, I come back and find this piece of literature finally updated after almost a year!! Yeah!!!
Gonna be honest; this is the one story that got me introduced to the site.
It's good. Still good. Just... please don't make me wait so long for an update again; that was almost as brutal as Caitlyn's treatment of Jack was. Especially after this relative cliffhanger.
Date: June 01 2015 3:37 PM Title: Dissipation
oh shit dawg
the suspense
Date: June 01 2015 12:36 PM Title: Introduction
By the wait, how does Jack see being inside in the teddybear?
Author's Response:
The bear is made of quite a chunky knit material, which you can sort of see through. Imagine putting a woolly jumper over your head - you can see through the little holes between the wool surprisingly clearly, without being seen.
[Report This]Date: June 01 2015 12:09 PM Title: Dissipation
Im with Antagoniser here.
This is the best chapter yet in this story!
Jack pulled the 'hidden in plain sight' card and he is doing a great job with it. (but for how long, i have no idea.)
Caitlin's reaction was great and it was realistic. I could sense her rage as she was already frustrated with whatever she was doing prior to arriving at home, and now she was steaming with fumes from her head and now Jack can feel it too as she cools down by unintentially hugging him.
It sounded like she destroyed her room just trying to find Jack. Now imagine Caitlin finding Jack. Man, I cant wait when that happens.
I really wonder. Does Caitlin know that Jack is there inside her teddy? I have a feeling she does and is pretending that she has no idea, forcing Jack to remain still whenever she is present.
Or, this is the best unaware scene that I have seen in a long time.
Since Jack is 'gone' in Caitlin's mind, does she need something else to relieve her? Will she have sex with the teddy? Will she strap that dildo on the teddy and use it like a sex toy, all while Jack is inside it?
I mean, you did mention that the neck region of the teddy was worn down a bit. Could happen.
I believe its Saturday now, so Caitlin might stay at home all day, or possibly stay in her room all day. That could be a problem for Jack.
There are so many possibilities; I just cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Caitlin is unaware that Jack is inside the bear, it wouldn't make much sense for her to pretend she didn't know if she did, either - she would have dragged him out instantly.
This is a big bear toy that Caitlin simply likes to cuddle at night, while I won't deny that there is something a bit telling about the fact that she enjoys holding onto something similar in size to a Beta like Jack - it's not because she views, or treats, her teddy as a sexual object.
It will be Saturday in the morning, and if you remember, someone will be coming round...
Date: June 01 2015 9:53 AM Title: Introduction
Wow... just wow. Best chapter yet, Caitlin's rage and then breakdown was amazing. Desperate to find out what happens next!
Date: June 01 2015 5:59 AM Title: Dissipation
I'm with gadget, no sympathy for this monster direct to jail ! great chapter: PS: make her pay imagin8 please!