Date: February 02 2019 10:37 PM Title: Prologue
Just found this one. Fantastic story, I read it all in one sitting :)
[Report This]Date: September 28 2013 12:40 AM Title: Epilogue
I liked all stories very much. You were very creative in humiliation Dan experienced. E.g. how Steph played with Dan in chapter 5.
The plot was slowly developing and there was a tension what will happen next. I had a feeling that the chapter 10 is just a beginning. I was looking forward to read how Julia would slowly turn Dan into her pet and her sister Leslie would assist. I had a feeling that everything just starts.
But then you wrote last 2 chapters. In my opinion they did not fit to the previous style. I think you just wanted to end - but I do not understand why.
Anyway thanks for great reading!
Date: September 26 2013 9:28 PM Title: Prologue
I am an honest person when I read something. I am not trying to say that your stroy is bad, but to be honest I was expecting other type of development, well considering the title. I did not like the outcome of Dan. I don't know, I feel it was unfair. Oh well, you hooked me up in the story, except the last chapters, even though good job, I expect more stories from you.
[Report This]Date: September 26 2013 5:48 PM Title: Epilogue
This was kind of unexpected.
Not complaining but it was kind of from left given how nice and reasonable Julia was at first or even Kat a little.
Still well done.
[Report This]Date: September 26 2013 4:06 PM Title: Prologue
Gtswburg: great story, as usual. You may not actually live in New York, but the way you described the place seemed very authentic, at least to this infrequent visitor. Your descriptions in general are top notch as well; I love how your writing conjures such vivid images. I'm definitely repeating myself from previous reviews, but I really admire how lifelike your characters are. It's almost like you modeled the characters after people you know, thought about how they would interact given this crazy situation, and just wrote it down. While some of Dan's behavior really aggravated me because I would never make the same decisions, that was part of the fun of the story. He's like a real person -- and with that comes unpredictability and stupid decisions.
If I had to make a criticism, it would be this: I feel like most SM stories are predicated on some kind of intention by the GTS to willfully entrap or capture the SM due to some kind of vengeful motivation. I get that Kat would freak out and pass Dan off to his ex-wife. I also get that her friend might be the ditzy hippie type that we're all familiar with, and wouldn't necessarily want to rush Dan to the hospital. Where it gets tough for me is how Leslie and Julia interact with Dan; he has a real, serious, impossibly ludicrous problem. In many stories on this site (like the Chelsea Dewinter story you wrote) that problem is brought on intentionally and the GTSs torment the SMs gleefully. However, in this story Leslie and Julia move swiftly from trying to help Dan to callously dismissing him. Maybe I'm suffering from cognitive dissonance due to a purposeful decision on your part -- it's creepy how quickly they start mistreating Dan. Maybe your characters seem so lifelike that it's actually a disadvantage -- I can't believe that a doctor and an ex-wife wouldn't do more for someone they at one point cared about -- someone who is suddenly hit by this unbelievable affliction. Or what if I'm so unsettled by this because I'm afraid it could happen to me? I'm not sure, but I felt kind of weird about the situation and how it unfolded, but I also kind of enjoyed how you twisted around real-world expectations. So maybe this isn't a criticism at all: just an observation.
Anyway, thanks for the great read. Can't wait for your next piece!
[Report This]Date: September 26 2013 12:13 PM Title: Epilogue
[Original review revised and conjoined with prior one.]
[Report This]Date: September 26 2013 12:12 PM Title: Chapter 11
Same old double standard. A woman can claim her relationship with a younger man is purely Platonic. But, when a man (truthfully, in this case!) says the same thing about his relationship with younger woman (a celibate vegetarian, in this case!), he is totally disbelieved. Either way; this was a good story. Perhaps not a happily-ended one. But, still good, just the same.
Thanks for sharing it with us! :-)
Date: September 26 2013 11:43 AM Title: Prologue
Yeah I have to agree, that ending was very depressing, but I guess its kind of realistic in many ways..
Date: September 26 2013 8:57 AM Title: Prologue
What a depressing story.
[Report This]Date: September 25 2013 11:43 PM Title: Prologue
I didn't see that coming! I was hoping the shrinking would have rekindled their relationship, but that doesn't appear to be the case. Because of the title of this story, I think she's going to keep him around, but not in the way he was probably hoping. I wonder if she's going to have his doctor take care of him. Considering that doctor is her sister who doesn't like him, might make for some interesting chapters. I wonder if there's anyone who get take care of him?
Good story! I can't wait for more!
[Report This]Date: September 25 2013 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 11
Wasn't expecting this...well not yet anyways.
Good stuff.
[Report This]Date: September 24 2013 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 10
The 'chest-sized' chunks of chicken, and Julia's referances to certain size comparisons had a suttle, but enormous fear effect. Her cold silence at the end, and leaving him a worn sock to use for a bed, left the impression that Dan had better make himself a bit more useful... and start showing some admiration to the towering giantess lawyer...
You have taken every aspect of a powerful woman,. and multipled it !
I love this!
You just got added to my favorite authors.... ;`)
[Report This]Date: September 24 2013 9:17 AM Title: Chapter 10
Probably not, Dan. And, I think the same thing could be said for Julia hating you or being vindictive towards you, now that you're shrunk. Mischievous, maybe!
But, definitely not maliciously so.
[Report This]Date: September 23 2013 12:47 PM Title: Chapter 9
I love this story very much. It is just perfect.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2013 1:18 PM Title: Chapter 9
As far as I'm concerned? Each chapter (like this one, for instance) is worth the wait. I especially loved the plausibility of Dan's cliff-hanging anxiety attack!
[Report This]Date: September 21 2013 9:12 AM Title: Chapter 9
Well done. I absolutely loved this chapter.
aaron
[Report This]Date: September 21 2013 12:27 AM Title: Chapter 9
Ah a tiny stroke/heart attack. We may have found his trigger.
Date: September 21 2013 12:11 AM Title: Prologue
Julia is fairly nice to him and seems to care about his wellbeing at times, other times it seems like hes just an item to her.
Id like to see where things go from here, it does seem rather interesting.
[Report This]Date: September 10 2013 12:56 PM Title: Chapter 8
That chapter went better than I could've hoped. Can't wait to see what happens next.
aaron
[Report This]Date: September 10 2013 12:41 PM Title: Chapter 8
Whoa! You the (shrunken) man, Dan.