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Date: September 11 2013 3:58 AM Title: Chapter 14 - Pivotal Hypocrisy

Still don't understand how she justified killing Nancy, unless Nancy was a murder or rapist herself...

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Date: September 08 2013 9:51 PM Title: Chapter 13 - Poor People

Damn you for stopping at this cliffhanger but I understand a story teller's ways and such.

 

Really looking forward to the next chapter

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2013 10:22 AM Title: Chapter 13 - Poor People

I'm kind of hoping this is just a trick to see how Holly has changed.

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Date: September 06 2013 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 1 - It is MY Birthday!

I beat UHF to the 40th comment

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Date: September 05 2013 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Crystal Clarity

When you said "astronomer", did you mean "spelunker"?

Author's Response:

In chapter nine, Susan uses astronomy as a metaphor to explain to Holly that the universe does not revolve around her.  She uses the discovery of Galileo Galilei (that the earth rotates around the sun, not the other way around) as an example.

It was not meant to be taken beyond that chapter, sorry for the confusion.

 

 

 

 

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Date: September 05 2013 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Discipline

I have a few ideas about Nancy and now Susan but I'll let things play out.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: September 05 2013 3:46 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Discipline

Make them stab each other with needles, joust-style.

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Date: September 01 2013 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 11 - Crystal Clarity

Wow. In-story time it's been like five days and Holly's already given up? Man, she really is pathetic...

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Date: August 31 2013 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Crystal Clarity

I bet she can't do that push up... Well, neither can I, so...

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Date: August 31 2013 11:47 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Crystal Clarity

What did she mean by astronomer? I must know!

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Date: August 31 2013 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Crystal Clarity

However this ends we're all better off for having it written.

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Date: August 29 2013 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Predation

Great stuff good sir.

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Date: August 28 2013 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 9 - Holly Galilei

Hm... Astronomer, huh? I wonder what Susan has planned... Maybe stick the cage outside for a few nights so the spoiled brat knows what it's like to be homeless and without blankets...

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Date: August 26 2013 3:54 PM Title: Chapter 9 - Holly Galilei

Spinning more gold I see.

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Date: August 26 2013 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 9 - Holly Galilei

HOORAY!

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Date: August 25 2013 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 8 - Bruce Almighty

Nice use of the Greta Nightmare from Elm St. 5.

 

GREAT story.

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Date: August 25 2013 12:25 AM Title: Chapter 1 - It is MY Birthday!

Im sorry to say, but I hardly know what happened that chapter. Was part of it a dream sequence, or a memory, or something? It may just be me being an idiot, but I couldn't follow what was happening in that chapter :(

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Date: August 24 2013 10:13 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Beneath Her

I think that going a day or two without food will be good for her. She's probably never missed a meal in her life.

Also. "Holly Pocket". You clever bastard.

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Date: August 24 2013 7:52 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Beneath Her

I'm moving this into top ten of the year status.

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Date: August 23 2013 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 6 - On the Wings of Justice

This is the greatest after school special ever.

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